A NAME IN BURNED-OUT LIGHTS

A NAME IN BURNED-OUT LIGHTS

A Poem by kublakhan27
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A want of ambition to be overblown
circumvents a poet's oath
taken by me to assist in my
ear canal's scribbled chiseling
to allow the entertainment
of as many scores of
understanding voices
as a poet can absorb

A bearable aesthetic hangover
in the pain of culminated decibels
sure enough asphyxiated on the alter ego
soreness in the hush of revelation
that the lion's share of voices
understood some other poets
in a brighter introspective light

To a turgid degree
they were outsmarted by the
quivering suppression of my roar
beneath a cankered tongue of ink

Ambition is the retort of health
to lethargy's undoing disorder
Now I yearn with smirks immune
to health for that lethargy
to call out my jealousy of
satisfied readers and their voices
entertained in the company
of more deserving ears

© 2014 kublakhan27


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Steve, you only have to reach one person with the right message to be a hero, a superstar, a saving grace, a knight in shining armor so just be yourself, write because you enjoy it and don't worry about who is impressed, and who is not. So, I'm gonna pull a Shakespeare on you, "To thine own self be true"! You are GREAT, you don't need the approval of other writers to prove it!!

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kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

You've made me smile on a night when I didn't think it possible my friend...I don't know, I just fee.. read more
Sheila Kline

10 Years Ago

Ah, that's nice..............have a good night's sleep my friend!!!



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Steve, you only have to reach one person with the right message to be a hero, a superstar, a saving grace, a knight in shining armor so just be yourself, write because you enjoy it and don't worry about who is impressed, and who is not. So, I'm gonna pull a Shakespeare on you, "To thine own self be true"! You are GREAT, you don't need the approval of other writers to prove it!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

You've made me smile on a night when I didn't think it possible my friend...I don't know, I just fee.. read more
Sheila Kline

10 Years Ago

Ah, that's nice..............have a good night's sleep my friend!!!
o0o Jealousy not a nice look at all.. yet human, like this piece you wrote.. vulnerable
Your title made me think of an old movie called "What ever happened to Baby Jane" about what jealousy can drive a person to …
Well Done K !


Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

I've never seen the movie but I remember the title...no, it's not a very good thing, but what can I .. read more
Renée

10 Years Ago

lol that you did ! ( :
Excellent testimony to truth.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thank you Michael.
This totally deserves to be on the popular writing, as do all of yours actually.
Except for the steamy ones, I'll keep those for my own private collection.
Also... Always so impressed with your taste in music. It's my passion.
I used to work in a record store all through school, Sam the Record Man.


Posted 10 Years Ago


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Matching Socks

10 Years Ago

Blah blah blah... ;)
Chin up darlin'
Remember me when you're famous.
Of course, .. read more
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha And that would be just my luck :P Oh well, something to strive for I guess haha You know I'd .. read more
Matching Socks

10 Years Ago

Yeah, I know. I'd be the living person that haunts the ghost...
I love the second stanza most. Reminds me of the empty can metaphor.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thank you Kenneth, glad you enjoyed it.
As a writer i ought to love it!! To a turgid degree they were outsmarted... yepp.!!people envy you cause they can't be you.. :) so K.K be proud to be a vessel of jealousy. Every writer has his own style and expression.No two writers are the same.yes you have rightly mentioned that some few poets will clearly understand the depth of the poem.In here in WC we are all your friends. We love your writing style.. vent up your feelings :) don't be too self- conscious.. ★ takecare★

~Sophy

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Sophy, you always bring a smile to my face with your reviews :) I console myself with.. read more
Sophy Freebirds

10 Years Ago

Ohh dear. As i say every day has its night.every person has his own low times.. but you are a great .. read more
I'm sure I said it once before in my bio that I am a simple writer and therefore a simple reader. That doesn't mean I don't appreciate technical-type writes that go deep. I've read your replies to April. I think we all have a jealous streak in us that lies underneath. Most of us can handle it even if we hurt to some degree. Seeing others do better can make us question our worth and abilities. The "what am I doing here" syndrome might even pop up.

I think it all boils down to perspective and release. You are a fine writer and have improved over time. As far as ego is concerned, I think a healthy bit of ego is a good thing. Athletes use it, business men use it. Anyone with ambition does. But writing to me is more of that release and also a cleansing. If you enjoy it, then do it.
I've watched my review numbers plunge but I don't mind anymore because I'm not competing and I know I have some talent at it. That for me is good enough.

You may also be a perfectionist witch is not always a good thing. A perfectionist has a hard time accepting mistakes, low points and the risk of failure. They bring down his/her self-esteem. No one is perfect. Writing like life is a journey. There's no reason to expect a perfect path to an end result.

All of this aside, don't ever judge yourself on what you see here at WC. You have friends here that enjoy your writing. Some people who are exploding to let out their feelings will never be heard by anyone.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thank you Relic for the insightful review and for taking the time to review the poem with such depth.. read more
Relic

10 Years Ago

No problem. You are no alone in the lack of a response from new writers. I rarely ever get any reply.. read more
Relic

10 Years Ago

No problem. Your lack of replies is a common problem here these days. I once did 50 reviews in two o.. read more
I admire your vocabulary and the way your brain apparently makes connections between words in ways mine doesn't. And of course this gets right to the essence of being a poet.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

So glad you enjoyed it Jennie...it was not an easy write, and it took me two or three days to get it.. read more
It is a two way street, the reader brings the poem to life just as much as the author.

Intricate writing here Kubla, :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thank you my friend, I laboured hard over this one :)
ah, my friend, jealousy will get you nowhere. The third stanza is gold -- I am jealous, LOL. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha Oh I know, and that's what I was trying to come to grips with here...so glad you enjoyed it my .. read more

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