12-12-07

I always struck on that particular store,
what am I really exactly looking for?
Oh! I'll ask no more. . .
it has something to do with before.

those laughs, i could picture-out,
those vows, i could barely count,
trust was in me, I had no doubt,
happy I was, that I could almost shout.

it was just like yesterday,
walking through that way,
came the heavy rain of Holiday,
took my smiles and hopes away.

he promised me that beautiful thing,
exactly, that brilliant ring!
I had this wonderful and amazing feeling,
but then, I ain't got anything. . .

Reviews

[Unknown]

a very sad poem, about reminiscing the love that has now been broken
reminding me of the same situation happened to one of my friends not too long ago.
They've been together for five years now but it seems their love for one another is just not too strong enough and it just have to end even though it really hurts so much. She kept on crying and kept on sharing the days they' were happy together. All i could do is to comfort her and be there for her.
Very good poem indeed.
Keep up the good work. :)

[STAR CHILD]

ah this is a sad poem

[joshua deathdealer]

Wow I can feel the frustration at the end of this great write. I really like the third stanza. Well done..xx

[...]

Ouch to your last stanza,
So nicely written though, enjoyed reading this.

[Thea]

Ouch...That last stanza is just too hurtful...The frustration, ugh, I hate it...Great poem... :)))

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

A placid sea rocks boats in the mind, a nver ending search for self acceptance rifes the soul, well done

[NightShade]

Ouch! Disappointment is one thing but that kind of disappointment is just rough. I like the lyrical flow to this. Nice.

[M Garcia]

Nice write. Hopeful and sorrowful. Thank you for sharing.

[Vinod Kumar U K]

Beautiful write, Imaging beyond the boundary wall of the treasure shore,