TO A SMITTEN AUDIENCE OF ONE

09 04 14

Unflinching eyes and a brazen glare
buy time necessary to retreat into
a cower underneath a spiced
imagination with a tickle of reply
to every hallowed juke and gyration
Every little sway of virile hips
unlocks an untapped cadence
streaming live broadcasts
of physical intent to a smitten
audience of one swooning
in the sweet vicinity
of a gypsy rhythm
Entitlement to freedom is in motion
coveted so vividly by sad settlement
Shake the clinical statistics off
your roving mane light-tripping gypsy
Spin your rhythm into my dimension
of hobbled hypnosis
Sprinkle your impressionistic
seedlings of wings on my sheep's feet
and assert your rhythm's swaddle
on a shivering uncertainty
of floundering humanity

Author's Note

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

"physical intent to a smitten
audience of one swooning
in the sweet vicinity
of a gypsy rhythm
Entitlement to freedom is in motion"

Those lines summed up this wonderful write. I'm swooning in the enchantment of the imagery and wording...Excellent, sir...:)..............................

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it Sami, thank you :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome muchly...,:)......

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

It is a rare person that is wild at heart and rooted in their home… that is a special person indeed just as this poem is quite a special piece of writing.

[kublakhan27]

They are special people indeed...so glad you enjoyed this one Cowboy, many thank for the kind words.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

YTou are very welcome.

[Eve Ola]

Bravo.. i love the flow of words and you managed them in very nice way. Thanks for inviting

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Eve, so glad you enjoyed it :)

[Boranus]

i read the poem, but I don't get the intent. Is your intent to seduce your readers through self flattery? As a reader, reading your poetry for the first time, I found myself not hypnotized nor mesmerized but feeling your desperation to convince others that you are poetic, thoughtful, or creative. I at one time, struggle with the same issues in my poetry, the desire to be praised. I no longer desire to be read, but to be found. Don't read my poetry, find my poetry. Because then it and I, have a purpose. So I stopped trying to flatter my readers with nonsense wrappings and trappings, illustrating my creativity which is more confusion than creativity, and write from the heart, simply. I like the first rule of poetry, Write to Express don't write to impress. But you can do whatever you like and the readers can play along, but as for me, I want to be found. I want to be found. thank you.

[kublakhan27]

You have good reason to struggle with your poetry...it sucks...if you spent a fraction of the time working on your own poetry as you did putting everybody else's poetry down, not to mention throwing in all the personal attacks, you might be a small bit useful...maybe that's why you struggle to find 'intent' in poetry (cuz every review says the exact same thing, like you just copy and paste the same review into every poem), you're too busy putting every poem and its writer down, not that you have a clue about how poetry works anyway...you're a lousy poet and a lousy reviewer...you're not that great a person either, actually you're a waste of everyone's time but your own...there is nothing to be 'found' in you but arrogance, pretentiousness, and an obsessive need for attention, even if it's negative attention...you just want to be heard, even if it means pissing everybody off...anyways, I've already given you what you want by spending the time to even acknowledge you this much, so I'll give you credit for that much...I could mention the fact that I'm an editor for one magazine, and I have my own book on the way, but...whatever, you just assume you're right and the whole world is wrong anyway so why bother...don't 'thank me' after giving all that crap either...thank me for being very calculated in my expressed dislike of you...trust me, the thoughts in my head are considerably less kind...

[s y e]

This is amazing Steve. The wording and imagery are so vivid, it is like a movie playing on my screen... And the structure is superb. Well done for this one. I'm speechless!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Noodle, I'm so glad you enjoyed this one :)

[Tate Morgan]

Well nothing like a gypsy soul to wake the emotions in a heart

[kublakhan27]

Very true my friend :)

[redzone]

Hey Steve... I'm in a silly (more so than usual) so I hope you do not mind a sillier than usual review.. cause I went back to my childhood (yes even though only 8 I have regressed even more) to this little ditty (you may have heard it too..) it goes like this "Steve and you know who sitting in a tree, k i s s i n g , first comes.. hahahaha ok I will spare you the rest.. sorry man, I couldn't resist...

but to be smitten audience of one well that's the ultimate in "your roving mane light-tripping gypsy
Spin your rhythm into my dimension"... don't think you can get any more smitten than this Steve... nope, you are long gone, head over the heels of smittenness, fal down drunk with LUUUUVVV ..

ok I will behave, but it's good to be smitten, don't you think??? cool poem with all the right angles and whistles, besides there is also Fleetwood Mac ... I will be enjoying this one for awhile...

[kublakhan27]

LOL I know, I know, I'm a hopeless romantic...falling for gypsies is an ill-advised move...yes, smittenness is good to an extent, but again, I'm a hopeless romantic, so it's a two-edged sword, and one of those edges is unfortunately just a little sharper than the other...but hey, it makes for good poetry I guess haha Don't mind me my friend, I actually wish I could channel a bit of your silliness right now...it's been a long day, and I just finished up exhausting way too much mental energy on an idiot than he deserved (see earliest review) haha...so glad you enjoyed this one Curt, I knew you'd know just where I was coming from...I wish I could be more effluent in my gratitude but I'm all scatterbrained right now...you know your support and your kind words mean the world though...thanks so much my friend :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Love Fleetwood Mac!...paired with this write... it's palpable!...

You've penned a brilliant dance of words, once again...
"swaying and spinning", definitely carries my thoughts to a passionate place.

Nicely done!~xoxo~:)

[kublakhan27]

I had a feeling that was your kind of music my dear :) I'm so glad that this one 'moved' you...there is a lot of passion in it, no doubt...so happy that it resonated so deeply with you...thank you Robbie :) xoxo

[Ashira Macy]

This was such a wonderful work of art my friend. With the mention of gypsies it brings my immediately to Frieda, so I imagine there is some inspiration from her in this. Perhaps the swaying and dancing is a metaphor for how her writing sweeps us up into its imagery. Anyway, if it does have to do with her then it is a beautiful tribute, if it doesn't then it is still equally magnificent and the girl you wrote it for must be amazing.

[kublakhan27]

Haha Is it that obvious? I had a feeling it would be ;) Not much else I can say really, you've nailed it...so glad you enjoyed it Ashira, thanks so much :)

[anne]

just amazingly depicted... :))

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it Anne, thank you :)