DISTANCE

People who think that online friendship isn't real, hasn't been around one in a time of tragedy...08 09 14

Splinters of the past
lodge sadistically into
her haunted skin
planting harsh interrogations
into mortal cul-de-sacs
spinning mentally around
the core of doggedly
immortal milestones
A reality of sordid
trick questions
zap her mourning mind
like tasers of inscrutable
reminders
Closure is a hobbled
incantation handicapping
semblances of fervent prayers
Consolation drowns in remnants
of a crying candle
forced to light the dark
continuum of anniversaries
spread around a palpitating
future like frosting on a toxic cake
or a pen of tears
soaking my resigned deacon
of a distant notebook
blurring any prospect of
comprehending words

A convulsion of dividing
miles mapped inside
the vision of a motion
sickened deckhand
Smiles and embraces
whittled down to an incredulous
scribe of elegies immune
to flight on zephyrs
of a palpable alignment
of the presences of
mourner and observer

Author's Note

Reviews

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Very sad and understandable I hope you're
well my friend thank you for sharing.


I have online and long dissentient
friends if I lost them that I was very close
to would be very hard some I've never meet
wish I could .

Blessings. Benita/ kindred poet

[kublakhan27]

I understand what you mean wholeheartedly Benita...so glad you enjoyed this one, thank you as always for the kind words.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

you're welcome. thank you for sharing was a pleasure. Blessings. Benita/ kindred poet

[Jennie Baron]

How exquisite! I declare your mind makes word connections that mine never would and I admire that...but somehow it always works. Ah well, I have a lot to learn about poetry, and this is a great lesson.

[kublakhan27]

You sell yourself short my friend...I assure you that your poetry is among some of my favourite on the entire site, and there are definitely elements in your work that I look up to and wish I could replicate myself...it's the life of a poet though, we always covet the elements in others that we don't find in our own voices...so glad you enjoyed this one Jennie, you have humbled me with your kind words :)

[Jennie Baron]

You are definitely right about the nature of a poet's life. And I appreciate your compliments. Again I feel sometimes that my poems are not my own because a couple of them are really those of the fictional songwriter in my book, so maybe some of your favorites are his. He'd really like that.

[s y e]

I know exactly who this is for and I am sure she will appreciate it when she reads it. I am happy you have her as a friend Steve. Always good to have someone who keeps you in check.

[kublakhan27]

Always remember that you are a dear friend of mine as well Noodlebop, and I'm happy and blessed to have you as a friend...and you know I'll always be around to keep you in check ;) I hope you're doing okay, you know that I worry about you...

[s y e]

No need to worry, I am just peachy and same goes for you Steve.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think i have a strong idea to whom this is written...and there is much value in online friendship...
over the years i have developed intense friendships with three or four people now..many years we have been so close yet never met in person...but we feel each other's love, and joy and pain.

as you express so well here...the cul de sac line got to me, especially...i live way out in the woods, on a cul de sac....it can be both peaceful and lonely at the same time.

[kublakhan27]

I've written several poem addressed to her...she's my dearest friend, I'm sure you know who it is...as an introverted person that struggles with social anxiety, the friends i have here are the best, and only really true ones, that I have...I think online friendship is the purest kind there can be between two writers...after all, words are our comfort zone...after a while, you can just sense when one of them is going through a hard time, and this one was written under such circumstances...so glad you enjoyed this one Jacob, and I'm glad that I was able to include something you were able to relate to directly...perhaps that further proves my point and yours when it comes to knowing your online friends in unconscious ways :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, i believe i know....

[Kenneth The Poet]

A verbose leg thrombosis...an infarction that leads to decimation...wonderful.

[kublakhan27]

Glad you enjoyed this one Kenneth, it's a pretty personal one.

