WAITING FOR ECHO'S RESOLUTION (Collab with APRIL)

08 24 14

Premonition agitated
by a culmination of Siamese effects
somehow immune to illegitimate causes
Predilection for a slumber to forget
the din of waking's undisputed knowledge
overruled by reality's judge in his
existential monotone sound booth
playing redundant, rejected residuals
of yesterday's woes willfully wronged
waiting for echo's resolution
in a crestfallen comfort cocoon
stitched with fate's cheapened conscience
hanging by a thread of silent lucidity
Broken legs hobble laps of luxury
and send despondent walks to the corner
for a temperamental reset
A mental epithet relayed by obviation's
extrasensory transponder unwittingly
igniting wishful thinking
stealth as a motorized Orca
painfully pushing possession
past the point of no returns
yet marbles of melancholy meander
where the green grass of generalization grows
sprouting springs of sensibility and sapience
threatening telepathic telemetry
with their malignant callousness

Author's Note

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

There is no stitching in this flowing verse full of such powerful alliteration. It is a rage of a piece that has the feel of someone stuck in depression and feeling sorry for themselves:
'overruled by reality's judge in his
existential monotone sound booth
playing redundant, rejected residuals
of yesterday's woes willfully wronged'

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you John... I think it is funny that you quoted two of his and two of mine.. we wrote this literally in minutes and no editing, so I am tickled with how it came out.. was spontaneous just spur of the moment, feeding off each other... As always, I appreciate your kind, thoughtful, insightful reviews..

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it John...not much I can say, April has summed it up perfectly...many thanks.

[Frieda P]

Holy wow, smooth as silk, considering you both have such distinct styles this just flows in perfect symbiotic harmony....like those meandering marbles of melancholy that tend to keep us hostages unwillingly, so has your awesome collaboration, although I have most willingly surrendered in this winding journey you've presented here so fruitfully ....bravo!

[AprilRN1210]

Gooooood morning sunshine!!! How are you?.. I have missed you girl!! Who would've thought right?... You know as big a fan as I am of his work, I HAD to try:)
We are so tickled with how it turned out and that you enjoyed.. You know that means a lot!!
((hugs) to you ma'am...:)

[Frieda P]

Who knew sassy spice and abstract Dali could sing together so splendidly, the power of poetry compels us! haa....buongiorno sweetie! :)

[AprilRN1210]

power of poetry indeed!... He took the lead and I just followed.. Thankfully he was gentle... lol

[Frieda P]

Ha could Benji be anything but gentle, c'mon, he's a pussycat within a RAWR of his undeniable poetic skills. :)

[AprilRN1210]

His mind is so frikken amazing that you know as well as I that it can be scary.... so nah!!!
I am just a simple gal who writes silly scribbles... so yep... was not scared of him... more of his amazing talent.. :)
and I know you KNOW where I am coming from!! :P

[Frieda P]

I know write? Not sure why more poets don't recognize his humongous talent?! Yes, I KNOW, I KNOW ;)

[AprilRN1210]

HA! I thought so!!! wahooo!! squishy kisses and ((hugs)) to you!!

[AprilRN1210]

lmao that was supposed to say sloppy kisses and squishy hugs.. brain isn't fully awake yet.. :P

[Frieda P]

Squishy kisses OH MY! ;)

[AprilRN1210]

I knew you wouldn't just give me a free pass....LMAO.... what-ever!!
pass the coffee ma'am...

[Frieda P]

Seriously?!!! haha

[AprilRN1210]

oh my gawd!! yes!! seriously!! it is called compassion..:P
and dang, gonna make me go find my own... jeez.. releasing little ole me into the jungle without caffeine.. :(

[Frieda P]

C'mon who did you think you were tawkin to? ....you will survive & thrive grasshopper. :)

[AprilRN1210]

forgive me.... momentary lapse in synapses...:P
I'm a survivor, I'm gonna make it.... thanks now you have that song in my head!! grrrr

[kublakhan27]

Wow, you girls get in more words per minute than my diminutive brain can handle ;) I have to read through this before I can actually say anything else haha

[kublakhan27]

Okay, here I go...needless to say we're both thrilled that you enjoyed our collab Mrs.R...you know how much the both of us look up to you as a writer and a friend so it means the world to know that you enjoyed it...we were both nervously interested in finding out how our differing styles were going to mesh, and it's funny that it's the first thing a lot of people mentioned haha

