BUT OF WANT

08 28 14

The final thing
I ever wished to do
I have done
Not on grounds of fear
or fulfillment
but of want
Maybe you should
disregard the future
while it's safe
I'm already frozen
to the vapid verdict
of a chance
immunity to fate
Still you did
the best you could
to define me
in judicious riddles
of compassion
Answers I retain
like a practicing Yoda
for a baffled day
of comprehension

Author's Note

Write drunk. Edit sober. - Hemingway

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Reviews

[Rene Salinas]

Write drunk - Great never edit make friends that out of love will make you find the editing. It is very difficult for me to read this and not have my Mom (No I do not have oedipus Complex just in case some of you clever ones...) "I want never gets" she used to say. Sure it fitted in that context. But also fitting is the metaphor of two Bhuddist monks that never choose to be monks as they do and from all form od Bhuddist they land on Zen not sure if that's a blessing or a curse. Too late to choose though someone already choose for them. To ponder and to fragment experiences and to wait for answer that my or may not feel right I see more as a form of communication as I said your friends, the ones that are willing to show love will help you .

Very focused writing this

Thankyou

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Rene, my friends basically are my answers, they're the only reason I know anything...glad you enjoyed this one.

[Rita L. Sev]

It would be so much easier if the road from point A to point B was a straight line... but what would be the lesson? As for comprehension - embrace the uncertainty. I like this piece, Steve; it has a "down the rabbit hole" feel. Reminds me of the sentiment that Carroll wrote: "I knew who I was this morning, but I've changed several times since then."

[kublakhan27]

A fitting quote, spot-on as it pertains to my issues actually haha I'm getting better at embracing uncertainty, though I have a knack for getting my feet caught in rabbit holes...that's probably what's helping me adapt though...so glad you enjoyed it Rita, thank you for reading and understanding :)

[Mark]

First of Kubla, I have to say, you know I don’t review writing technically, I’m simply not trained, so I say how I feel and what I see, so this being said…. I love this poem and some of the recent, they have given me some more insight, I really do love Dali, inspires me to think, but these.. I see you, the poet, and in that.. The showing of your strength.. Growth :) and Kubla? I like what I see :) I know you hear this in all of your reviews :)
You write beautifully, with passion, heart, truth, some flowing in song some spoken in soft voice, like this one... and imagery, all ways love your minds sent visuals, in poet’s voice and muse…
thank you for sharing :)

[kublakhan27]

That's quite alright my friend, cuz I don't like being reviewed technically haha I deal in emotions as you do, though I'm quite speechless at the moment in trying to articulate how much this review means...I can't thank you enough for the support and kind words, it is a confidence boost to say the least, and I need them...so glad you enjoyed this one Mark :)

[Ashira Macy]

You must be a fun drunk, I don't get all deep and contemplative, just really huggy to everyone. Gotta make sure everyone in the room knows that I love them. =P Sometimes it is important to do things simply because you want to. If people never did that then what kind of world would we live in? All disconnected and apathetic... oh wait... Perhaps that is what is happening... In that case, lead on the Want Revolution General!

[kublakhan27]

Haha Are you kidding, I'm not a fun anything...I'd much rather be huggy than deep when I'm drunk, though apparently it makes for good poetry...it just sucks that I have to be as depressed as I was here to pull it off haha Oh well, I feel better now...the world is definitely disconnected and apathetic now, it's up to us writers to lead the charge ;) So glad you enjoyed this one Ashira :)

[Botania]

...baffled day of comprehension... Love this! Sometimes the answers are more perplexing than the questions.

[kublakhan27]

I hear you loud and clear...thanks so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

[TL Boehm]

maybe you should disregard the future while its safe. the vapid verdict of chance. WOW. Great poetry here

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it TL, thank you for the kind words :)

[Avinash]

Words really fit in quite well. They have mixed feelings of gratitude and separation. Enjoyed reading it .

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Avinash :)

[Blake Fodor]

Lovely imagery and very well described, it is easy to buy into this place you build. Well done on this one.

[kublakhan27]

Glad you enjoyed it, thank you Blake.

[Frieda P]

Oh grasshopper, you need to enjoy the journey more. We always tend to see it as there's
an ending point where we think we 'should' end up, what we envision is usually never the finale...you know what they say, 'wanna make god laugh, tell him your plans'....that. The truth is there's no grand
prize, it's the experiences we/you take away from it...life is kinda like poetry, we're always
waiting for that next best thing to make our horizon's seem complete, but as we well know
that's never gonna happen....I suppose we all wage this battle within ourselves....smile Benji, I
think the sooner we accept that the road is endless, we realize we're simply human and it's never going to be perfect... ;)

I think Dali might be taking a vacation, this was pure Steve....'you can't always get what you want'...and all that jazz... :) xo

Hemingway got it write....haha

[kublakhan27]

This brought a smile to my face love...I'm not even sure where to start...it's funny that one of my most straightforward pieces is probably one of my deepest...you know how it is with me, no average days...I'm either giggling like a schoolgirl or hiding from the daylight...I'm getting better at day-to-day living though, which likely coincides with my retirement from making plans haha It is very much like poetry...the problem is (and I've said many times) I'm usually depressed after every single poem I write...anyways, I feel much better now than when I wrote this, that's the main thing...your review made me feel better as well :) I like that 'plans' quote, I forgot about that one, and I know just where Ernest was coming from ;) xo

[AprilRN1210]

"frozen to the vapid verdict of a chance immunity to fate"????? really Steve?? this is hard to digest in relation to you.. nope... refuse to believe this....

"Still you did
the best you could
to define me
in judicious riddles"..... you are one big "riddle" to solve.. you are deep and complex with some many colors and flavors... so this one is believable...

"Answers I retain
like a practicing Yoda
for a baffled day
of comprehension"....... you hold on to those sir... and you keep "practicing digesting them".. for anyone who takes the time to try and understand and answer, surely cares and means well.. and probably should be listened to......

that want is what drives us... motivates us... and keeps the hope alive... hold on to it and follow it sir.. it usually steers you right... a write that is as layered and complex as you.. beautiful as always...

[kublakhan27]

Haha No don't worry bud, that's not how I really feel, I was just really depressed when I wrote this...mind you, I'm a riddle to myself on my happiest day...I guess everybody feels like that sometimes, but it's like a full-time job for me...I don't know what I'd do if I didn't write, it's the only thing I gain any sense of direction from...but what more can I say, you do understand, and I do listen to you, you know that ;) Thank you April :)

[AprilRN1210]

you're welcome sir... and good, I am glad you don't FEEL that way... I think a LOT of us writers feel as if we don't know what we would do if we didn't write... serves many purposes in our lives... and I am glad you "say" you listen.. but do you hear?.... you are more than welcome... ((HUGS))

[kublakhan27]

That's a good question my friend, I've been asking it of myself for years :P ((hugs))

[DIVYA]

Sometimes we know the answers but cannot really really understand them. As we do not the people who come and go from our lives. That is life. And we are but human. So our bafflement is excusable. An awesome write.

"Still you did
the best you could
to define me
in judicious riddles
of compassion
Answers I retain
like a practicing Yoda
for a baffled day
of comprehension"

Loved the lines!

[kublakhan27]

I'm happy that this one spoke to you my friend...as personal as this one is, it doesn't really 'sound' like me to me...it's definitely one of my most straightforward writes for all of the things going on in it, and I did actually try to prop it up haha But yes, I seem to have this compulsive need to complicate things...sometimes I think I've had the answers and still disregarded them, I suppose this poem is an attempt to rectify that in a way...thank you Divya :)

[DIVYA]

You are most welcome Steve :)