MORTALITY IN SHOCK

Inspired by the graphic, provided by Frieda...08 14 14

Levitating like a liberated nightmare
over my subconscious of a limp mortality
with a scythe that channels shark teeth
spearheaded by a needled fin of fatalistic intent
I scour catatonic instincts for an abscess of comfort
in the grey folds shadowing his black essence
(The best hope I have for a deciphering of weakness)
A cape of flaming pitch wavers in the crackles
of his path like the remnants of a live cremation
A hood aflutter flirts with the status of
a showpiece of excess in the context
of an antithesis of face or any human semblance
susceptible to rationale's potential
Surely I am frozen in a prostrate of vulnerable
paleness pasted on my trepidation's stillness
Never have I felt so hapless in mortality
as his direction clarifies on an implied steed
under his impeding festival of shapeshifting advance
I'm a humble epilogue on human legs
in the presence of an answer to the question
we pursue just enough to stay in a convenient ignorance
There can be no doubt in this phenomenon
I have found enlightenment in the darkest possibility

Author's Note

Reviews

[Ashira Macy]

My goodness this sounds like quite a story. What is the graphic called? It is possible that this world is in even more turmoil than our own, or at least what I have personally seen of our own though I don't pretend to know the extensive horrors that go on outside of my peripheral vision. Anyway, you did a wonderful job of bringing the reader into the story. I like to read yours a couple of times to make sure I don't miss anything, you always pack so much wonderful description in. Cheers my friend. Now that I am almost completely done with the millions of read requests I came back to I can start reading all of my friends' poetry again. I have been missing yours and a few others.

[kublakhan27]

You humble me with your kind word my friend :) I'm not sure what it's called, or if it has a name...it came from Frieda, so she might know...I think there is more turmoil in the world than we want to acknowledge, and we already know there's a hell of a lot of it, yet we continue to try and wish things away by rationalizing them...I'm so glad that my writing engulfs you and makes you think...I can't tell you how much I appreciate you taking the time to really read and absorb my work...it means the world...thanks so much Ashira :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Here's what happens when I go away for a few days -- everyone steals everything I would have said in a review and now it would just sound like a carbon copy -- but a really nice write here, and for me, it almost had a fatalistic feel, like the speaker chose the dark side ...

[kublakhan27]

I know just how you feel my friend, when I go away then try to compose reviews when I get back...but just knowing that you like it is all that matters to me...I'm not sure if it's me embracing the darkness or vice-versa...I try to convince myself that it's the latter, but it just seems so much easier to to just take the dark route sometimes isn't it? Oh well, I'm in a better mood now than when I wrote it haha So glad you enjoyed it KL.

[Jennie Baron]

Darkly and wonderfully eloquent beyond my ability to express. I think I read it quickly before, but it keeps unfolding layers with each reading. I didn't even know what I could add to what the other reviewers had said! Thanks for bringing such an amazing write to my attention.

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed this one Jennie, it's certainly a piece that came from a deep and dark place...thank you as always for the support and kind words...it goes a long way in keeping me confident, which is not one of my strong suits :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and who'll stop the rain?

we can't ....mortality is that dark cloud that follows us, a voyeur watching us make decisions in life...much like Oedipus...we might think we know where we are going...but a force is driving us...like a very hard rainstorm.

"long as i remember, rain's been falling down"

and what frieda and april said....too many good lines to pick out a couple...

i think i'll "go down Virginia" and seek some shelter from the storm of emotions contained herein.

[kublakhan27]

I was ready for 'Virginia' after this one my friend, feeling like I needed shelter from my own thoughts...I like the Oedipus connection, it never crossed my mind at the time but it makes perfect sense, unlike that undefinable force, which is over all our heads...so glad you enjoyed this one Jacob...I didn't think of this as much more than a dark little vignette at first, but it's becoming more substantial to me as I revisit it myself.

[AprilRN1210]

first, I will say I love CCR... oh yes... can't go wrong with them.... secondly... wow... I have read this a few times and am BLOWN AWAY by the layers and depth that is contained... sir... you amaze me with the way you word things, the meticulous care that you put into your pieces is stunning... I am like Frieda I love each and every line, but I will add that the first two and the last two really hit me... amazing piece my friend... absolutely amazing..

[kublakhan27]

Haha Yeah they're one of my favourites as well...in fact I had the song picked before I even wrote this one ;P You've humbled me with your kind words my friend...truth is, this would not have happened without Frieda...she is a muse...I could have found this graphic myself and penned something to go with it, but it would not have been the same...her influence made it what it is...I didn't think much of it at the time, thematically or poetically, but as I read it through again myself, I think I unlocked a lot of things...circumstances of the past have made me a very frightened person, I'm not gonna lie, and I think it came out in this piece without me even realizing it...so glad you enjoyed it April, thank you :)

[AprilRN1210]

things always have a way of coming out, whether we intend or not... and she is a beautiful muse... you're more than welcome friend... although... you know you forgot something... yep.... can you guess what it is?...

[kublakhan27]

Shame on me...I'm semi-hungover but that's no excuse ;) ((hugs))

[AprilRN1210]

much better!! thank you.. ((hugs)) back to you sir.. and some water and aspirin... lol
I am sure I will be there tomorrow! it IS FRIEDAY after all.. :)

[AprilRN1210]

and yes.... shame on you!!!

[kublakhan27]

LOL Oh right, I forgot I'm talking to a nurse...shame on me for that too :)

[AprilRN1210]

ha... yep... can't help it.. once a nurse, always a nurse... not a bad thing!!

[Frieda P]

I feel like the proud Godmother. :) What can I say, I knew you'd nail this graphic to perfection. Actually you far surpassed my expectations and those were beyond the dark moon to begin with. I'd tell you which lines really tore me up, but then I'd have to copy and paste the entire piece. 'An implied steed' OH MY....your poetic bliss always crashes into me Benji. :)

Surely I am frozen in a prostrate of vulnerable
paleness pasted on my trepidation's stillness

I definitely won't be forgetting those lines any time soon....the music is perfect too.

100 catatonic phenomenons...I see Dali is back in the house! :) xo

[kublakhan27]

Need I say that you've brought a smile to my face Mrs.R? Dali fell asleep for a while but your review jolted me back to life, for a little while anyway ;) This piece would certainly not have been written without you, I'm glad to know that I nailed it for I wasn't sure...not sure what else to say really, I'm just thrilled that you like it...the song was actually the first thing that came to me haha Glad you enjoyed it love, thanks so much :) xo