THROUGH THE MOTIONS OF A RIGGED RAT RACE

10 03 14

Sort of a capitulation makeover

Moxie enrobed in a nude costume

at the festival of unseen lights

Evasive action packed tight into

feeble deadpans of adverbs and prepositions

On occasion there's a resonance

of more matter cutting less talk

like a ceremonial ribbon

The necessity of skeleton key simplicity

sends articulation to the make-up chair

Sound waves snore in sedated contributions

as all that never needed to be said

preens under modern poverty's contradiction of

a shadeless lamp ramrod as an unlit candle

enlightening nothing save placebos of imagination

acquiescing in a universal shrug

like handicapped hamsters

in the wobbling rust wheel of a past trend's

hibernating fortune

Author's Note

Reviews

[redzone]

They talk, they talk and talk and talk, but say nothing and do even less.. the world moves on to its logical man made destruction.. to those handicapped hamsters, RUN, dig tunnels deep and store grain everywhere, it's possible you may survive.... just watch out for those snoring sound waves.
You know I enjoyed this one Steve...
~~redzone

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it Curt...not much supplementary commentary for this one, it's all in there ;)

[Beccy]

No-one else to blame but us hamsters, it was, after all, us that invented the wheel.

Bricusse and Newley called it right methinks. Beccy.

[s y e]

Steve, I'm missing you muchly! Come back to me soon, please. I loved this piece, it was quite deep, too. I had to read it a few times but you know how wordy you can get, hehe. I love it though.

[Butch Decatoria]

I love hamsters. Great imagery. Love this and enjoyed it. Kudos and thank you.

[Briana O'Connor]

handicapped hamsters...now that is a hilarious image! Love the metaphor here. Such a powerful piece and so true of coarse. well penned.

[Einstein Noodle]

Kubla! you know i love what you write .. right!? what i have to ask my friend is ... is it me? .. is it me? ... i sure hope it is not me ;)

i think this is another wonderful expression and i am putting it in my library of the exquisite .. to be a constant reminder of our duty .. but of course i could be all wrong (yes..it has happened before) :}

and i love this line:
"Moxie enrobed in a nude costume" .. and if i ever get to New Orleans again ..i will have to tattoo it on my forehead! did i say i love you man!!?? well i love you man! peace and flower power forever!
E.

[m.s.early]

This poem is insanely rhythmic and maddening, dizzying, or maybe it's just late in the evening and I'm exhausted. I spun my brain in its shell reading this one and in the end I wound up where I started... in a rusted wheel looking for the WD-40.

[Rita L. Sev]

I read this as a commentary on the world we live in - the blah, blah, blah that we are bombarded by and simply shrug off, going about our lives as if we make a difference... I can also see this as a more personal piece, the heaviness of slogging through another day... though that could just be the Eeyore image... Either way, as always you have my brain going, and I always enjoy the ride when you are at the wheel, Steve.

[kublakhan27]

You said it all here my friend...I don't consciously do social commentaries, but sometimes they evolve from personal reflections...I always thought that Eeyore was one of the most honest and relevant cartoon characters every created, for which I'm most grateful haha Thanks so much Rita :)

[Pryde Foltz]

enlightening nothing save placebos of imagination

acquiescing in a universal shrug

like handicapped hamsters

in the wobbling rust wheel of a past trend's

hibernating fortune

All I can say is if there is a hamster wheel, there had to be hamster wheel maker, and of course it is the hamster that makes the wheel go round. So there ... lol ... cause for faith. Kiss, kiss , l'il Eeyore.

[kublakhan27]

Haha Thanks so much Pryde :)

[Patricia]

And there it is! Such is life!
"....Evasive action packed tight into
feeble deadpans of adverbs and prepositions...."
I absolutely love these lines! You are a wonderful writer!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much for the kind words Patricia :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"moxie enrobed in a nude costume"

cool poem, great line....good to read you again....and it does seem that "all that never needed to be said" is often said anyway...in poetry too...

but your words count....all of them with equal momentum.

[kublakhan27]

Good to see you again as well Jacob...most of those things are a result of people who like to hear the sound of their own voice haha...so glad you enjoyed this one.