FIRE'S DAY OFF

09 28 14

Blistering compulsion

emanates impatiently

from the compound of each

successive mouthful's

jading anticlimax

　

Ideas shrivel into ideals

in an automation as profound

and abrupt as a single breath

　

Where did the doctrine's

intimation meddle off to

when the honest student's eyes

drooped just dramatically enough

to validate the severance

of a smile's storm-inspired rebuild?

　

Which of the redundant swallows

enveloped aptitude's savvy

inhalations of responsive empathy?

　

Compulsion lives albeit

as an oil-water offspring

　

Contradictions of the tidiest symmetry

groom the grounds

for the most bewitchingly-attired

crisis of identity

　

Intentions stick around

in wry amusement

trying to be dialed up

amid the effortless convenience

of a wireless environment

abused by a misanthropic conjuring

of an electrical disturbance

in the bubbles of a drowning

citizen of common sense

Author's Note

Reviews

[Frieda P]

You set fire to the rain here Benji. I could take this so many places and then some, starting with a jaded anticlimax. We seem to live automated lives in this day and age but life's poetry keeps our human sides alive. Your last stanza is priceless, where might those citizens of common sense be at? Ha...just saying. I have to away, but I'll be absorbing this one all afternoon. :) xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha I feel like there is more poetry in your review than the poem Mrs.R...I don't think this piece is all that great, at least in terms of cohesion, but I'm glad there is enough food for thought in it to give it some kind of relevance...I'm still absorbing it myself to be honest haha Thanks so much love :) xo

[Matching Socks]

You're sounding a bit jaded in this one. :)
The last stanza is killer.

[kublakhan27]

Haha Just this one? ;) So glad you enjoyed it bud, thank you.

[Rita L. Sev]

Intentions stick around
in wry amusement...

Hmmm... I think you are correct... Steve, you always choose words and create phrases that go so much deeper. You demand that your reader exercise some grey matter, and reward us richly for the effort!
By the way, I fear that Common Sense has been abandoned for quite some time...

[kublakhan27]

I'm glad that my words make readers think my friend :) Honestly, I have reservations about this one, it feels like kind of a mess to me...yes, common sense has gone the way of the dinosaurs for the most part...thanks so much Rita :)