Invisible She

 

 

 

She is here, then gone.

She floats upon a current of air,

looking unsuccesfully for a place to land.

Her breezy fragrance fills the room,

lingering softly after her departure.

 

She feels detached and alone.

She wonders if she will ever find a home.

It feels to her as though she is invisible,

no super power to be envied here,

but a continual curse.

 

Superficial eyes that scan,

and then discount her

as too ordinary

to be noticed or admired. 

Yet how extraordinary is 

this girl.

My longing is for her to see this-

her beauty, her uniqueness, her wit, her strength.

May she see who she is.

(The lines becoming slowly visible

as they form before her

golden doe eyes,

colors of springtime splashing

in her soul's most sacred space.)

 

 

 

Author's Note

I wrote this with my daughter in mind, but it is for all women that overlook their own unique wonder and beauty. By the way, the picture used is of my daughter. She is a beauty.

Reviews

[Leigh]

The opening stanza is very strong and gives an immediate unique feel of the character you are describing. The opening line reminds me a little little bit of She's Not There by Santana, if you know it, it is going back a bit mind!! I like the way you relate to your daughters beauty and her so say invisibility, she will become much more visible as you put it as she becomes aware of it.

[Tate Morgan]

Thats a beautiful thing to give your child a loving boost to her life

[The Analog Kid]

This is a real powerful and uplifting piece to your daughter. That is a awesome effect on the picture.

[Nautili]

Thank you!

[The Analog Kid]

YW:)

[Poet's Soul]

It's strange how some people can see something special in someone, yet others refuse to see. It is especially sad when someone cannot see how special they are because they see themselve through the eyes of those who refuse to see. Enjoyed PS

[Nautili]

I agree wholeheartedly. Thanks for the review!

[Dean]

Your final two lines are terrific. I think a poem all its own could incorporate them.

[Nautili]

thank you!

[Ian H Morrison]

well i am a man and i have to say that i loved it thank you for such a lovely poem

[Antonio Valentino]

aww she really is... what a great mommy you are.. the poem was wonderful, what a special gift that is for her, im sure she'll cherish it for always..

fantastic

:)

[Kaylor Mason]

A lot of men go through this as well. It is heartbreaking (most especially for the one who suffers), and wall flowers like myself endure it with our customary stoicism and silent weeping with dry, unshed tears. I hope your daughter finds herself; it's probably the best thing that can happen to anyone.

[Samuel Dickens]

There are many in this world who think little of themselves, and it's so very sad. And how do you convince them otherwise? Maybe there are different answers to that question, but I think you've exemplified one of them with this poem. May your daughter discover what a gem she is. (And all others)

[Ama May Cooper]

This is wonderful, a very passionate and loving piece.
You can tell that you are veyr fond of the person this is written about the gentle compassion toward there well being written so clearl and wonderfully.
Fantastic imagery throughtout, i can picture the girl as an actual sketch that when compeltely painted is a dashing beauty but few take the time to admire her true colours.
Wonderful Read, wodnerful write.

[Sam Gregory]

Wow! Beautiful immagery, it helped give this a very smooth and calm flow. Very nicely done indeed. keep up the good work :)