My waking is a walk into a destitute daydream blindfolded by the sun's embroidery of Scarlett redundancy Another day of self-fulfilling fiction siphoned through decisive shutters swallowing deflated social bait with arid straws of filtered daylight mocking optimistic fabrications of a rippled audience with the benign transcendent therapy of your angelic quintessence A woman lurks in your impression of a knighting manifestation on my shoulders sulking under solitude's weight yet the sword of your anointing revelation isn't flat and flush with the descending contours of my collarbones On my shoulders I collect the clammy pools of blood culled from a reality's severing duet From my body falls all aptitude for sensitivity to apathy and between decapitation and the day acceptance is adopted with a sigh of relativity You saved me from a death by disregarded hours and released me to another day alone but alive
awwwwww... I LOVE this song... soooo dang sweet... I am seriously singing along and smiling right now.. oh my gawd... thank you for that... my spirit is dancing happily with your deep, meaning words... this is.... wow... ok.. the poem.... it is layered, but the sparkly rays of sweet sentiment are sprinkled throughout..
you know I get where you are coming from and can relate on so many levels.. alive is a start sir.. it is actually, a damn good start... alone is fixable... some of us are only a click or text away... ((hugs) to you my friend.. what a lovely piece..
So glad you enjoyed the song April, it's a favourite of mine as well :) And of course I'm even gladd.. read moreSo glad you enjoyed the song April, it's a favourite of mine as well :) And of course I'm even gladder that you enjoyed the poem...I'm smiling knowing that you're smiling too :) Yes, you always do know where I'm coming from my friend, and I'm thankful beyond words for that...whenever I'm depressed, which is most of the time, my mother tells me just to be happy and thankful that I'm alive...such a simple and sensible piece of advice, yet so hard for me to wrap my mind around at times...I'm starting to get more comfortable with that belief as I get older, but it's hardly a be-all-and-end-all remedy...then again I wonder if I'd ever write if I were simply content with being alive...anyways I'm going off the rails now haha You know how much your friendship and support mean to me my friend, and I'll never feel alone as long as I have it...so glad you enjoyed this piece, and I hope you're doing okay today...you know I worry about you :) ((hugs))
10 Years Ago
never a remedy in the matters of the head and the heart like that my friend... (just saying)... well.. read morenever a remedy in the matters of the head and the heart like that my friend... (just saying)... well, then looks like you won't feel alone then, cause have it you do... I am as well as can be expected.. one moment at a time.. thank you..
10 Years Ago
Thanks again my friend, I'll be checking in on you from time to time :)
I have shared many times how I am taken back by your clarity of thought. What you share is not easy to see nevermind giving it away as you do. !Another day of self-fulfilling fiction, siphoned through decisive shutters, swallowing deflated social bait" I mean that in itself is a crushing point of view. To the rescue or so it seems is the feminine presence. Only to go back to the confession of accepting that the gesture came small and it only serve to borrow some time.
The darkness in its poetical form very attractive to me. But if this was to be a reflection of your reality Kubla. It leaves me unsettled.
Hope all is well.
Thankyou
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10 Years Ago
What can I say, I could never be mistaken for one with a sunny disposition...it's not the first time.. read moreWhat can I say, I could never be mistaken for one with a sunny disposition...it's not the first time I would leave one unsettled with my reflections on reality...but in the spirit of the poem, every day's a new day, and I've survived them all to this point, so I do have things to be thankful for...but you know how it is, the grass always greener and all that...
Thanks so much for your support as always Rene, and I'm glad my work speaks to you and that you enjoy it...I hope you are well too...all the best.
Ohh boy! ! You really need some assistance bro.... nothing in this life is static. You can't laugh on the same joke twice,then how come can you brood over the past always. Everybody on this planet have scars.. many have more than you.So my dear friend just dwell in the present not in the past.
