NOT ABOUT JUDAS

NOT ABOUT JUDAS

A Poem by kublakhan27
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09 27 14

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For a languish in the tattered throes

of this emotional sterility

I pawned away a future's slick

flirtation with some arcane semblance

of a schizophrenic ceasefire

and walked off interminably with a currency

of value keen to nothing but a residence

in this internal agitation's infinite shelf life

The inverted shrill of ill-advised transactions

occupy the jagged ledger of what

even poetry cannot make heads or tails of

Tarnished coins you see?

I have earned the turns away in apathy

in the corrupted wake of an alchemic mass's

counteraction to a paperweight of options

Slinky-like precision polishes the obvious direction

bright enough to blind the interjections

hypothetical yet still more reasonable

than incessant forays into

the supremely-knotted noose

selfishly aborting air like an insane dreamcatcher

© 2014 kublakhan27


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Seems yet again, your first line steers us in a direction of your choosing Benji, disregarding garden metaphors, and not acknowledged as a traitor....if even poetry can't figure it out, we're in deep hurt here. I love the 'insane dreamcatcher' especially when preceded by the 'knotted noose' just two of my favorite phrases. I'm feeling oddly exasperated and out of breath, the imagery of your convoluted sentiment's resentment, is as always, stellar, and boggles the mind of your genius at work Steve .... :) xo

Posted 10 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Ha, trust me, I did not want to give it such a deliberate title, but I would bet money that this wou.. read more



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Well Steve your superpower of coining impressive phrases just makes my jaw turn slack. Internal agitation' s infinite shelf,just whoa for this one. I liked the way you have hinted to self imposed solitude - emotional sterility. The ending is far from awesome.insane dream catcher this phrase just shows how ruthlessly we follow our dreams. Well i must say.dont accuse me about being judas i would rather go after my dreams rather than you. Brilliant one K.K.love and wishes :)

~Sophy

Posted 10 Years Ago


"...than incessant forays into
the supremely-knotted noose
selfishly aborting air like an insane dreamcatcher"


what were you even thinking? this is amazing Kubby

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha Nothing worthy of public declaration...this is just where my head has been lately...so glad you.. read more
Kleio13

10 Years Ago

Your welcome
"Not About Judas" .. i'm like ok! so its probably about judas :)) just kidding ;)

i love the way you write .. nothing is what it seems ..
"...schizophrenic ceasefire" in contrast to " ... internal agitation's infinite shelf life" are bedazzling .. i have friends and family that are and or have suffered from these kinds of challenges .. and i do mean suffering .. not only with illnesses but societal afflicting even more .. so bravo for peeling some of these pages .. last four lines are absolutely killer .. another wonderful poem on very important things ..and always such marvelous word usage ... as well as poetic ..
E.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha I can understand that reaction, it's certainly the kind of thing I would do ;P Truth be told, .. read more
Einstein Noodle

10 Years Ago

i am over flowed bro! manly hugs to you and yours .. all around .. big manly hugs :) and love!
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kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Love and bro hugs in return my friend :)
I apologize by I can't seem to understand what are meaning to convey. There are snap shots of allusions and imagery, but I think it flew right over my head. Can you clarify for me, just for the sake of a curious non-intellectual like myself. You are a great poet, but sometimes I think your subject matter is so heavy that the poem loses its airy mystique. Who am I to say, feelings are suppose to have weigh, but at the same time purposeful wonder... You are more profound than words can convey.

Posted 10 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Well, I'm not sure if this one was really meant to be clear...it is heavy definitely, but I was hopi.. read more
Butch Decatoria

10 Years Ago

Thanks for that, and yw also.
I have earned the turns away in apathy
in the corrupted wake of an alchemic mass's
counteraction to a paperweight of options

I love the use of the alchemy here for its double entendre … lead to gold and the chemic sense … suffering to awakening. A really fine write, Steve.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pryde Foltz

10 Years Ago

Maybe only to exorcise it with a poem:)
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha A good point, I'm sure there are many more exorcisms to come though :)
Pryde Foltz

10 Years Ago

Hahaha .... the café is surely possessed:)
I get a whiff of self analysis here but I lost my self trying to spend those tarnished coins and now i'm swinging in the open air of life as a dreamcatcher, so mate go catch those dreams and call up the self inflicted results.....apart from that I love it! My high esteem for you has never been so steamed, thank you :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha Oh it's self-analysis alright, probably too much of it for my own good...so glad you enjoyed it.. read more
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Pax
my friend, you hone your craft like a puzzle piece, as well as it is abstract in thought - profound by the used of vocabolary(in which I'm always amaze). It takes a very smart person to decipher your piece, on which i am not :), but I can only feel how outburst of your emotions here on the future & the mandane life of the society. Very amusing piece, yet again!

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

You sell yourself short my friend, your writing is as smart as anyone's I've read...so glad you enjo.. read more
Pax

10 Years Ago

:) welcome...
Not about Judas at all, though a bit of betrayal by poetry that cannot make things right. "Insane dreamcatcher" has me pondering - is the catcher insane... or are the dreams it catches so? ...

Posted 10 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

A good question my friend, I'm still wondering about that myself...so glad you enjoyed it Rita :)
I'm already late in reviewing this poem, it seems, and have seen a number of other opinions about it. I understand how it resonates the readers. Your talent for precision in word use is indeed evident again. Yes, it seems a little convoluted, but it definitely works. Food for thought. Outstanding once more!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Truth be told, my confidence is not at overly high level right now...even though the response to thi.. read more
Kubla,

i love your writing, but i doubt you know why.. i read this, as i do all your work, (yes i am one of those, but not for the reasons you think)
your use of language and the way you construct your feelings.. and thoughts.. are the very definition of unique, but it is not that alone that draws me back to your page, no... its you...
you are real and disturbingly honest... a rare quality for a poet

i thank you for sharing this, in the way that only you can.


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Mark...what can I say, I am nothing if not confessional, and to be honest, I'm usuall.. read more

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