[redzone]

Finally been able to read this poem Steve.... truly amazing and in it lies a heart of gold for writing and a heart of the one it is written for... deep respect for the words and feeling you convey and know that it has touched a deep vein in her... online or live, distant or up close, friendships are the most important things we can have and cherish, they make our lives worthwhile... truly!!!
~~redzone

[kublakhan27]

You humble me with your kind words my friend, and I couldn't agree more...being an introverted and socially anxious person, the friends I have here are really the only friends I have...she was one of the first people that reached out to me and became a regular reader when I arrived here, but of course I'm hardly alone in that regard...she touches peoples' lives effortlessly, and her inner strength is something I'll never be able to wrap my mind around...this was definitely a heart and soul piece, and it makes me happy knowing that it spoke to you as well :)

[redzone]

It has spoken and soo well.. she truly is as you say, someone with a huge heart that lifts up everyone who know her, read her poetry, one of those special people who make living life worthwhile. And your poem certainly acknowledges this and embellishes as well. Anyway, you are more than welcome...

[Sheila Kline]

The distance in a sorrow as this is never close enough to bring it home to the heart of the ones who mourn, and as you so eloquently describe the sorrow, the pain, the "whys" of it all for this dear, dear friend who is hurting so intently for the loss of the dear soul she ever longs to see again. Steve, I know how much you two mean to one another and you have just put another exclamation point to this fact of "distance" between you that is so very close!
Beautiful, expressed with compassion and understanding to express feelings of supreme caring!!!

[kublakhan27]

I'm so glad that this one resonated with you my friend...it was not an easy write, but all of my heart is in it...it's a helpless feeling for sure, and words can only go so far, but of course, we both find our comfort zone in words, so I was trying to articulate the irony behind that balancing act...thanks so much Sheila, your support means the world :)

[Rene Salinas]

Start by saying thankyou this kind of writing for me is addictive. Not only have I indulged on the feeling that your words emanate I have been convinced to think that you are right. Of what? Irrelevant. But why? Irrelevant. Is there any truth to be found? Maybe, maybe not in fact you would be decoding dna for all I know but the beauty of the expression for me in your writing is that it has escaped the material environment.
No, what we must have is more Nuance, Colour is forbidden, only Nuance! Nuance alone writes the harmonies, Of dream and dream, There is no theory. You merely have to read /listen. Pleasure is the law.

Thankyou

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much for the insightful review my friend...I don't know if the truth will ever be found, it may be beyond us, but we have no choice but to go on seeking it...we risk going crazy either way...but this one was all about nuance for sure...so glad you enjoyed this very personal piece.

[Lacie Blackwood]

Honestly, this poem made me cry... Today, I was just going to try to figure out how this website worked, since I'm new to this, but I ended up reading many writers' creations, including yours, and they are truly amazing work.

I'm not a very dramatic person, so I don't get teary over sad things easily, but today, 2 poems including yours and AprilRN1210's poetry, so far, made me cry.

Your poem was truly touching. IT reached my heart and I will remember this poem for a while.

So thank you for this amazing piece, and I hope you keep writing :)

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Lacie...welcome to the site, and I hope I'll see some of your writing in the future...we're a tight community here, and I'm sure we all look forward to hearing more from you soon...if you have anything that you'd like to be read, just send RRs :)

[Lacie Blackwood]

You're welcome :)
And thank you for welcoming me :)

I actually just began my first story, its called Lost Regrets.
If you have time, I hope you can check it out!
Thanks

[AprilRN1210]

I agree with my friend here.. we are a close group of friends who I adore... and I am sorry if I made you cry... I welcomed you in my piece and I do it again in his... ((welcome)).... I have started your story and I have to say, not bad my friend.. well done... can't wait to read more... again if you have any questions, don't hesitate to ask one of us... :)

[Lacie Blackwood]

Thank you guys. You both are very supportive and are giving me a lot of confidence.
Thank you :)

[Frontier]

Boy, do you have words! haha

This partcularly stood out as I was thinking about this today: "Closure is a hobbled
incantation handicapping
semblances of fervent prayers"

Really good way of portraying things that end with words/externally but not on the inside.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Frontier...needless to say this is a personal piece, for a friend who was feeling down...it means a lot to me that you enjoyed this one :)