NOT ABOUT JUDAS

09 27 14

For a languish in the tattered throes

of this emotional sterility

I pawned away a future's slick

flirtation with some arcane semblance

of a schizophrenic ceasefire

and walked off interminably with a currency

of value keen to nothing but a residence

in this internal agitation's infinite shelf life

The inverted shrill of ill-advised transactions

occupy the jagged ledger of what

even poetry cannot make heads or tails of

Tarnished coins you see?

I have earned the turns away in apathy

in the corrupted wake of an alchemic mass's

counteraction to a paperweight of options

Slinky-like precision polishes the obvious direction

bright enough to blind the interjections

hypothetical yet still more reasonable

than incessant forays into

the supremely-knotted noose

selfishly aborting air like an insane dreamcatcher

Author's Note

Reviews

[Frieda P]

Seems yet again, your first line steers us in a direction of your choosing Benji, disregarding garden metaphors, and not acknowledged as a traitor....if even poetry can't figure it out, we're in deep hurt here. I love the 'insane dreamcatcher' especially when preceded by the 'knotted noose' just two of my favorite phrases. I'm feeling oddly exasperated and out of breath, the imagery of your convoluted sentiment's resentment, is as always, stellar, and boggles the mind of your genius at work Steve .... :) xo

[kublakhan27]

Ha, trust me, I did not want to give it such a deliberate title, but I would bet money that this would have been interpreted widely as a Judas story without it...I wish it was actually, but no, it's all me, and yes, there are times when even poetry is not enough...I felt pretty good after I wrote it, but now I find myself where I usually am, relying on your support, and the few others that have commented, to convince me that this is a better piece than I think it is...ha if the poem exasperated you, you must be ready to whack me now...it might knock some things back into place Mrs.R ;) Thanks so much Frieda, it always makes my day better knowing you enjoyed one of my poems :)

[Kelly Scheppers]

There is a "slinky like precision" to your poetry that threads like a needle's eye, from one poem to another. You have an insane ability to hold your reader in the palm of your hand, which is quite an admirable trait. ..and I mean "insane" in a good way!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Kelly, I am most humbled and honoured by your kind words...so glad my writing speaks to you :)

[Matching Socks]

A bit moody today buddy?
Woe is me? :)

Great writing as always.

[kublakhan27]

Ha I wish it was just today bud...not a great stretch, but what can ya do...glad you enjoyed it :)

[Lyn Anderson]

I just don't know which line or set of lines to pick that I like best. Your angry, doubtful writes are almost as good as your quirkily scientific sexy ones ...:)

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much my friend...I wish I could more of the latter, trust me, they're a lot more fun to write than these ones :)

[Lydia Shutter]

A little bit of a whirlwind in this one. Emotions taking you from here to there and then back again. The obvious direction is seldom quite as obvious as it seems though. Options, well, if they are held down with a paperweight, they are not really options at all are they? A study in contrasts....which of course is what life really is. Hypothetically speaking, internal agitation can lead to spontaneous combustion....and any dreamcatcher that catches THAT dream, would certainly be deemed insane. I enjoyed the journey in this one. Lydi**

[kublakhan27]

You have nailed it my friend...I could not have summed up this poem any better myself...you know just where I'm coming from here on all levels, starting with the whirlwind, which is precisely what the poem was written in...thanks so much Lydi :)

[Lydia Shutter]

You write from your heart and your soul, Steve. It is obvious writing acts as a catharsis for you. Your words are well chosen and always clever.

[s y e]

This is great, the title had me intrigued but I thought it was about time I give you some reviews... Powerful poem with vivid imagery, you always write your poetry as if you're telling a story, from start to finish. Well done.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much bud, it's always nice to hear from you...so glad you enjoyed this one, it is very much a story...

[s y e]

I bet it is, seems it too...

[Briana O'Connor]

Quite a powerful write you have here. I can tell is stems from deep emotion. The way you express yourself is admirable. Thank you for sharing.

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it...it did indeed come from a dark place, though I don't think it's one of my best :P I may come back to it later...