The last letter

In memory of her

Writing a letter on the ridge of a mountain

Frozen hand shivering even to hold the pen

Cold breeze, infinite thoughts mind is at stake

But still writing just for your sake

 

Emptiness is so desperate to give me no words

Surrounded by air of melancholy that’s absurd

Still found and wrote the lines from then to now

Need to say goodbye, but don’t know how

Wind blew so hard letters flew far apart

And I had to write everything from the start

 

There’s a groom waiting for you, grin and agile

Flowers everywhere you walked down the aisle

Seeing you like an angel, realized my big Mistake

This rain of pain is going to stop, I am about

finish this letter

Tear it into pieces after reading once

when the letter is open

Coz whatever I had given to you with love is

always meant to be broken…………….

 

 

 

 

 

 

    

Reviews

[red93]

Really excellent work and nice use of the mountain related imagery.

[barleygirl]

To be honest, I'm not a fan of heartbreak poems becuz it's often a blame game of predictable sentiments. That's why I LOVE your heartbreak poem becuz it's fresh & original & you use the surroundings (jagged & steep) as a symbol for how this feels to the guy, how it feels to have your pages scattered by the wind -- strong relatable imagery! I would suggest line 9, using "pages" instead of "letters" . . . this guy is writing one letter that's made up of pages or sheets of paper, that's what's blowing away. I also love how you show us why the two are separated, but the narrator isn't getting into the blame game, just saying he blew it! The honest, balanced, deeply-felt response of REGRET! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Kuldeep desai]

Thank you very much for the review and feedback....i am glad that you liked it...

[Arshia]

This is such a touching poem which wonderfully expresses the melancholy and pain which the heartbroken boy feels. An amazing write! :)

[Kuldeep desai]

Hi it's been so long I still remember writing an poem with you about friendship... I am happy to see your review and thank you stopping by.....

[boygene borice]

such a touch letter. i felt every word

[Kathryn Smith]

oh my goodness I want to bawl my eyes out! ..but theres something about being on a mountain and writing..I wish I could do that!

[Kuldeep desai]

writing in between closed walls and writing in open fresh air has large differences.....an open air always provides you those words which you feel to be real......

[KeeD]

I like how you penned a story through poetry, very vivid. It took me on a journey of emotion from empathy to concern..I drifted further into the words and got consumed by pain and regret. Love certainly seems like a tug o'war!

[Kuldeep desai]

yeah you are right my friend...Love is certainly a tug of war either you have to pull hard to keep everything by your side or you have to just leave it for the sake of happiness you want to see on the face of your love.....thank you for reading :)...

[Jddcbjiuh]

Very sad poem, but heartfelt and with much emotion. A very good piece here, and great lines "Wind blew so hard letters flew far apart
And I had to write everything from the start" loved it.

[Kuldeep desai]

thank you for reading it.........i am glad you have liked it.......

[andrew mitchell]

grief and sadness here but the tearing of the letter is a first start to healing, letting go.

[Kuldeep desai]

thank you for reading.....

[Luna]

The last line was soooooo beautiful. To think such a beautiful letter written than teared to shreds. A waste isn't it but even so at least we try to love cause that's all we can do .The poem might be sad but still it's beautiful. Nice poem there Kuldeep keep writing your heart out :)

[Kuldeep desai]

this review is more beautiful than my poem.......thank you for loads of sweet words.......Wish you happy new year.....

[Luna]

Haha that's nice of you to say :) . But I meant it beautiful poems are only written by beautiful hearts that have learned from life and know how to accept things and let go when there gone . Any way .... I wish a Happy new year to you too hope you find what you need and learn what you have not learned yet ;)

[Radhika. kumar]

This is pain,pain in shades.

[Kuldeep desai]

pain in shades...yeah there is a comparative darkness in that pain......