TO A SMITTEN AUDIENCE OF ONE

09 04 14

Unflinching eyes and a brazen glare
buy time necessary to retreat into
a cower underneath a spiced
imagination with a tickle of reply
to every hallowed juke and gyration
Every little sway of virile hips
unlocks an untapped cadence
streaming live broadcasts
of physical intent to a smitten
audience of one swooning
in the sweet vicinity
of a gypsy rhythm
Entitlement to freedom is in motion
coveted so vividly by sad settlement
Shake the clinical statistics off
your roving mane light-tripping gypsy
Spin your rhythm into my dimension
of hobbled hypnosis
Sprinkle your impressionistic
seedlings of wings on my sheep's feet
and assert your rhythm's swaddle
on a shivering uncertainty
of floundering humanity

Author's Note

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"physical intent to a smitten
audience of one swooning
in the sweet vicinity
of a gypsy rhythm
Entitlement to freedom is in motion"

Those lines summed up this wonderful write. I'm swooning in the enchantment of the imagery and wording...Excellent, sir...:)..............................

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it Sami, thank you :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly...,:)......

[Kelly Scheppers]

Totally smitten was I...I wanted to dance barefoot, and woo the night...much enjoyed, thanks for the heat!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Kelly, I'm glad my words 'moved' you ;)

[Blake Fodor]

I love this. The mood and reality it gives ... just amazing

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Blake.

[Shirlena]

Sounds like someone my have found inspiration in the form of some lovely lady or it's a metaphor for the desire to succumb to some ones affection which is always an exciting endeavor. At any rate the one who wants to be swayed could easily become the one swaying talking like this.

[kublakhan27]

Both scenarios apply in this case...actually the two are intertwined to some extent...I'd like to think your words are prophetic my friend haha So glad you enjoyed it, this was a quick write, and I always feel a little off about these ones...it's like my mind is not at ease unless I complicate the heck out of things :)

[Shirlena]

I complicate things too, don't feel bad.

[Jennie Baron]

Stunningly beautiful and sensual, complex and nuanced. Bravo!

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it Jennie, thank you as always :)

[Matching Socks]

This is just wonderful!
I love your illustration of Smitten. :)

[kublakhan27]

Thank you muchly bud, I'm glad you enjoyed my foray into smittenness :)

[Zahra]

Sprinkle your impressionistic
seedlings of wings on my sheep's feet
and assert your rhythm's swaddle
on a shivering uncertainty
of floundering humanity

wow wonderfully penned strong imagery. bravo

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Zahra :)

[MomzillaNC]

This is like the lyrics to great Metal song!

[kublakhan27]

Haha Thanks so much Momzilla :)

[MomzillaNC]

Your welcome.

[Avinash]

This verse comes as Gypsy drum beat, tapping and dancing all over you but I have a feeling their is an individual audience to this poem as well. Enjoyed the word wizardry rather mastery. Thanks a lot for inviting.

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it Avinash, thank you :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that's a great song...love Fleetwood Mac...

and as for the poem...yep...we can borrow that love for awhile...but it is untamed, unrestrained, and unbound for the time it is here...but we cannot keep it prisoner...we must savor it while it is there.

love has its own agenda.

[kublakhan27]

Same here, I've wanted to use a FM song for the longest time...yes, one must be careful not to get too attached to gypsies...so glad you enjoyed this one Jacob.

[Einstein Noodle]

juke and gyration ..fantastic .. thank you for bringing me closer to real time .. had to urban dictionary juke ;)

a very smart poem ..written in code me thinks .. a very well crafted compliment .. it tweeks my cerebral sensitivities ..

i am no scholar but i think this is masterfully crafted .. loved to read it thrice .. do not want to miss something :)
E.
ps .. Stevie is all that for sure .. did she inspire or did you search her out after you wrote this? sitting here listening to that great song right now .. :)

[kublakhan27]

Thank you as always for the great review my friend :) Yes it is an homage of sorts, you're right...the song actually didn't come to mind till I was close to finishing it, but being a lifetime Mac fan, it was probably in my subconscious the whole time, kind of like Stevie ;P So glad you enjoyed this one E :)

[Einstein Noodle]

she sure can swirl a spell can't she! .. great job my friend!
E.