REMEMBERING RETROACTIVELY

08 08 14

A shower's adamant dispatching
from a solitary cloud
atomized in a warm dew of venom
on my unprepared shoulders
hammering a supplement of weight
into my despondent black hoodie
Persevering was the cloud's
saturating cameo
till the heater of the sun's
blue majority
would ultimately rally
Maybe you descended in the cameo
Maybe you reclined in victory
inside the summer's hot retrieval
Either way
as I reproduce the afternoon
in a memory
I indulge invariably
in a quiet sigh of comfort

Author's Note

I hope that people can see my music clips cuz they keep disappearing on me...this place is a nightmare of glitches...I'll never forgive them for not fixing my RR problem...it's done quite the job on my self-esteem with so few readers in proportion to it...sigh...

Not my best, but it makes its point just the same...captcha: regrow

Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

of course, I couldn't forget you sir... yes, I can see your music clips.... never heard this song, but I like it.
very pleasing to the soul... has that "feel good" feeling to it.. One small ray of sunshine amongst the heaviest rain can make the difference to the soul... this is absolutely beautiful... well done my friend...

[kublakhan27]

And you know I'd never forget you my friend :) I'm glad you can see the clips, this site is really stressing me out cuz my hands are so tied with regards to what I can do, and nobody else is having these problems which is grating on me all the more...a lot of other people have forgotten me, and that hurts...

I actually used that song in one of my poems for Frieda as well but I can't remember which now...it gels wonderfully with this poem though ;)

Sunshowers are an amazing thing...I look for metaphors in everything, not to mention any hints of those I've lost before their time, and I guess you could call this a healing piece...I'm glad the fell-good element got across...it was a melancholy write but I do feel comforted as I go back and read it...thanks so much April :)

[AprilRN1210]

I know sir.... you are more than welcome.. it is my pleasure.. it does hurt when people forget you... healing pieces are the best kinds...

[kublakhan27]

Yes, you know how it is my friend...sometimes they just have to come out, and the irony of a sunshower was the perfect tonic metaphorically...xo

[AprilRN1210]

that it was:)

[Kenneth The Poet]

This is how I feel when I wake up before sunrise.

[kublakhan27]

I can relate to that...thank you Kenneth.

[Matching Socks]

I'm just chillin' with a cold beer and some cool words... :)

[kublakhan27]

I could go for one of those right now, badly haha So glad you enjoyed this one :)

[Jennie Baron]

This flows so beautifully when reading it out loud, and evokes a mellow feeling. Outstanding! By the way, I do know the song and own the album. Thanks for reminding me of it.

[kublakhan27]

They're one of my favourites as well, and I have the album too...seems like we have a lot in common musically :)

I was hoping to create a tranquil mood with it...I didn't labour over it too much, and I think it sounds like that, but for this theme, I didn't want to dwell on it too much...so glad you enjoyed it Jennie :)

[Jennie Baron]

Tranquil is an apt word, and good poetry can be messed up by dwelling on it too much.

[Lyn Anderson]

I really like the clever play on words here. Nicely done. Read Requests rarely work for me, if ever, and I just live with it. Yup -- Feature up all day and 14 views -- I once had someone be surprised at how few views and reviews I have given my "apparent popularity" -- OH, I am popular all right, as someone to send RRs to, but only my friends bother to return the favour.

[kublakhan27]

I know how you feel my friend, which probably goes without saying at this point...a lot of my RRs were a moot point as well, but now that the function doesn't work, I'd get nothing if not for you and my small group of friends...there were actually many layers to this piece but I always seem to return to that theme, as much as I try not to...but you know you have an avid reader with me :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

This one felt like an embrace from your heart...

And as always, cleverly written...

Your art is unforgettable.💕😊

[kublakhan27]

I don't make too many spiritual observations when I'm on this site, but this event felt like an embrace from someone, somewhere...thank you again my friend, so glad you enjoyed it :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

And that's the magical part...💕

[Frieda P]

Your art moved me so Benji, I had to write a poem just for you....you have a huge heart, we see you love &, I hear you loud and clear my sweet friend....xo

We need to get you a new hoodie by the way ;)

drenched in hot sun shower's lust
heated to the core of existence's reveal
in slow motion's teeming thrust
earth moved perpendicularly sideways
to implicating acutated rains
mentally spent in rhyme's reason
notwithstanding bumbershoot's
seasonable purification's downpour

[kublakhan27]

Haha Wel first off, it really was a black hoodie, not just a colour I threw in for symbolic effect ;) I'm most honoured and touched that you wrote this for me Mrs.R, especially as a response to the words above...it means the world, and you'll be sure it makes its way into that special folder I keep ;) So glad you enjoyed it Mrs.R, I was hoping you could relate to it :) xo

[Frieda P]

I know it was black hon, that was the point ;) You know it's always my pleasure sillyhead. :) xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha Of course...you know I'm not the type to twist a context just to satisfy a poem ;) I may be a silyhead but I'm not beyond hope yet ;) xo

[Frieda P]

Oh I knew that, Mrs R keeps reiterating those exact words, but you're defo a sillyhead. :)

[kublakhan27]

Haha Which is good cuz I need someone to remind me of it regularly...thankfully I have Mrs.R to do that ;) x

[Frieda P]

Regularly, it's a full time job hon HA ha... ;P xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha Oh I know that love...I don't pay you enough ;P xo

[Frieda P]

Your smile is repayment enough sweetie....x

[kublakhan27]

And you make me do that better than anyone :) x