I'm now reading the rest of this thread and I can literally feel my face getting warm...I must be apple-red right now...you two are way too good to me, and I'm really not worthy of such abundant gushing, not that I'm complaining either ha ;) But really, take some credit April! Yes, I may have started it, but you really drove the bus from there on, and your lines are some of the best you've ever written...you didn't require me for that to happen, I know those lines were already there, you just needed the right poem to fit them into :)

So yeah, can we have a group hug now? And I hope you saved some squishy kisses for me Mrs.R ;)

[Frieda P]

Ha that's what happens when you snooze Benji! You knew I'd love this, abundant gushing was in order, you guys really rocked this, I'm a wee bit green with envy! :) xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha Two days with my mother would drain anybody love ;) Well you know I feel the same way too sometimes right? ;)

[Frieda P]

Oh geez, that's probably what my son is saying about ME right now...you kids! ;)

[AprilRN1210]

well lookie who woke up... nice to see ya sir!! and thank you.. ((big hugs)) to both...

[Frieda P]

I have to finish cooking up dinner for my son who isn't coming since he got a better offer from his girlfriend, which I can't compete with.... hah Leaving a squishy kiss for you guys. ;)

[kublakhan27]

Ha I'd come for dinner Mrs.R, if only I had a passport ;P Squishy kisses back ;)

[AprilRN1210]

haha... can't compete with eh?... enjoy ma'am... always nice to see you..

[Zahra]

A really profound and strong piece. Thanks for sharing

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you so much for this lovely review.. I am glad that you enjoyed our collab..

[Zahra]

yep I did. Great collab.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Zahra.

[Sophy Freebirds]

Hell! I had never thought in my dream that both of you will have a collab. You two have just different styles. It would have been quite difficult to know it was a collab if it wasn't mentioned. Your voices merged and flowed together. "Stiched with fate's cheapened conscience"- this line talked to me because i had a recent discussion with my friend on relevance of fate. I could see my thought being reflected here.Liked the last two lines.. sensibility springs but is obscured by malignant callousness... wow guys!! You just rocked.. :)

~Sophy

[AprilRN1210]

Ha! I know right! the unlikeliest of collabs but was so much fun!! He is a dream to work with... I am glad you enjoyed this girl. :)

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Sophy, I'm still grinning like a goof as I read over your review...April is too modest to point it out, but all of the lines you singled out are hers...this one definitely would not have happened without her...other than that, I'm speechless...it's been kind of fun seeing the expressions of surprise by some people who did not expect a collab from us due to our differing styles haha But it worked, and we're thrilled that it did...thanks so much my friend :)

[Sophy Freebirds]

It was definitely a success ;) was a pleasure to read

[R Smith]

I feel immense power in this, the words jump out from the page/screen it is alliteration supreme, I may read and re-read a hundred times and still find something new or even believe I missed something I did'ent, its mind altering without the drugs, blows me away.

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you Richie.. I am tickled that we could blow you away!... It was a fun challenge for sure.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Richard...I'm good with alliteration sometimes but April has it down to a perfect science, and all credit goes to her for those bits...so glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for the very cool review :)

[R Smith]

you are both very welcome.

[AprilRN1210]

haha.. I can't help it... weakness of mine..

[kublakhan27]

A weakness? I think you need a nurse now bud ;)

[AprilRN1210]

yes, it is a weakness, it just comes to me and I can't help it.. I try to tone it done sometimes, but hey, it tickles my fancy, what can I say:P

[kublakhan27]

As you should...it's one of your poetic trademarks :)

[kublakhan27]

I mean it 'should' tickle your fancy...sounds like I was saying you 'should' tone it down...you should definitely not tone it down ;)

[AprilRN1210]

lol... I got what you meant.. and thank you.. very sweet Steve... made me giggle.. :)

[Troy Henson]

Wow you two! The elements of both of you ring out in this piece. Well crafted and put together with some great word choices making it an easy and exciting piece to read.

great write

[AprilRN1210]

Hey you!!! how are you?... We are pretty darn tickled with how this came out... I am so glad that you enjoyed.. admit, I was so nervous because we do write so differently.. but I think we did good.. Thank you so much for this lovely review, and it is so nice to see you sir..

