Sweeping

Seems out-of-date in our modern feminist culture, but there are subcultures where it is still very much alive.

 

 

Stained spots rubbing.

Washing, ironing, scrubbing.

No hint of dirt or impropriety.

Good reputation in society.

Clean house, clean life.

At all costs

please the boss.

Tidy and toss.

Submissive wife

never creates strife.

Sweep away the dirt.

Never dawdle or flirt.

Never voice against male tide,

Always play to male pride.

Lift the carpet for inspection,

Layer of filth and grime.

Playing at perfection……

Their almost perfect crime.

 

 

Reviews

[Jai Garg]

Since ages it may be true but look at the woman and the respect she earns to bring up a family in the most perfect environment.
Lol there are no restrictions; men can sweep too!

[no sun]

wow, a completely different side of you. excellent!!

[Lawrence Parlier]

The humor and brevity in this are fantastic. I'm old enough to remember this "June Cleaver" mentality in my grandparents generation.....the threads started fraying right around this time, too. Great job.

[Alvin L. Kathembe]

Playing at perfection - their almost perfect crime.

Amazingly witty line. They pretend everything is all spotless and perfect when really all the filth has just been swept under the carpet -

'Lift the carpet for inspection,
Layer of filth and grime.'

And they almost get away with it. :)
Thanks for sharing!

[Gheeneil]

Such a rare circumstance. I believe it still does exist. There may still be a few who conform to what is called "traditional".

[Kyle]

Is this for real? Is anyone really like that now....? Perhaps in the past. It would seem that this write would fit with a setting from decades ago.....

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

Its more common then we think ... women are still been asked to stay home , clean and raise the kids ... very good one :)

[Revery]

You poems have a quality, complexity and depth. This is a passionate write. Your a better poet than me.

This is brilliant, it's like an poetic story told for the women in the old days, where they really were seen like this. And placed in civil tiny little boxes, they had to do like it was for them, very clever writing here, nice message in it. Greatly done.