OKAY, CORRAL ME

08 16 14

Pockets of apocryphal enormity
I grudgingly inherited through word of mouth
I can barely see let alone walk
in the shadow of the mainstream's
efficacious coattails
Sing a song of six-guns in my honour
when I choke on the tuberculosis
of ambition taken out of context
and embalm me with the dog-eared
ghost of a scripture in training
Effigies stuffed with the satisfaction
of my just desserts like a turkey
will be occupied by yours truly
for you see I was born disembodied
Penance is the purpose I've been saving up
my pounds of purgatory for
All your masochistic anti-wakes
I will nullify with my delight in your insane
cathartic festivals of spite
When existence is a paid-in-fate sabbatical
the job of sweeping up a castigated legacy
is all the heaven I require or deserve

Author's Note

Avatar: Anxiety by Edvard Munch

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Hmmmm.....someone reprimanded you and now you are venting? You really have opened an eloquent can of whoopass on someone here. Your choice of vocabulary is stellar! To ignore you, well, those six guns should be pointed in the opposite direction. I think you hit the bulls eye here....and I hope it was a bit of a catharsis for you. Lydi**

[kublakhan27]

Seems like I'm always venting now doesn't it my friend? But that's just how it is...I'm simply not a cherry or optimistic person, and it feels like everything I write is the equivalent of a can of whoop-a*s on someone or some group...and unfortunately I know I'm not done yet...there are too many things going on right now that just have me throbbing with bitter cynicism...but as always, you bring a smile to my face and make me realize that I have much to be thankful for, I only wish I were as good at articulating those feelings as I am the others...so glad you enjoyed this one Lydi, and thanks so much for understanding as always :)

[Rene Salinas]

Well after the last installment which I was delighted to come aross points of view have change althugh your passion, and desire, I would say a healthy amoung of anger , conflict even fed up to some degree came across yet it did not come across as blindly irresolute. I got a feeling that you seems to know and ave learnt to accept the challenges that have been thrown your way. I am not sure but maybe even you have gone all the way to embrace them , make them yours why not.

But the heat still burns.

Thankyou

[kublakhan27]

A most eloquent assessment of my current mindset, which gave birth to this piece...yes, I'm full of those emotions you speak of, anger, frustration, conflict, but I don't even care at this point to be honest...I'm not a cherry or a flowery person, that's just the way it is, so I might as well just take those aforementioned emotions and try to produce something positive from them...and even though this poem is hardly positive, it was therapeutic to get it out, and will probably clear my head for another little while at least...thanks so much for insightful review Rene, I'm glad you enjoyed the piece.

[Frieda P]

This isn't about S-E-X, right? ;) Holy Benjamins! Sing a song of six-guns, a pocketful of fire...WHOA, I wish you'd tell us how you really feel Steve! Choking on tuberculosis is downright nasty....in masochistic disembodied dog ear years..OUCH to the entire piece of work here.

How can one not read this genius stuff!? Crazy people, insane, can't see past their noses apparently!!! Nuff said, love it....love you Benji. ;) xox

1000 castigated legacies :)

[kublakhan27]

Haha If it is about that Mrs.R, it's dirty and depraved and not meant for decent types ;P You've offered what I'm sure will be the most accurate assessment of this piece that I will get, more accurate than I thought I'd get from anyone, but shame on me for underestimating Mrs.R's ability to see right through me ;) Ouch is a good word to sum it all up I think...you know I was going for the jugular in this one...

I expect no more than four or five reviews including yours...heck, I'm still stuck at three since yesterday morning on the other one...so all I can say is that I wish them well in their insanity ;) Thanks so much love, so glad you enjoyed this one :) xox

[Frieda P]

Ha I can't respond yet, my jaw is still laying on the floorboards. ;) Ha, next time, write with some gusto will ya? hahaha ;) MWAH! If people don't read this, they seriously need their head examined and/or an attitude adjustment. ;) xo

[kublakhan27]

Ha It's alright love, I've had my cathartic outburst for the day, I think I can deal with whatever happens from here, for today anyway...everyone else will do what they gotta do, but you know I got the review I look forward to the most ;) MWAH! xo

[Frieda P]

You spun me around so, I forgot to listen to the music, I never do that! Ha, too funny... ;) x

[kublakhan27]

Haha I can't explain how but the song does fit...I didn't even debate the music on this one ;) xo