Can you see how I feel?
A Poem by
Kyle
These try to express strong feelings I had for someone about 6 years ago. I was conflicted since she wasnt free to be involved.
It is so obvious I am sure The way I feel about you Do you notice though my eyes? Can you see how I feel? I don't see others only you I always listen to you, your voice When you are around no one else is When you speak all is quiet When you feel something I do too When you want an opinion I take your side When you look at me I am calm and alive When you walk into a room no one else is there When you need something I am there When you ask I always answer When I leave for a while I worry about you Are you going to be ok? Do you need me for something? When you are not ok I notice right away When you are upset I ask if I can help When you laugh I look at your face When you frown I see your sad eyes I want you to know How I feel I want to know could you feel the same? I'm afraid you may want another another man Could this be true? This would hurt me so much When you are somewhere else I am with you When I am away You are always with me When will I be able to tell you? Of my true love for you? What will you say To my expressions of love?
© 2011 Kyle
Author's Note
This is straight from my heart.
Featured Review
In the third to last stanza you repeated the word "another" twice. Unless that was intentional. Anyway, this was a beautiful write, and I loved how you posed a situation and ended it with a respnse:
"When you look at me I am calm and alive
When you walk into a room no one else is there
When you need something I am there
When you ask I always answer"
I thought it was great!
Posted 12 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Awe this write is so sweet and tender. I enjoyed this, thanx for your kind review
Posted 12 Years Ago
Awe this write is so sweet and tender. I enjoyed this, thanx for your kind review
This is such a gorgeous write! I love the emotion that flows so effortlessly throughout this piece. It really does sound as though it comes straight from the heart.. I Love it :)
~Em
Posted 12 Years Ago
This is such a gorgeous write! I love the emotion that flows so effortlessly throughout this piece. It really does sound as though it comes straight from the heart.. I Love it :)
~Em
As wonderful a love poem it gets. Beautifully writen with perfect flow and style. Superb man. Glad I saw you were back on here.
Posted 12 Years Ago
As wonderful a love poem it gets. Beautifully writen with perfect flow and style. Superb man. Glad I saw you were back on here.
I love this... it really straight from the heart!!!
Posted 12 Years Ago
I love this... it really straight from the heart!!!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
This is what every girl wishes to hear from a lover :)
Very sweet and romantic =)
and my favorite too !
Posted 12 Years Ago
This is what every girl wishes to hear from a lover :)
Very sweet and romantic =)
and my favorite too !
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
this is adorable!
Posted 12 Years Ago
this is adorable!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
This is ever so heartfelt Kyle. I know how it feels. I thought this young man I met felt something for me and he really let me down when he told me he never loved me but he still was in love with his ex girl friend. I am ok but it took time. Bess
Posted 12 Years Ago
This is ever so heartfelt Kyle. I know how it feels. I thought this young man I met felt something for me and he really let me down when he told me he never loved me but he still was in love with his ex girl friend. I am ok but it took time. Bess
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
ooooooo....LOVED IT!!! when a piece is written from the heart it speaks so much louder... and this was amazing!! I love the flow of question and confession...
**tips my lyrical wand to you**
great work!!
Posted 12 Years Ago
ooooooo....LOVED IT!!! when a piece is written from the heart it speaks so much louder... and this was amazing!! I love the flow of question and confession...
**tips my lyrical wand to you**
great work!!
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
Enjoyed reading this.Maybe a bit breathless,but full of goodies like..... calm and alive and... when you walk into a room.....Honest.Good work.
Posted 12 Years Ago
Enjoyed reading this.Maybe a bit breathless,but full of goodies like..... calm and alive and... when you walk into a room.....Honest.Good work.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
I really like this it pulled on my heart strings.
Posted 12 Years Ago
I really like this it pulled on my heart strings.
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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Added on October 28, 2011
Last Updated on November 16, 2011
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Kyle MN
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I need to focus on my writing more. I tend to write something decent, and then lose interest.
My goal is to finish some of the things that I have started and post them soon.
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