That didn't just happen!

That didn't just happen!

A Story by Kyle
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Sometimes when people make bad choices they get punished by circumstances.

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A few years ago I was feeling hunger pains as I left my job as a salesman working for C.V.N. , a large distributer of consumer products.  It had been a long day with many demanding customers.

 

As I started out on Highway 7 I realized I was going to need to stop at Wendy’s Restaurant for a meal before going home.  I pulled into the drive thru and placed my order through the intercom.  I noticed ahead that the young lady who was taking my order was blonde and very pretty.

 

When I arrived at the window to pay for my food I was shocked to see that the girl taking my order was Gina, an old girlfriend from high school.  She was very flirty as she took my money and gave me my food.

 

We talked for a few minutes at the window that night, and she finally said, “So are you seeing anyone these days Kyle?”   I responded “No.”  (truthfully) and Gina gave me her phone number and asked me to call her.  Gina’s hand held mine for a moment as she handed me her number and she appeared interested in seeing me again.

 

The next day I called her and we talked for a long while.  We talked about how things didn’t work out well while dating and how maybe we had made a mistake by breaking up.  We made arrangements to go out on Friday night after she was finished with work.  Gina told me to call her at about 7 pm since that would be about the time she would be done with work.  She had asked if I could pick her up from work and drive her home since she lives close to me.  Then I would leave her at her home and allow her to take a shower and so on and then pick her up again an hour or so later once she had made herself look beautiful again.

 

I called Gina at work at about 7 pm and was told very quickly that Gina “was busy”.  A few minutes later a friend of mine called and he then asked me to go to a wild, crazy party in Hopkins, a nearby town.  He kept telling me that all of our friends would be there and that there would be many kegs and pretty girls there.  I told him I would have to call Gina again and see what was going on, and if things didn’t work out with her then I would join him in going to that crazy get together in Hopkins.

 

I immediately called Gina again at the restaurant and Gina herself answered.  She told me she was really tired from a busy day at the restaurant and that I should call her again in about an hour.   After I hung up the phone I immediately called Harlan my friend and said, “All systems are Go!”  He said he would be over in about 45 minutes to pick me up for the party.  Although I had told Gina I would be calling her back, I still didn’t like that I was being told to wait when I wanted to get the evening started.

 

I was feeling guilty as Harlan showed up at my door.  I wasn’t quite ready to go though as I needed a little more time in the bathroom and I needed to find a few things.  Of course as soon as I was set the leave the phone rang and it was Gina.  She seemed more upbeat now as she asked me to drive over and get her.  I told her I wasn’t coming since I had to wait so long and I finally told her, “I’ve gotta go Gina.”  And I hung up the phone.

 

About 30 seconds later Harlan and I were talking animatedly while walking to his car about how much fun we were going to have that night.  I noticed that Harlan had strangely parked in the middle of our driveway.  Usually he would park on one side or the other of the driveway.  The car looked cockeyed the way it was and I then did a double take as I suddenly noticed a large amount of a heavy looking white substance land on the side of his car!   Apparently a flock of birds had all at the same time decided to s**t on Harlan’s car and virtually all of the bird s**t happened to land on the passengers side of the car.  I had to climb in the back seat in order to open up the door since so much bird poop was all over the passenger side of the car!

 

Harlan and I laughed all the way to the car wash.  But in the back of our minds we couldn’t help but think we were being punished somehow.

 

About a half hour after we left, Gina arrived at my house.  Gina was upset and stormed the house assuming I was just ignoring her and pouting about her having me wait for an extra hour.  Gina yelled at my roommate telling him I was being a baby.  After Gina left my home and returned to her car she realized that she had locked her keys in her running vehicle and had to call AAA to come and help her to get back in the car.

 

Gina and I never spoke again.

© 2011 Kyle


Author's Note

Kyle
Sometimes you get shit on when you make your lady mad.

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I enjoyed reading this story. I am not one to invest extra time into stories but that is all you have here so I am flexible this time :)

This seems like a personal story and if it is not then you have a very vivid imagination and a nice way of transitioning details of perceptions, emotions, visual cues and desires met through hunger in the physical form; as well as emotional.

When you spoke of fast food restaurants, roommates and Gina being an ex from highschool - I got a sense of age....late teens early twenties - which is a great thing to feel - you ignited the reader's imagination by showing the environment rather than telling us...





Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Great story telling. This did justice in the realm of getting the message across. Great message. There's lot of times where a story can have a great message to aim for, and have a lot of under lining things but then no one gets it, and if no one gets it, then the point has failed. But in my opinion this did well to get the message across. You made it clear, which is why I think it's good. Keep up the good work. What was also great was that I could imagine the story as I read it, and that is also a strong point of stories. The ability to have the reader imagine it because after all we're reading not watching it, but it was as if I was there as I read this, and that is great. Great visuals and great story telling. It had plot and substance. When you add substance to writing it gets that much better. It gets the reader hooked on it and make them feel as if they are part of it. As long as their is that emotional connection between the reader and the story then it's good. The connection you were able to established in the writing gives the reader a sense of comfortably that they are in tune with the writing. So that way when the writing is over, the reader wants more, and wishes it didn't end. I feel the same way when I watched a movie or tv series that I get so attached to, I never want it to end. And for this writing, I didn't want it to end. You had me hooked, and I am sure everyone else who read it was hooked as well. That is good, that is what you want for people to keep wanting more. The way you put the story together makes me feel like my life is different for that moment in which I read your story. I love it, and it was beautiful. Just keep posting stories like this, and you'll have a good following.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Very amusing story....I wonder how it would have went if you had decided to go on that date with her. I have been thinking lately how our decisions can have profound alterations in our lives....they seem minscule, but they can be life-altering choices.Who knows what would have happened if you didn't go to that party....or perhaps by going, that too, could change everything if you met someone there. I have to believe that the hand of fate guides us somewhat...if it is entirely left to chance then life turns into an enormous crap-shoot.

Posted 12 Years Ago


The angry birds picture perfectly matches the story :)
Loved the story ! :D

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wow, what a story, makes me wonder if its true.
Made me laugh actually, it kind of reminded me of humans and mother nature lol. we mess with her planet telling her we're gonna make ammends the damage we are doing to her world and then when we don't see immiediate results we stop caring and then she lets all hell break loose in the forms of hurricanes and tsunamis lol.
anyways thats just my opinion.
good write.
Dreya

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

And this is one of the real life moments, how certain things can grow, prosper, thrive, and die. Because everything is ultimately only relatively ~ Nice piece of reality, of you Kyle, if it was reality, you penned it well out from your memory! lovely Job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You create and continue to develop your stories so well that it leaves the reader wanting to find out what happens next..keep up the good work...when writing stories the object is to hook the reader soon as possible so they wont want to put the book down...you have done this beautifully...two thumbs up!!!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

It's very realistic and funny! Everyone was getting revenged-on that night. I like the simplicity of it and the ending was good. The Angry Birds picture drew me to it :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


Another enjoyable read! Love is tough and you really brought out the hardship of a relationship.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very amusing story. Seems like it came from personal experience! :) I agree with Natalie that there were some extra details that you could leave out, like where you work--that didn't add anything to the story and wasn't an especially hooking beginning. With a story as entertaining as this, you want the beginning to reflect how the rest is going to be. And I loved the Angry Birds picture--perfect.

Posted 13 Years Ago


karma is a b***h in Prada heels and diamond boxing gloves~ she don't play~ LOL
entertaining !~

Posted 13 Years Ago



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