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Troy, I'm glad you enjoyed our collab...our differing styles is that first thing that everyone has mentioned, and we were thinking about it too, and I think the challenge of trying to combine our styles was too intriguing for us to pass up...so glad you enjoyed it :)

[Mark]

Ok… gotta say… it’s about frikken time!!! Seriously, this is a collab I have been waiting for, why has it taken so long? ;) ok… read 4 times (though it’s not uncommon for Kubla or April writes ;) sooooo many favourite lines…. (But I don’t wanna be one of those guys… ) So what I will say… is you and April.. Sing in tune… the flow and word choice… beautiful, seriously.. Not in one voice, no… but a voice in tune, harmony, alliteration adding to Kubla’s insightful assertive word selections, matched or hashed? in poetic synchronization leaving two hearts with a singular voice… complementing each other… as every duet should
Well done :) encore! Encore :) please?

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you Mark... I am tickled you enjoyed our collab... He is such an amazing writer and I admit I was nervous because we write so different, but I am tickled at how it turned out.. and with no editing!... you are too kind.. this is such an awesome review.. I appreciate your sweet words..

[kublakhan27]

I can only smile and echo April's sentiments Mark...I'm so glad you enjoyed our collab...April is being very modest, and deserves much of the credit for making this happen...I think we were both pleasantly surprised by how well our styles gelled, we were both nervous about that...I'm sure we'll attempt others in the future...again, thanks so much for the awesome review.

[Rene Salinas]

I can hear on this Kublas fury and rage and I hope not too much of a strong word educated despair. It It is a very intense ride no doubt about that. At least for me an invigorating one and it bears the question why when it feels like something is falling at terminal velocity and there isn't even an attempt to slow down? In fact I know the word terminal should mean something but if it could go faster and add more frenzy it will be greatlyy appreciated. Playing redundant, rejected residuals, of yesterday's woes willfully wronged doesn't even come as contradictions but as something used to, so aware, and in touch with itself that has beome accepted.

What a ride

Thankyou both

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much for the enthusiastic review Rene...April can weigh in on this too, but I think our heads are residing around the same place these days...it just felt like the right time to work together on something, having never done it before...it was very cool finding a middle ground between our respective styles, which are admittedly different...so glad you enjoyed it.

[AprilRN1210]

Hey Rene!! thank you for this lovely, insightful, thoughtful review.. It was fun to try and write something with such an amazing writer who we all know writes completely different from myself.. I think for a first attempt it turned out ok... and I love that you quoted my line.. and agree with your insights on it... glad you enjoyed the ride sir.. and as always, appreciate your time and thoughts.. :)

[Matching Socks]

I see two people travelling along parallel paths, each with their owns burdens to bear, and bare to one another as they keep moving forward together.

You're pretty brave writing with April. :)
And she writing with you...? I think she's nuts!

Great collab, nice to see you guys trying new things, and having success.
You guys are at the top of my faves. :)
xo

[kublakhan27]

LOL We are a bit of an odd couple aren't we? ;) And which is the braver one for working with the other? haha

I think we were both curious to see how our styles would mesh, and we're both pretty thrilled with how it turned out...I think we wound up producing something fairly unique by both our standards haha So glad you enjoyed it my friend...it means a lot :) xo

[AprilRN1210]

Thank you ma'am... it was a blast to work with him!! You know I love a challenge... I am glad that you enjoyed... I an a little NUTS... but am tickled at how it turned out.. odd couple or not... :)

[AprilRN1210]

This was soooo much fun!!! I so enjoyed writing this piece with you!!! I love the way you challenge my mind and how easy and well this flowed my friend... who would've thought we could come up with something like this as fast as we did.. you are awesome my friend, and this piece ROCKS!!!

I will collab with YOU anytime... wahoooo!!!

[AprilRN1210]

ok this sucks!! I can't add to my library or send RR... :(
I have tried closing browser three times... what the heck...stupid site!!!

[kublakhan27]

What can I say my friend, I'm just glad that I could offer you a positive means of getting through the night...it was indeed a blast working with you, and I must confess I had no idea how our styles would merge, but I'm thrilled with how it turned out...thanks for giving me the opportunity to work with you April, we must surely do it again sometime :)

I hope your glitches don't last as long as mine did...I went about three weeks being unable to do those things...they only started working for me again this week, but I'll be paranoid all the time now that they'll just stop working out of the blue x_x This site can be an awful test of one's resolve at the best of times :(

[AprilRN1210]

I got them sent.. I just switched browsers temporarily.. yay!! and yes, stupid glitches.. I am tickled at how well we "merged"... and anytime, my friend....