Coming to the poem i must say every person here is gonna relate to this blood on the shoulders.. the blinding still gloomy sunshine. Everyone is betrayed by someone. But forgive and forget is the golden rule. I know its hard but you are strong enough. I know.yes you didn't die. You are alive. It means you have a purpose. Find it,follow it. Your own words will show you the way. :)
I understand where you're coming from on all fronts Sophy...I struggle with this advice everyday, an.. read moreI understand where you're coming from on all fronts Sophy...I struggle with this advice everyday, and as I've mentioned before, I will continue to lean on it, and hopefully one day it will stick and I will be more content than what I usually am...but forgiving and forgetting has been an almost unattainable quality for me...I can forgive the occasional slight on me, but I forget nothing...I do know that my life is hardly as trying as many of the others who will read this piece, and a sense of guilt comes with that because I spend so much time bemoaning my issues when I know that so many others have it worse...but I'm getting better...I know that writing is my purpose, and I just have to be more thankful for the ability rather than mournful of the subject matter I write about...thank so much Sophy for reading and as always, for understanding :)
10 Years Ago
Writing vents up your feeling as well as it soothes.. so good luck for the healing process :) it wa.. read moreWriting vents up your feeling as well as it soothes.. so good luck for the healing process :) it was a pleasure Steve
Brush that blood and loneliness from your shoulders my friend, it is better than the alternative, and there may be scars, but the wounds are not permanent. And as Sophy said, scars are just proof that you have lived a full life. I am going to have to stop my pep talk before I burst into song about how gray skies are gonna clear up. Anyway, as always I loved your imagery. It brought me through the journey with you, as though I was watching from the crowd as all this unfolded. Wonderfully penned.
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10 Years Ago
I'm doing my best my friend...loneliness is not something that can easily be washed away, but as I t.. read moreI'm doing my best my friend...loneliness is not something that can easily be washed away, but as I told Sophy, I'm hanging in there...I will say that the support and the kind reviews I've gotten for this piece have gone a long way in restoring the smile on my face...it does bring me optimism, the trick is keeping it fresh in my mind without the constant need for propping up, which has really been my emotional undoing since my youth...I should just spend more time referring to these reviews on my worst days, and realizing how much support and friendship I really do have here, as opposed to not getting the degree of it that I crave...thanks so much for the thoughtful review Ashira, I'm happy that you enjoyed this piece :)
10 Years Ago
Depression is a beast that can never truly be tamed, just tired out. I know how that is. But you de.. read moreDepression is a beast that can never truly be tamed, just tired out. I know how that is. But you definitely do have a lot of fans and friends on here who would love to see you legitimately happy. Those who are the most talented often feel that they are not, so when you feel like that, or any emotion that might be linked to that just remember that there are thousands of reviews from lots of friends stating otherwise.
awwwwww... I LOVE this song... soooo dang sweet... I am seriously singing along and smiling right now.. oh my gawd... thank you for that... my spirit is dancing happily with your deep, meaning words... this is.... wow... ok.. the poem.... it is layered, but the sparkly rays of sweet sentiment are sprinkled throughout..
you know I get where you are coming from and can relate on so many levels.. alive is a start sir.. it is actually, a damn good start... alone is fixable... some of us are only a click or text away... ((hugs) to you my friend.. what a lovely piece..
So glad you enjoyed the song April, it's a favourite of mine as well :) And of course I'm even gladd.. read moreSo glad you enjoyed the song April, it's a favourite of mine as well :) And of course I'm even gladder that you enjoyed the poem...I'm smiling knowing that you're smiling too :) Yes, you always do know where I'm coming from my friend, and I'm thankful beyond words for that...whenever I'm depressed, which is most of the time, my mother tells me just to be happy and thankful that I'm alive...such a simple and sensible piece of advice, yet so hard for me to wrap my mind around at times...I'm starting to get more comfortable with that belief as I get older, but it's hardly a be-all-and-end-all remedy...then again I wonder if I'd ever write if I were simply content with being alive...anyways I'm going off the rails now haha You know how much your friendship and support mean to me my friend, and I'll never feel alone as long as I have it...so glad you enjoyed this piece, and I hope you're doing okay today...you know I worry about you :) ((hugs))
10 Years Ago
never a remedy in the matters of the head and the heart like that my friend... (just saying)... well.. read morenever a remedy in the matters of the head and the heart like that my friend... (just saying)... well, then looks like you won't feel alone then, cause have it you do... I am as well as can be expected.. one moment at a time.. thank you..
10 Years Ago
Thanks again my friend, I'll be checking in on you from time to time :)
My first book is out! Any comments that anyone may have to offer regarding my work would be deeply appreciated, as I'm yet to get a review.
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