MORTALITY IN SHOCK

Inspired by the graphic, provided by Frieda...08 14 14

Levitating like a liberated nightmare
over my subconscious of a limp mortality
with a scythe that channels shark teeth
spearheaded by a needled fin of fatalistic intent
I scour catatonic instincts for an abscess of comfort
in the grey folds shadowing his black essence
(The best hope I have for a deciphering of weakness)
A cape of flaming pitch wavers in the crackles
of his path like the remnants of a live cremation
A hood aflutter flirts with the status of
a showpiece of excess in the context
of an antithesis of face or any human semblance
susceptible to rationale's potential
Surely I am frozen in a prostrate of vulnerable
paleness pasted on my trepidation's stillness
Never have I felt so hapless in mortality
as his direction clarifies on an implied steed
under his impeding festival of shapeshifting advance
I'm a humble epilogue on human legs
in the presence of an answer to the question
we pursue just enough to stay in a convenient ignorance
There can be no doubt in this phenomenon
I have found enlightenment in the darkest possibility

Author's Note

Reviews

[Ashira Macy]

My goodness this sounds like quite a story. What is the graphic called? It is possible that this world is in even more turmoil than our own, or at least what I have personally seen of our own though I don't pretend to know the extensive horrors that go on outside of my peripheral vision. Anyway, you did a wonderful job of bringing the reader into the story. I like to read yours a couple of times to make sure I don't miss anything, you always pack so much wonderful description in. Cheers my friend. Now that I am almost completely done with the millions of read requests I came back to I can start reading all of my friends' poetry again. I have been missing yours and a few others.

[kublakhan27]

You humble me with your kind word my friend :) I'm not sure what it's called, or if it has a name...it came from Frieda, so she might know...I think there is more turmoil in the world than we want to acknowledge, and we already know there's a hell of a lot of it, yet we continue to try and wish things away by rationalizing them...I'm so glad that my writing engulfs you and makes you think...I can't tell you how much I appreciate you taking the time to really read and absorb my work...it means the world...thanks so much Ashira :)

[Eve Ola]

surely i am forzen by this piece :D Well done here

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Eve :)

[s y e]

Hahaha, I should have known this would be inspired by Frieda, LOL -- a lot of your poems seem to be recently. This was great Steve. You seem to be on a roll with your poems as of late. Great job, loved the message.

[kublakhan27]

Haha What can I say, she is a muse...I was on a roll for a bit but I think I'm running out of steam now...thanks so much Noodlebop :)

[Blake Fodor]

Very unique poem, good write

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Blake.

[Sophy Freebirds]

"Shark teeth,fin of fatalistic intent"- damn boy,, you floored me with this one. Yes,we are shrouded with vulnerable weakness... but slowly how the poem unfolds at last it gives me chills...finding enlightenment- we learn through our mistake. Once we travel through the darkest hours we are sure to overcome any imposter... very optimistic at the end covered with the darkest of blankets.. :) well done Steve

~Sophy

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed this little journey my friend...well I guess it isn't really a 'little' journey is it? haha You're actually the first person to read it as an optimistic piece, which is a good thing...I wanted it to go either way at the end...it's definitely a dark piece in terms of mood though...Frieda gave me this graphic, and it was like poking the bear...it brought out all kinds of stuff that was lurking in my subconscious, and it wound up becoming probably one of my most introspective pieces...thank so much Sophy :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Upon the first reading, your amazing word choices stand out. Read again, and that shroud of darkness descends. Read it aloud, and it takes on a whole new dimension. Steve, your poetry itself is a master class.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much my friend...I can't tell you how much your support and kind words mean to me...I'm truly humbled, and happy that my words resonate so deeply with you...reviews such as yours are what keep me going when my confidence is lacking :)

[Frontier]

I may have said this before, but boy! do you have words!

Somehow I feel like you try as many ways possible to capture that idea/feeling in your mind, and just put them all down like an avalanche of poetry.

[kublakhan27]

You humble me with your kind words my friend...sometimes it's an avalanche and sometimes it's an intermittent shower...thankfully this one was the former...so glad you enjoyed it :)

[Troy Henson]

Once again an amazing write by you my friend. You weave words with emotion so well and it's always a pleasure t read your work.

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed this one Troy, it's a pretty candid piece needless to say...thanks so much for the support :)

[Cory Barrett]

So dark this is suspicious of a felony. I feel like the more i read the deeper I found myself in a place that I did not want to be. Questioning mortality is not something i think i want to do anymore. You made me feel, and feel a lot.

[kublakhan27]

What can I say, it definitely came from a deep and dark place, I'm not gonna lie...I have this nasty habit of becoming all too aware of my own mortality for a number of personal reasons...all the credit must got to Frieda for providing me with the graphic that inspired this piece, and she sure picked the right one to get this poem out of me...all of these sentiments were swirling around in my system and this was the perfect tonic to get them all out...so glad that this one resonated with you so deeply, thank you Cory.

[Cory Barrett]

i will fully admit to have a dark place in me as well, but i am afraid of it. So i run and find my self running to the place where i can smell smiles ;)

[kublakhan27]

Haha A good idea...I hope I can track down that place at some point ;)

[Matching Socks]

Marvellously dark, though I suspect this dark entity would easily fall for Frieda's charm.
A magnificent write my friend.

[kublakhan27]

Haha Who wouldn't? Glad you enjoyed it Ana :)