POEMS SING BUT TEARS DON'T DANCE

09 11 14

I am trapped in a vagabond's reflex
stuttered by the soft corrosion of
an untimely rain's adamance of inactivity

I'm a disembodied circle
resigned to the infinite conscience
of a superfluous cycle
shuddering in time-limit dreams of
a Sarabande solicitation to validate
timidity's zealous hunger to be toppled
yet my lips of invitation insist
on a fault line of fearful obstinance
and my feet twitch in numb slumber
amplifying the severity of this
stubborn state of waking in the ears
of my misoneistic complexes

Fingers smuggle intermittent inclinations
of a salient word or two into my
nocturnal executions of self-dialogue

But this Great Flood of a saturnine night
has swayed away from my topography
of salvation in verbose articulation

I'm a circle pared down by the blades
of rain to a period

A diminutive dotting of finality acknowledged
only in the inconvenience of its absence

Author's Note

Some nights are just beyond saving...

Reviews

[Frieda P]

Tears might not dance but your poetry does indeed. For 'lips are a fault line', you send out perfect vibrations in your creativity's wake. First time I've read 'Sarabande' in a poem, figures you'd pen it dear Steve. Your words dance in triple metre and then some....never beyond saving, when you can write affecting poetry such as this. A sad ditty, smile Benji> and dance the night blues away. :) xo

[kublakhan27]

Your reviews always have a way of making me smile love, and I always feel better than I did before I see them...I knew you'd tap into that image right way, right down to its technique ;) I'm not done with this piece actually, the ending especially has to be redone, it doesn't quite make sense, not to me anyway haha So glad that this one spoke to you Frieda, let's hope the blues can be danced away soon :) xo

[Frieda P]

See you expanded the diminutive dance...it worked for me before but now it's more perfect, if that's possible. :) 'salvation in verbose articulation' Wish i had thought of that line, xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha I told you there were changes in the works love...I'm much more content with it now, and thankfully I didn't mess up any of the things you liked originally ;) xo

[Einstein Noodle]

i think a pint of a very strong boiler maker might just do the trick for you sir! .. this is a delectable feast of words and deep feeling well worth digging into says i! ... so much tension... was happy to listen to Handel for soothing sake .. i read your response to Frieda's comments and have to say i like the end ..
"A diminutive dotting of finality acknowledged
only in the inconvenience of its absence" PERIOD damn it! :) your wordsmithing is enviable .. love it!
E.

[kublakhan27]

Haha You have no idea my friend...it took me three days and a total scrapping of one version to get this one to where it is now...I think I need the pint more now than I did when I started it...it has not been a great week but you're one of a miniscule group of people that can make me feel better...thanks so much for the kind words E, I'm happy that you enjoyed this one :)

[Einstein Noodle]

love you man! truly .. peace and joyful noise ;) its a very satisfying/challenging read for me .. read morelove you man! truly .. peace and joyful noise ;) its a very satisfying/challenging read for me ..
E.

[Avinash]

A prodigy gone vagabond in mesh of life, much inferior than his standards. What agrees to his environment does not agree to his soul. He is looking for ways and the friction creating beautiful sparks resulting into a bright poetry as lightening.

[kublakhan27]

Great insights Avinash...the environment and soul have definitely been at odds lately...thanks so much :)

[R Smith]

you''l never be a diminutive dot just a great big circle of light in this ever dark night, a very, very, very fine poem my friend :)

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much for the kind words Richard...I do hold this one close to the chest :)

[anne]

each word of this poem is beautifully dancing...great work.. :))

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it Anne, thank you :)

[MomzillaNC]

"Of my misoneistic complexes… " very nice. We all hate change, don't we? It seems like it's human nature to resist change until overtakes us, then play catch up and lay claim to it, or be crushed by it.

[kublakhan27]

Very true...thanks so much M :)

[MomzillaNC]

You're welcome.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

My lips are a fault line, I have been there many times… we can destroy trust or hearts with just one impulsive ramble from the mouth, that is why we should never speak when angry.

[kublakhan27]

I hear you on that my friend...so glad that this one spoke to you.

[realmwriter]

I am the unseen in the corner of the seen. I am that which you hear but cannot hear. The thing, incipient, in the corner of your mind, the way and truth of the kind. I am that which you fear but you know nothing of fear. Here, in this place, you are lost to me, you are dead to me. Here, now, I see only a vacant spot, a diminutive existence of what used to be, a nothing, a void. You are an empty shell dashed on your own hardened heart. You are the beginning of the falling apart. A waste of time and space, you are disgraced among men of your kind and in time you will be nothing more than a forgotten fragment of memory.

I write whenever and wherever I am so inclined and inspired to write. Your piece inspired this and I thank you for that. Very well done sir. A vagabonds reflex is to reach out his hand and beg. I have been trapped there myself. Stymied all the while by the unforgiving rain of madness in the eyes of the passers by.
I find time too to dance in the rain but I also find that I am muted by my own need for validation but still I seek as timid as a field mouse to be greater than I am. Somehow though, at every turn I find myself thinking out loud and speaking before a think, still I can't sit still. Maybe one day I too will find the closer I seek for the wrongs I have committed. But in the end I am nothing more than a stain of ink on the pages of history. And I fear that my record will only take up one line if not only a dot. Very nice piece my friend.

[kublakhan27]

It is a great feeling knowing I could inspire someone at all, let alone to this extent my friend...this is a truly humbling review that has me speechless and truly appreciative...I wish I had the words to reciprocate its depth...I can only say that it means the world to know that this one resonated with you on such a deep level, and I can't thank you enough for the time you've invested in your response...I've actually reworked it quite a bit, which you'll notice if you return here, but all of the elements and sentiments that you've pointed out are still there...what more can I say, thanks so much for all the support...it has been a great source of inspiration.

[realmwriter]

You are very welcome. Hope you didn't mind me writing in the review section but I must do as I must. I will revisit this piece as I am interested to know what changes you've made.

[kublakhan27]

No not at all, it was cool to the thoughts that crossed your mind as a reader and writer while you read this :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

there are no periods when the words are just hanging in mid-air and we cannot complete the circle of the poem...or the circle of life.

[kublakhan27]

Couldn't have said it better myself my friend...thanks so much Jacob.