OH YOU CRUEL DEATH

I can feel it coming,

Relentlessly coming after me,

I knoweth its craving for my soul,

As it did to those who have gone before me,

I shall keep running,

But I knoweth that one day it shall over take me,

 

I feel its cruel presence in the early mornings,

And in the darkness of the nights,

i don’t know when,

I don’t know how,

I don’t know where,

I shall keep running,

But I knoweth that one day it shall overtake me

 

Oh death! The separator of husbands from wives,

 

     Oh death! The separator of parents from children,

 

Oh! Death the separator of siblings,

 

    Oh! Death the separator of great friends

I shall keep running but,

I knoweth that one day you shall overtake me,

 

Oh death!

Oh death!

Oh death!

 

Reviews

[Tania Leigh]

I love the use of the old language in this, and it has great rhythm in the second half, like a chorus.

Excellent write!

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This is good, easy to read, easy to follow, simple structure, and it really stood out, the way it wording really sends out the message that death comes to all one day

[Brandon Taylor-Black]

Well Done!
This is spectacular! We all try to hide from inevitability, yet we know it's futile...
Powerful writing, wonderfully worded and versed. This is excellant poetry!
Bravo

[~crazy Beautiful~]

this poem has a very deep meaning to it, I would have liked to have heard this . Feels a bit of a rant piece.
My only suggestion and it isn't really necessary, but I feel that a slight edit to the structure may read more flowing on the eyes.

"I can feel it coming;
Relentlessly coming after me

craving for my soul;
As those gone before me

I shall keep running;
one day it shall over take me'"

I also like the imagery of your running from the inevitable. Overall nice piece, thank you for entering my contest.

[Lady Of Darkness]

This is brilliant, it has structure and flow
Death should not be feared in my opinion.
Loved this write its so Poe lol.

[Tai Chi Italy]

Yes death comes to all our doors eventually kurrupted, but he only takes what is his imo to take and with a little luck, we go easily, painlessly...without that luck we need a great deal of grace. Good write. You put him into his place, anywhere, any time, death is sublimely punctual. All the best, Tai