Invisible She

 

 

 

She is here, then gone.

She floats upon a current of air,

looking unsuccesfully for a place to land.

Her breezy fragrance fills the room,

lingering softly after her departure.

 

She feels detached and alone.

She wonders if she will ever find a home.

It feels to her as though she is invisible,

no super power to be envied here,

but a continual curse.

 

Superficial eyes that scan,

and then discount her

as too ordinary

to be noticed or admired. 

Yet how extraordinary is 

this girl.

My longing is for her to see this-

her beauty, her uniqueness, her wit, her strength.

May she see who she is.

(The lines becoming slowly visible

as they form before her

golden doe eyes,

colors of springtime splashing

in her soul's most sacred space.)

 

 

 

Author's Note

I wrote this with my daughter in mind, but it is for all women that overlook their own unique wonder and beauty. By the way, the picture used is of my daughter. She is a beauty.

Reviews

[Leigh]

The opening stanza is very strong and gives an immediate unique feel of the character you are describing. The opening line reminds me a little little bit of She's Not There by Santana, if you know it, it is going back a bit mind!! I like the way you relate to your daughters beauty and her so say invisibility, she will become much more visible as you put it as she becomes aware of it.

[Lily Mae]

So true... so many peoples perception of beauty is so off. And her you capture is as a whole.. in and out..xo :)

Nautili, this touched me deeply, as I felt all you say here, within the ode to this beautiful woman, as she is your daughter. As a invisible butterfly she moves, and leaves. As they are the sign of many thoughts. A deep compliment to this. And I will keep this write into my favorites, to re read it, forever.

E.L.

[koty bell]

this brought a tear to my eye not sure why great write:)

[Chris]

You captured many things in this...

[rivers]

Nautilli, what beautiful, sensitive writing...From the perspective of a loving mother your meanings are effortlessly understood...But these thoughts go far beyond that for me...Many people pass in and out of our lives and we think..."if there could only see what I see." There are times when the same thoughts swirl around the mirror.

The apple rarely falls far from the tree. With the understanding and guidance from such a kindred soul, there is little doubt she will find a lovey place to land, because it will reflect her inner beauty...Thank you for sharing such a personal write...

[Revery]

Nautili, this is strong and deep. So passionate and meaningful. If she is like you she will know confidence and for good reason. I imagine it is frustrating for a parent to see a child, especially a bright one to experience this.

This is a valuable write to all women and written so eloquently. Thanks for sharing

[LittleLover]

Beautifully written, the way you worded it made it sound so, sareal almost. i love this poem, great work!

[Patient Poet (Yos)]

Superficial eyes that scan,

and then discount her

as too ordinary

to be noticed or admired.

Yet how extraordinary is

this girl.

I can easily relate to that beautiful Poem... I think thats a feling that all parents feel , wanting their children to feel special ...its hard for us to bear the feeling of loonliness and pain about our children but we all felt the same when was their age , its normal and will pass.... as for your Girl ... I think she is special , there is at least one person beside you that think the same (Me) :)

[Hayley]

Lovely wording in the last stanza. It really brings a somewhat haunting and dauntingly beautiful ending. Wonderful work!

[Eagle Cruagh]

'those who have charisma, beauty, talent
and brains, often discount it in favor of others.
Your poem pays homage to the girl with the
hidden virtues. She passes her beauty on to
others and claims no part of it for herself.
Beautiful .
---- John