ZEPHYR MAN

07 30 14

He works an avid zig-zag

around the checkerboard of his

encased conundrum

Cross-winds of machinations

sprout silhouettes

obliterating like paintball bullets

on his fleeting abstract face

He is dizzy from the gravity

of off-key orchestras of whims

serenading his decision-making process

(Disposition-making process)

Not an old or new world man

he's a black hole brimming over

with an atmosphere of sympathy consumption

He's his own rumour

coated in congealed tongues

and garbed in salivating fingers

(Garbled in a language of malingers)

Author's Note

Thank you Frieda for once again dredging creativity out of me on a day where I thought I had none...no doubt some of you will have picked up on it :)

Reviews

[Frieda P]

You already know I adore this one, I can't tell you how much I love this, first stanza to last, I think it might just be my favorite of yours thus far, and not only because you used 'zephyrs' one of my favorite words as you well know. ;)

There are too many excellent lines to quote, but 'serenading his decision-making process' &
'he's his own rumor' are ones that will stick in my mind for a long time to come...I'm not dizzy
from gravity but within your genius and that in which Dali can become Zephyrman in one fell swoop
of the pen, awesome stuff my brilliant friend. x

100 paintball bullets shot hell out of the park!

[kublakhan27]

Wow, I am pleasantly stunned Mrs.R, as opposed to being just stunned most of the time haha You're favourite? That says a lot and it means even more...it's a personal piece, you know that, and it took a great inspiration to get it out of me ;) The rumour lines seem to be popular, I like that bit myself ;) You always humble me with your kind words love, especially when they come from one as brilliant and talented as yourself...what more can I say my dear friend, thank you so much, for reading and especially for understanding :) xo

[Frieda P]

Well it's my favorite in this very moment, you can't make me choose just one, you know about Sophie's Choice right? ;) xo

[kublakhan27]

Haha Needless to say, I think the same about your work ;)

Well if I didn't know about it before today (which I do) I would now LOL xo

[Frieda P]

If you haven't seen that masterpiece of a movie, I'm gonna lose all respect for you dear poet. ;P

[kublakhan27]

Haha I promised...only Mrs.R could have this kind of sway on me I tell you ;) x

[Frieda P]

It's for your own good, you'll thank me later. ;)

[kublakhan27]

I have no doubt I will Mrs.R ;)

[Onyia-Ali, Kingsley Chu..]

O! There is a direct comparison of the Zephyr Man. The use of metaphor is superb. The imagery is well captured. Well written.

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it, many thanks :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

"He's his own rumour

coated in congealed tongues

and garbed in salivating fingers




(Garbled in a language of malingers)"~ Love this stanza!

You have blown me away once again, Stevie!... you excel at this, always keeping me on my toes...

Pen on, dear friend!~xoxo~:)

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much my sweet friend...it's a pretty personal piece, inspired by a good friend of us both ;) I'm so glad you enjoyed it, you know how much your support means to me :) (hugs) xoxo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I know our friend is a great inspiration... and this shows your brilliant mind at work.
I enjoyed it, indeed! (((hugs))~xoxo~:)

[kublakhan27]

She is a muse...thank you again Robbie, you humble me with your kind words ((hugs)) xoxo :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

A wondrous work of word art

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Kenneth, so glad you enjoyed it.

[Rene Salinas]

There are times when we are our on worse enemy those times are full of intensity we don't require assistance from anyone to make matters worse we don't even seek for someone to get out ot it becuase we are not aware that we are actually making anything out of yet when we finally perceive that things are turning for the bad and it is clearly too late to turn around we have that quick thought and we say "in retrospect I could have" this very familiar feeling is very well delineated in this writing.

Thankyou Kubla

The exquisite machinery of torture

[kublakhan27]

I couldn't say it any better myself Rene...you've truly tapped into this piece and the mindset I was carrying when I wrote it...thanks so much for the thoughtful review, I really appreciate it :)

[Ayvid N]

"encased conundrum".... You are brilliant with words!

"He's his own rumour
coated in congealed tongues
and garbed in salivating fingers"

...I like this so much.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Divya, that compliment means the world coming from a writer that I look up to and consider to be one of the best on the site...well I don't have to consider it, it's the truth :) So glad you enjoyed this one...it's a personal piece, and one I hold close to the heart :)

[Ayvid N]

You are welcome Steve.
Thanks a lot too. I am humbled by your appreciation. This poem is rightly special in that it is has a very different images and metaphors to offer. Your poems stop the reader to think, read again and smile.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i started singing to myself..."day after day, the fool on the hill---nobody seems to like him cause they think that he's just a fool...sees the sun going down and the eyes in his head, see the world spinning round."

[kublakhan27]

Wow, that would have been a great song to accompany this piece, it's spot-on...ironically I also considered Nowhere Man briefly, but the song I used has an emotional attachment, and is an acknowledgement of the one who inspired this piece...trust me, you've written many a line that I wish I wrote myself...thanks so much for the insights and kind words Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

gosh yes, "nowhere man" also would fit so nicely...
"doesn't have a point of view, knows not where he's going to, isn't he a bit like you and me"

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"he is his own rumor"

love that line...wish i had written that..

i'll be back...too exhausted to put this in perspective...but so much good wording...you are a "phrase-oligist" for sure...

[redflutterby]

Ive been trying to peek in and read a little. But my mind is not functioning well right now. So even though I can't grasp the meaning of this I wanted to say hi. Glad to see you writing still. Hope youre doing well.

[kublakhan27]

I'm so glad to hear from you again red, and so sorry that things remain the way they are...I assure you that you're always in my thoughts, and I continue to hope for better days for you...I'm doing alright at best...thank you for stopping by and I hope we can talk more soon.

[Lyn Anderson]

Okay, you totally got me with that last stanza, and the final line.

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it KL, thank you.