BUT OF WANT

08 28 14

The final thing
I ever wished to do
I have done
Not on grounds of fear
or fulfillment
but of want
Maybe you should
disregard the future
while it's safe
I'm already frozen
to the vapid verdict
of a chance
immunity to fate
Still you did
the best you could
to define me
in judicious riddles
of compassion
Answers I retain
like a practicing Yoda
for a baffled day
of comprehension

Author's Note

Write drunk. Edit sober. - Hemingway

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Reviews

[Rene Salinas]

Write drunk - Great never edit make friends that out of love will make you find the editing. It is very difficult for me to read this and not have my Mom (No I do not have oedipus Complex just in case some of you clever ones...) "I want never gets" she used to say. Sure it fitted in that context. But also fitting is the metaphor of two Bhuddist monks that never choose to be monks as they do and from all form od Bhuddist they land on Zen not sure if that's a blessing or a curse. Too late to choose though someone already choose for them. To ponder and to fragment experiences and to wait for answer that my or may not feel right I see more as a form of communication as I said your friends, the ones that are willing to show love will help you .

Very focused writing this

Thankyou

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Rene, my friends basically are my answers, they're the only reason I know anything...glad you enjoyed this one.

[Briana O'Connor]

This is very deep and thought provoking. I enjoyed the read very much. One thing I would recommend is to add in punctuation. It would signify significant pauses needed in the peace for rhythmic purposes. Thank you for sharing!

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it PL...most of my poems are broken into stanzas, but for this one I wanted a bit of an uneasy pace, so I used the capitalizations as a sort of punctuation, kind of like speed bumps haha Thanks for the pointer though :)

[realmwriter]

I prefer to write while I have had little sleep. I find I write really good poetry while lost in the we hours of the morning, eyes peeling back like a skinned naked rabbit. Very well done friend.

[kublakhan27]

Oh same here, the lion's share of my writing, and pretty much all the best-received stuff, is written after midnight, feigning sleep cuz I know it won't be near as good if I save it till the next day...thanks as always for the support my friend.

[realmwriter]

You're very welcome

[lee von cleef]

Define, yes the riddle you did fine Hemingway, drunk or Knot, too bad you died before the wine came of age.Yoda you might of liked him ,drunk.Judicious the moving river of law, is now a raft of apathy, Kublakhan 27 is "in with the young out with the old" a regular Avett Brother.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much lee, I enjoyed your review.

[FateDictates]

liked your play on the opposite word meanings, it always works:)

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Fate :)

[Cory Barrett]

I really enjoy the way you write sir. I find it in complete contrast to the way i tend to operate, but it is so damn intriguing.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much my friend, we do have different styles, but I equally intrigued and always captivated by yours.

[MsJewel]

I like the way your mind works...(even drunk)..you weave words like no other. So many brilliant lines..
Still you did
the best you could
to define me
in judicious riddles
of compassion
Which is quite thought provoking...do we really wish to be defined?
Another masterpiece from your pen.

:) Julie

[kublakhan27]

I think I confuse definition with identity a lot (especially when I've drank a bit apparently haha) The more I write though, the closer I get to picking them apart...thanks so much as always for the support and kind words my friend, you always inspire me :)

[Johnson Bobby]

There's a place where you can get a chance
And we have to do what ever happeneds when
The clock strikes 12 midnight!


Johnsonbobby

[kublakhan27]

Very true...thank you Johnson :)

[Melliflower]

Intoxicating... utterly wonderful piece. Love the authors note as well!

[kublakhan27]

Haha The note says it all...so glad you enjoyed it Melliflower :)

[Pryde Foltz]

Haha … laughing at the author's note. Some really brilliant lines in this one, Steve. A little different from your usual style but very effective. But stay sober;) Well most of the time.

[kublakhan27]

Haha It's funny how one of my most straightforward works seem to be one of the deepest...and trust me, I did my best to complicate them but once it got written down, I couldn't change it for the life of me...so glad you enjoyed it Pryde...this was pay week so I'll be back to my maudlin sober self next week ;)