I am yet what I am must bow in the default of curiosity to a society's embedded eccentricities of mass consumption before approval is acquired to relate to your scenario
A farce of terminology embroidered in the gaudy get-up of communal evolution
What is mass consumption after all if not the manifestation of a swollen magnitude of self-fulfilling selves
I minimize your window and consider the conjecture of anachronistic ebullitions saturating one man's sequestered page and another man's house arrest of introversion goaded by accessibility to wishful affirmation via public portals of a paperless rapport
I wonder if my clunky automated curiosity has paved the route to those unprecedented scenes of self-discovery you longed for
And I hope you weren't an existentialist if you were anything like me
and another man's house arrest
of introversion goaded by accessibility
to wishful affirmation via public
portals of a paperless rapport
Are you referencing yourself in these lines my friend? House arrest of introversion caught my eye and then of course portals of paperless rapport. If so, well then you already know how many of us feel connected to you, so don't fret!
As for the commentary on where society as gotten to as a whole, you are spot on in your philosophical musings, at least in my opinion. Over consumption is an epidemic that poses a far realer threat than a zombie apocalypse ever could.
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Haha Yes, I was referencing myself, as well as the poet to whom this was addressed, but not to fret,.. read moreHaha Yes, I was referencing myself, as well as the poet to whom this was addressed, but not to fret, the support I receive from you and my friends here make all the difference...I wouldn't be a very confident person without it :)
So glad you related to all the different elements of this piece my friend, thanks so much :)
You don't have to bow to anyone or anything that has nothing to do with you. This society is f*****g itself- although people like us can only keep preserving the true declaration of art, poetry, and human sense.
"And I hope you weren't
an existentialist if you were
anything like me".
Being as you are consumes itself. Your words will live on and I feel your pain Kubby.
and another man's house arrest
of introversion goaded by accessibility
to wishful affirmation via public
portals of a paperless rapport
Are you referencing yourself in these lines my friend? House arrest of introversion caught my eye and then of course portals of paperless rapport. If so, well then you already know how many of us feel connected to you, so don't fret!
As for the commentary on where society as gotten to as a whole, you are spot on in your philosophical musings, at least in my opinion. Over consumption is an epidemic that poses a far realer threat than a zombie apocalypse ever could.
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Haha Yes, I was referencing myself, as well as the poet to whom this was addressed, but not to fret,.. read moreHaha Yes, I was referencing myself, as well as the poet to whom this was addressed, but not to fret, the support I receive from you and my friends here make all the difference...I wouldn't be a very confident person without it :)
So glad you related to all the different elements of this piece my friend, thanks so much :)
Hmm, at first I thought this a rant on today's consumerism and the guilt associated with being caught up in that which we loathe despite our best intentions, then it seems to point to an individual, who can be identified with but still scorned, anyway, that's my take.
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It can go either way, and many more...it's a response to the poem that inspired it, and it addressed.. read moreIt can go either way, and many more...it's a response to the poem that inspired it, and it addressed to the one who wrote it...thank you KL.
don't you just love the phones and furniture in that video?!
what a fine sense of language you have sir! too many dark and horrible humanity things so well said .. i can't pick anything favorite .. but love the last verse .. actually makes me smile a bit .. and this:
"I minimize your window
and consider the conjecture of
anachronistic ebullitions" ... brilliant young man ..brilliant .. selfish b******s aren't we ..
spirited poem .. should be published in some underground rebel stronghold
E.
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Haha I can play the entire movie through my mind, which can't be healthy...nobody should watch that .. read moreHaha I can play the entire movie through my mind, which can't be healthy...nobody should watch that movie that many times ;P I've been trying for years literally to write something based on that Clare poem, and it did not come effortlessly when I did finally do it...it took me about a day and a half, and were it not for this place, it would probably still not have been written about cuz this is where I got the inspiration for it...maybe that's obvious though haha Thanks so much as always E, it means the world to know that my writing speaks to you :)
"What is mass consumption
after all if not the manifestation
of a swollen magnitude of
self-fulfilling selves" What a great stanza, I could easily see this in an article from some popular magazine like NYTimes. Your clunky curiosity has definitely paved many scenes for my self-discovery haha.
Enjoyable poem Kubla
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So glad that this one spoke to you Frontier...I am humbled by your kind words :)
i am just a normal joe...not caring about mass anything..
i am just who i am....like the turtles once sang..."don't try to change me, or rearrange me, to satisfy the selfishness in you...i 'm not a piece of clay to mold to your moves each day"
i am more of an individual...who doesn't live for that communal thing...i relate to this, Steve..
thanks
jacob
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You always have a way of putting my words into perfect perspective...thanks so much Jacob.
Whoa, this one made me dizzy, the world according to Benji. ;) You do rant so well, but one can hardly tell they've been told to go f**k themselves.....haha
saturating one man's sequestered page
and another man's house arrest
Intelligently written without a hint of vanilla! Holy self-fulfilling manifestations!
Haha Well I'm all about subtlety as you know Mrs.R, or that's just the hint of vanilla that refuses .. read moreHaha Well I'm all about subtlety as you know Mrs.R, or that's just the hint of vanilla that refuses to dissipate however I try ;) Would you believe I've been trying for years to write something based on that poem? Looks like I found the spark I needed...so glad you enjoyed it love...xo
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Be assured, your friends are not forsaking you like a memory lost Steve. :) xo
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I know love, and that's what keeps me afloat...I never forget :) xo
Ah yes, the sameness and conformity of society, alienation, social media (I especially liked the idea of "I minimize your window"). This poem tackles all those things intelligently in your inimitable style. I like it very much. Kudos!
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So glad you enjoyed it Jennie, my thanks as always :)
My first book is out! Any comments that anyone may have to offer regarding my work would be deeply appreciated, as I'm yet to get a review.
www.amazon.com/Waltz-Around-Swirls-Steven-Fortune/dp.. more..