THE EXACT EMOTION

09 22 14

Some apologies fall
onto the faces of a
teetering complexion
in the way
a rock concert crowd
settles into its inevitable
wow-and-flutter beat
too late to identify
with the song
it was intended for
and so participates onward
to settle on a synergistic
compromise sorely
in a stubborn foray
into a band's elliptic segue
of tempos tampered with
by clapping clashes of
contrition and epinephrine
Cue the holding in
of urgency in vows of distance
in impressions of apologies
insisting innocence incognito
Sorrow has an evil twin
The name is fear
It would be wise
to not apologize
until one is aware of
the exact emotion being  
groomed for acceptance

Author's Note

Reviews

[Frieda P]

Sure, blame the evil twin, works for me. A brilliant analogy, but you knew that already, the dance is always a good metaphor no matter what the sticky situation, 'contrition and epinephrine'...priceless!... you know Epinephrine is a 'hormone' that is chemically identical to the adrenaline produced by the body, just saying... It's not over 'til the fat lady hums a few bars... ;) xo

[kublakhan27]

Ha, I wasn't blaming him, just acknowledging his presence...I actually had 'adrenaline' in there first but I ultimately elected to go with the hormone for a number of reasons...you know I always do my homework Mrs.R ;)

What's that quote by Neiztche? Those who were dancing were thought to be insane by those who weren't, or something like that...not that it means we aren't insane mind you haha So glad you enjoyed this one love...xo

[Frieda P]

Blahblahblahblahblah. ;)

[kublakhan27]

I'll take that as a compliment Mrs.R ;)

[Pryde Foltz]

It would be wise
to not apologize
until one is aware of
the exact emotion being
groomed for acceptance

The thing is some people just want to be angry … I know this situation. Loved the description of the band and the crowd, Steve.

[kublakhan27]

So true...I can hold a grudge with the best of them, not that I'm proud of it by any means...so glad you enjoyed this one...thank you Pryde :)

[Pryde Foltz]

In that manner I do well … grudge holding seems like an awful weight to carry around:)

[kublakhan27]

It is...I'm getting better at letting things go with age though...either that or I just can't be bothered anymore ;P

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it's a whiter shade of pale---but could be wider...like love...we sometimes can never find that exact emotion, much less describe it in a poem...thus our ambiguity, or abstractness.

you write such cool stuff, Steve....

I feel like I have just smoked a joint when I enter your poetic world...and I drift comfortably through the emotions and insights of your pieces.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Jacob, it makes me happy knowing I can produce that effect...you know your support means the world.

[R Smith]

so be aware of your words when apologizing you may fall into a trap set for your unaware emotions, hence the mistimed beat of the music and the crowd, if I'm wrong I apologize mate, oops! caught me! Darn it :P

[kublakhan27]

Haha No you're pretty close...thank you Richard :)

[Lyn Anderson]

This is clever on many levels. Don't apologize unless you mean it, and with an understanding of what the person on the other end of the apology wants. People who don't apologize never do, it's just their way. Personally, not a big fan of people who don't own up to their faults, and an even lessor fan of people who pretend to, but don't. Wonderful write here, Steve.

[kublakhan27]

One should always own up to their faults, no question about that, but sometimes it's a matter of timing...sometimes one has to let anger run its course before addressing the source of it, that's just how anger works...it's not a rational emotion, and it doesn't respond well to rationale...the problem is only made worse a lot of times by trying to counter anger too quickly...you're right about the presence of many levels in this piece, but that's the main theme of it, or the easiest part to explain at least...you hit the nail on the head for the most part in any event...so glad you liked this one my friend.

[Jennie Baron]

I agree with Ana Sophia, the metaphor is certainly intelligent, imaginative and original. Not only that but the way you express it is artful. Fantastic!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Jennie, I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

[Matching Socks]

Yes, wow. Brilliant concept here, love the analogy you've used with the band.
Sometimes you just have to roll with things until you know what direction you're going.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much for the kind words bud...I'm glad you enjoyed this one :)

[Matching Socks]

Always buddy! I'm always nice to the cute guys. Your poetry sucks, good thing you're good looking.
No wait... Maybe I got that backwards? Just teasing. You know I'm tied for first as you're number one fan.

[kublakhan27]

Haha Thanks Ana, you've brought a smile to my face...for the record, I'd rather be a good writer and ugly if I had to choose, though I'd probably drive myself crazy wondering constantly if I should have chose the other option haha You know your support means the world :)

[Matching Socks]

I'd say you're both. Don't let it go to to your head.