THROUGH THE MOTIONS OF A RIGGED RAT RACE

10 03 14

Sort of a capitulation makeover

Moxie enrobed in a nude costume

at the festival of unseen lights

Evasive action packed tight into

feeble deadpans of adverbs and prepositions

On occasion there's a resonance

of more matter cutting less talk

like a ceremonial ribbon

The necessity of skeleton key simplicity

sends articulation to the make-up chair

Sound waves snore in sedated contributions

as all that never needed to be said

preens under modern poverty's contradiction of

a shadeless lamp ramrod as an unlit candle

enlightening nothing save placebos of imagination

acquiescing in a universal shrug

like handicapped hamsters

in the wobbling rust wheel of a past trend's

hibernating fortune

Author's Note

Reviews

[redzone]

They talk, they talk and talk and talk, but say nothing and do even less.. the world moves on to its logical man made destruction.. to those handicapped hamsters, RUN, dig tunnels deep and store grain everywhere, it's possible you may survive.... just watch out for those snoring sound waves.
You know I enjoyed this one Steve...
~~redzone

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it Curt...not much supplementary commentary for this one, it's all in there ;)

[MsJewel]

You have a stellar imagination my friend....The imagery in your poem is incredible.
like handicapped hamsters
in the wobbling rust wheel of a past trend's
hibernating fortune
You never cease to amaze me
:) Julie

[kublakhan27]

Thank you as always for the support and the kind words my friend, it truly means the world :)

[MsJewel]

My pleasure

[Rocans]

wow, you write very abstract. I like the images you conjure in this one. I like this line "enlightening nothing save placebos of imagination, acquiescing in a universal shrug. What a world we live in when imagination capitulates. Thank you for sharing, great poem, one I will store for future reference.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Rocans, so glad you enjoyed it :)

[Rocans]

No problem man.

[icelandicblue]

Whether is be politicians or the rich who really rule the world the rest of us are caught in this game of chance that has been rigged from the beginning. You've taken the hamster wheel metaphor and rusted it displaying that there is more to than just running in place, we are truly handicapped while we try. Great social/political commentary from you.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Anne...truth be told, I never consciously do social commentary...when it happens, it essentially writes itself...of course, after a week of several appointments I'm sure I was due haha...so glad you enjoyed it.

[R Smith]

Another great write mate but let that hamster go, freedom for the rodent race.....did I mention the poem?

[kublakhan27]

Haha Wait, I'm the hamster here :P Glad you enjoyed it my friend.

[R Smith]

always do but I should review better I think :)

[B.J]

I could not help it I just laughed at the outcome, all the way to the end. I just plain enjoyed the read.

[kublakhan27]

Haha Thank you B.J, glad you enjoyed it.

[B.J]

you're welcome

[Matching Socks]

Placebos of imagination, handicapped hamsters.
You amaze my sometimes...

We move about on auto pilot sometimes, having lost that spark in the eye, but focused with an acute tunnel vision on our goal in life. Not necessarily achieving it though.

[kublakhan27]

I've been on autopilot for longer than I care to admit...I'll figure out how to fly this thing at some point I suppose haha Glad you enjoyed it bud :)

[Jennie Baron]

Modern poverty, yes. In this supposedly enlightened age it seems all we get are empty words and we spin our wheels and waste our energy. Profound truth and so articulately put!

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it Jennie, thanks so much for the kind words :)

[Lyn Anderson]

I love the line of modern poverty. I take from this dissatisfaction, frustration, both with the world's crooked twisted ways and getting stuck in the endless loop of do, and to what end, and unhappiness with the self for being stuck in it.

[kublakhan27]

Yes, a couple of doc's appointments in a week will certainly put me into that mindset...glad you enjoyed it my friend.