Echoes of you

All I did was think of you today.

The grim vision of you is constantly replacing the last exquisite sight of you.

I am haunted by the words I never once spoke to you

i

love

you

And by the way we would use our words and mere actions

to bash our heads into the gorgeous walls you and mother

took weeks to paint

not even realizing at the time the beauty and hard work instilled.

So now,

here i am today 

sitting in the newly abandoned house which used to echo

tears, laughter, happiness but above all.. family

mesmerized in my thoughts by the way the leftover pieces of drywall

lay where we left them to rest

echoed by the pain of my family and myself

All I saw today were flashbacks

of our last goodbye when I was waiting on so many more

even if I've never been one for goodbye's 

I would take a million more heartbreaking doors closing between us

if it meant i got to keep you for just a little while longer.

i

miss

you

Reviews

[Sarah Wolfe]

I love your use of line breaks. It really sets a pace for the poem and slows the reader down, causing more reflection and deep thinking within your audience. Nice job setting the tone for the poem and also using parallels within it. Great work!

[Kylee]

Thankyou! I try and write the way i thought of the piece.. if that makes sense!

[Coyote Poetry]

Kind and sweet words for love. I like the flow of thoughts leading to the every good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Kylee]

Thankyou very much :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Julie Fran]

Your use of description is beautiful. For example about the drywall and how you bashed heads into the gorgeous walls you and mother took weeks to paint. Their's a lot of solid emotion and things others can connect too. It's fabulous. :)

[Kylee]

Thanks very much :) I've been trying to work on better descriptions so that's really good to hear that i've been doing well.

[Relic]

Very sad. Its funny how we have all the time in the world to express our love but never do it. This was touching.

PS. Your title sounds familiar. :)

[Kylee]

Thankyou. My fathers death has been a huge writing outlet for me lately, almost everything I write is circled around him. I didnt mean to steal a title, I dont ever title my pieces in my journal so I just went with whatever popped into my head first!

[Relic]

I know you didn't steal the title. I thought it was funny because I used it too. I'm really sorry about your father. If it helps to write than do it. :)