PEARL

"Someone Who Steals our Heart"

  

 

A drop of the rain falling on her cheek forms a dew

i could see there a Pearl.

A cold breeze that blows her hair

My Heart got started to whirl.

She rush to dance in the rain

who seems like an fountain

 

A tiny bag hanging on her hand

Swirling all over.

Tightly Embraced her hair band

Trying to jump with her.

My shirt button was open 

She stepped Inside, Making my heart her own.

 

 

 Loving, Caring never letting down

 always a complete daughter.

Teasing, enjoying hanging with her friends

always bringing around laughter.

All she was Beauty with the mind,

One day she might be mine or Someone's,

 Once i wanted to hold her hand. 

 

 I could imagine a darkest night

Standing by the river side,

A Sailing boat reaches the shore

Someone steps out dressed like Bride,

Holding the lamp tending towards to me

there she comes my girl,

Background was dark and in the lamp light when i see, only her face

i could see there a Pearl.

 

 

Reviews

[...]

A romantic poem. Nice thoughts

[Kuldeep desai]

thank you and i am glad that you have liked it.........

[Anindita Janhabee]

Beautifully described, pearls are just so simple yet so bright and valuable....
some pretend it very cheap white stone, but i think it holds the hidden secrets which turn it white and all the feelings that relate to the pearl make it shine....
This poem feels just as absolute reality that one can feel by reading this poem...
outstanding...
(just re-read and try to rectify some errors like - she rushes, a fountain etc.)
good write...
Anindita

[Kuldeep desai]

Thank you.....I am glad that you have liked it......

[andrew mitchell]

What is not a heart that can't be stolen? Its always up for grabs. A nice write. Thank you for sharing.

[Kuldeep desai]

Thank you......

[wordman]

a sweet poem of love and feelings

[Kuldeep desai]

Thank you...........i am glad you have liked it......

[Riti Rajput]

Amazing poem,
I loved the way you have penned your feelings for someone who steals your heart...
:)

[Kuldeep desai]

Thank you for your kind words..........

[aLittlePain]

This builds warmth, a really lovely read.
There are a few minor fixes, but keep writing it only gets better x

[Kuldeep desai]

Yeah i did few corrections............I hope you will read and support me in the future like you have done here............Thank you for stopping by

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is amazing and perfect.
"I could imagine a darkest night
Standing by the river side,
A Sailing boat reaches the shore
Someone steps out dressed like Bride,
Holding the lamp tending towards to me
there she comes my girl,
Background is dark and in the lamp light when i see only her face
i could see their a Pearl."
The above lines. Haunting and beautiful. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Kuldeep desai]

Hey man I don't know who you are but i think you are the one of the few person in this site, who is supporting all the writers if he his good or bad.............you are awesome........Thank you.......

[Coyote Poetry]

You are a good writer and thank you for the kind words.

[AYVID N]

But for a few word corrections here and there, it's a beautiful poem. Keep writing, it keeps getting lovelier, every time.

[Kuldeep desai]

I did correct few things........but still i will try to improve in those aspects...........Thank you for your kind words.........

[Emily]

Great first line!
Keep it up!!

[Kuldeep desai]

Thank you for always showing your response and being supportive...............

[Shannon]

This is clearly very heart felt. I particularly love the last two lines.
Because I know you are interested in feedback, "their" should be spelled "there" if it means "in that place"

[Kuldeep desai]

I did those few corrections.........Thank you for being So supportive...............You are doing a great job thank you...........