Puzzled

I speak out your name

To hollow walls

Feeling foolish

For my need to connect

Once again

Futile attempt

At trying to decipher....

The puzzle of you.

Been a time-worn problem

between you and me,

A two - step conundrum.

Our feet get tangled,

We fall

In a heap of linked

legs and arms.

You move one way,

I, the other.

 

This time is different.

You untangle and leave

 Me alone.

My heart twists, trying to loosen

the knots burning,

I am left with the red marks

of  years of constriction.

I understand your leaving.

The truth is we never fit,

we just tried to force the jutted angles

to interlock.

 

But it doesn't stop me from crying.

 

Reviews

[Eagle Cruagh]

You just simply did not fit.
Is`nt that the way it often is.
Sometimes it is just personality, or
character that will not fit the other.
'Good explanation of why people
often fall apart. They just don`t
fall well together.
----John

[brigid]

very poignant poem
....trying to decipher.. the puzzle of you.
nice lines, strong imagery. good last line.....
it all fits beautifully.

[Alvin L. Kathembe]

As I read this I had an impression of a child forcing together jigsaw pieces that just don't go together. Sometimes we try to force issues...trying to force the jutted angles to interlock.
And even when it's over we keep thinking, 'What if?'
Very witty title.
Great work!

[JRB]

This is a great write, souls reaching their end, yet they never had a beginning, so it's an awakening that comes with pain and frustration, that shows your hours of doubt and indecision finally coming to your head and now your heart. Nice write

[Lawrence Parlier]

Oh, WOW. This is a beautiful poem, the structure, word choice, imagery, all are right spot on and in perfect balance.
And so bloody sad.........It just pulled me right into the headspace of my own failed marriage...Understanding the complex variables of trying to make a relationship work and watching it just fall apart in spite of your best efforts....These wounds never truly heal. This captures it brilliantly!

[Jay Levon]

I speak out your name
To hollow walls-------as good of an opening as I've read in a long time

[Chris]

I came back... I do that.

[Leslie Philibert]

Enjoyed this,the sustained metaphor works due to the quality of the writing, we fall in a heap of linked legs and arms is great, lots of very visual images, good write.

[Chris]

Understanding the whys still leaves the bite... a good and valid insight. Good flow, rhythm, and images.