Topper

Please read it.....

Daddy says"My boy you should be the topper",

He cant give me even an reasonable offer

Take 98 or 99 you should be first

I don't care what you do,how much do you suffer

you want to say all your colleague

"My son is number one"

My marks can give you happiness

but not your son 

you wake me up at 5am, 

insists me to study

you don't bother what i am,

what i want to be.

Marks is just an number

its not an symbol of Excellence

I want you to understand me

in my life i want your Presence

Hey dad don't care about the people

what they think about you

YOU ARE MY DAD AND I AM UR CHILD

YOU WANT ME AND I WANT YOU.

 

 

Reviews

[Natalie]

As someone who has grown up in an Asian family, I can completely relate to this, as I am sure a lot of my friends could too. I love the message behind this poem, but just a small constructive comment here - maybe it would be even better if you could use 'you' and 'your' instead of 'u' and 'ur'? :) That's just my two cents here. Thanks for sharing!

[Kuldeep desai]

thanks for the review.......

[Nitesh Mahabal]

Purely Indian Poem :p
You Share this one on facebook too. Everyone's gonna like it

[Kuldeep desai]

thank you for the suggestion.........

[ayesha gupta]

i know the feeling.. its frustating sometimes..

[Kuldeep desai]

i hope you liked it.....

[ayesha gupta]

ya..sorry, main baat toh type karna hi bhul gyi. lol.

[Stephanie K.]

This was a nice poem with a clear message. Although I could not seem to get past the informalty of the writing, it is not a text message, you should not abbreviate to "ur" and "u".

[Kuldeep desai]

thank you for the review............and i ll make the corrections that u have insisted........

[Jen]

Kuldeep, This is a nice try though there are some faults in the text... Please note that 'an' is used before words beginning with a vowel sound...
This poem, as i can say, is about a father who forces his child to do what the typical Indian parents do! so, this puns on those who don't understand the potential of their child and try to change him/her with their own ideas...Well, your poem gives a good message...
Thank You!

[Kuldeep desai]

I am glad that u liked it......last one was really a blunder and i am happy that u liked this.......thank you Miss.Small town girl

[Tasfia Islam]

Its sweet and true....likely to teenage... :)

[Kuldeep desai]

i am glad that u liked it..........

[Tom Chao]

As an asian, i can so relate to this.....

[Kuldeep desai]

Its not about an any asian or american its about everyone who react like that...

[Jen]

Desai, He means that Asian Parents do what your poem shows: forcing their children to do what they want them to become... American culture is not like that!

[Kuldeep desai]

no u don't say that..........off course these types of dad species u can see more here only but there also some in there country who all do these things, but there intention of forcing will be different from us.....i have read such things so only i am able to say.......

[Jen]

Well, you're right but this thing also depends on culture...Indian culture has almost all the parents who try to send their child into an engineering academy just because they want them to become what they want them to become... In American Culture, life is given more importance than career... so, this is it!

[Kuldeep desai]

k..... i will agree with you Miss.Small town girl...........

[Kuldeep desai]

k..... i will agree with you Miss.Small town girl...........