Drumbeat

"To Carlos~"

 

It was 2 AM in the morning,

during a torrential downpour.

You held in your hand a black umbrella,

as you opened the door of my car.

You leaned over and kissed me.

your warm lips melting mine,

the smell of you in my nostrils,

the taste of you on my tongue.

I could hear the rain

thundering in my ears,

a drumbeat accompanying our love-song.

It must have been the sensory overload,

for I remember a sudden burst of electricity

that ran through my entire being,

like a thunderbolt of lightning.

It shocked me. A pleasant surprise.

Today you are just a memory's skeleton,

the beat  of your heart silenced forever.

the lips long cold and stiff,

lost to love,

lost to time,

lost to life.

but never, my love, never 

completely lost to me. 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[MOON]

Poignant the wound in the heart, but after all the pain there is no loss if there is the remembrance of love and growth.

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Beautifully written, there in the moment with you feeling the loss of love. I can't imagine. Namaste

[Antonio Valentino]

im trying to think of a worse tragedy then that of a loved one lost..

im also trying to think of a better gift then having love in the first place..

what a sacrifice it is, to cut open ones heart and let someone see the scared and vulnerable person so many of us shroud within (speaking for me anyway)

but then, nothing risked is nothing gained yes..

so sorry for your loss dear friend.. i hope one of those jagged spears of light find you once again, in the graze of fingers brushed soft against your heart..

:)

[Nautili]

it was a tough time. I do think i will see him again. Now I find my dad has brain cancer....another loss to bear. But my belief in heaven does lighten the sadness a bit, for I do believe this life is a flash in the pan, so to speak...where did that expression come from/ more like the spark when you try to start a friction fire...yes, that is how short this life is in light of eternity...

[Antonio Valentino]

im hoping you both eventually will prove meant to be..

so very sorry to hear about your father.. that is so very sad..

it is short isnt it.. a friction fire.. i like that.. flint, looking for stone to make heat, and light..

we are the stars colliding and melding into one another arent we..

the eyes of light in a darkened forrest, twinkling down, smiling at our innocence..

[An owl on the moon]

What an aching beauty... the memory that you bring to vivid life... the warmth and wonders... the fire ignited from one heart to another... Your last lines are simply haunting... the loss and longing... And yes, how the remembrances linger forever... a precious sadness.

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

A beautiful memory...seem so fresh in your mind...good memories last forever...just like your beautiful poem xx

[Shimmerbliss/CAF]

Beautiful. You have described a moment that explains the hurt in your heart and soul to have lost such a love.