It

Racism. It happens everyday.

I'm sick of finding IT at every corner!
It isn't sharp,
Yet It cuts like a razor.
It doesn't grab hold,
Yet It chokes you with ice cold fingers.

It lives around every corner,
Around every street,
Around ever heart,
Around every soul.
Under every skin.

People use It like a weapon,
And It works everytime they do.
It slashes out;
white and hot...like fire.

It is poison,
Drifting through the veins
Of those who choose to use It
As a quick excuse to not get to know you.
Just to hurt you,
And to make your insides burn
Like a never ending hell of sharp words,
and glass shards.

It cannot be taken back,
Because It sticks to that so called ugly skin,
to that teased skin that bleeds.
It sticks to that hope of having a better society too,
It sticks to everything like sap on bark.

And to those who know what It is,
I have only one thing to say,
"Judge by what's inside."
For those who don't,
Don't strain yourself

I'll tell you...

IT is racism.

Author's Note

I think that was the first poem I ever wrote...yup, yup. I hope you like it. -_- I know it's sort of bad though. I encourage constructive criticism so go ahead and tell me what's wrong.

Reviews

[None]

I like the use of the word 'it' without letting on completly what 'it' is until the end. You use description well, i think my favorite few lines were
'And to make your insides burn
Like a never ending hell of sharp words,
and glass shards.'
It is written in a way that sounds angry, it is very well written for getting your point across.
This is probably an opinion rather than a definate rule, but I always fee stanzas should be similar in amount of lines, unless specifically trying to single something out or just to be different. It helps keep the poem flowing in the same pace if you have stanzas of the same amount of lines.
Hope I helped :)

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

There is nothing bad at all. In fact, it's one of the best poems I reviewed today. And for you to only be 14 m and writing this strong, Wow! I didn't know the poem was about racism until i looked up at the comment below the title.

"It is poison,
Drifting through the veins
Of those who choose to use It
As a quick excuse to not get to know you.
Just to hurt you,
And to make your insides burn
Like a never ending hell of sharp words,
and glass shards.

"It cannot be taken back,
Because It sticks to that so called ugly skin,
to that teased skin that bleeds."

(EXCELLENT. DEF A STRONG POEM!!)

[Lind]

Wow...this is very good. Full of emotion and truth.

[lots fo love ♥]

you think it is bad?!?! it was was was...... there is not enough adjs! i absolutly loved it. it is way better than both my poems!

[C.T. Bailey]

Bad? Hardly. This is a poem for today. It flowed very nicely and the alliteration kept the rythym. The topic came upon me slowly...just as I suspect you intended. Nicely done...
Todd

[Tuff Stuff]

My favorite line was,
'It cannot be taken back'
SO TRUE!

[Ari]

I would suggest not italicizing "it" after the first stanza, as it gets a bit distracting. Other than that, this is not a bad attempt. There's nothing about it that reaches out and grabs me, but there is also nothing wrong with it. Good work.

[Adela Muresan]

A strong piece.

,,It,, is presented like the greatest and most wicked evil existent, with a palpable fury despite the fact that the writer does not specify that the feelings are his.

A.M.