SEDUCING THE END

06 29 14

Threshold calibrated

with a boomerang of breath

harping on Saturday assessments

Solvents and a choice of proof

must suffice

when a sigh's throat is slashed

by the paper cut of an unheard sob

 

Hold everything in a generic pause

 

Burn the calender

resuscitate the world with a gulp

practice the manipulation of a hook's

expiration date like a ladies' man

fall asleep in an overseas time zone

and arise in a knotted future

 

Pull it hard enough

and tension will avenge

Author's Note

Reviews

[Ashira Macy]

This was fantastically written and had a wonderful structure. I find my cheeks going red though as I can not think of anything further to say. This one was a bit over my head, though I am fairly certain it is brilliant and full of meaning that is alluding me.

[kublakhan27]

That's okay, it took took forever to write and it still feels like it's over my own head a bit haha So glad you enjoyed you though, thank you Ashira :)

[Sophy Freebirds]

My sense of interpretation says- it was a weekend,you were overloaded with assessments,then you got drunk,eluded the time,keeping your worries at bay.you took a generic pause from this mundane life.The last two lines mirror the message clearly - pull it hard enough,tension will avenge.. So chill and enjoy your weekend or else you will be knotted in future.. Small thing magnified- to preach the truth of life.that is how i got it...

~Sophy

[kublakhan27]

I don't know if I've ever gotten a more accurate interpretation of one of my poems before...you nailed it perfectly...truth be told, all of my weekends are like this, and this one has every indication of being the same...but I will do my best to take your advice and find some semblance of enjoyment in it...thanks so much Sophy, for reading and understanding :)

[Sophy Freebirds]

It was a pleasure amigo ★takecare★ and have fun!! :)

[kublakhan27]

You too my friend :)

[willweb]

"Hold everything in a generic pause" there was no pausing, generic or otherwise while reading this today. Your thoughts bounce about but always collect at the end. I really enjoyed this today Kublakhan27.

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it, thank you will.

[redzone]

I guess with enough "solvents" and "proof" or is that the "proof of solvents"??? I would think that the end is always "seduced"... but then, I am not drinking anything at the moment and I am afraid I have no clue as to where the "tension with avenge" will be... Oh well, tomorrow is another day and by then I will have thought more deeply about your "Dali-esque" (Frieda is always right) and surrealistic future poem will lead me... not sure I will find the "love" though... lol

I tried to play the music, but it told me that the song was not available in my country... hmmm maybe I have arisen in your "knotted future"... or somewhere in time... ;0)
~~redzone

[kublakhan27]

Oh, I get that problem a lot it seems with my songs...copyright gremlins, gotta love em...
read moreOh, I get that problem a lot it seems with my songs...copyright gremlins, gotta love em...

You've perfectly summed up the mindset I was carrying when I wrote this my friend...even I do drink, that vengeance never seems to come...truth be told, I still find myself pondering over this one whenever I return to this page and read it again...yes Frieda is the oracle, she anointed me with the Dali tag and I think I played the part pretty well here haha Thanks red :)

[kublakhan27]

Oh my god I hate this site...I'm lucky I can do anything on it now with the problems I've been having the last two weeks (one being my inability to send requests or use my libarary) I did have a much longer response, sorry man...but I thank you for reading and offering the cool review...you perfectly summed up the mindset I was in when I wrote it :)

[dw817]

What an esoteric poem, definitely a unique point of view on birth, death, and CHANGE.

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it :)

[Troy Henson]

mmm a piece that taunts me a little. On the verge of hairs standing up on the back of my neck.

Nice structure to this.

Regards
Troy

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Troy, so glad that this one resonated with you :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Oh, I LOVE this. In the faves. It is sassy, in a manly kind of way.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much KL, I'm happy to know that it's a favourite.

[Mark]

it is a risk, but one I surely agree with and to tell you the truth, where is the choice?

well.... the above makes sense in my interpretation ;)

"fall asleep in an overseas time zone
and arise in a knotted future"

done many times myself :)

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much neyvn...so glad you could relate..it means the world :)

[Mark]

i have some advantage, (if i did Interpret right;)
i drink too much
and I'm going through the same right now;)
though... no knotted future, not yet anyhow ;)

i love the way you write

[kublakhan27]

To tell all would spoil the fun, but you're pretty darn close to nailing it my friend...thanks again for the kind and humbling words :)

[Matching Socks]

So..... You got drunk on a Saturday night and got down.
That's always fun. :)

[kublakhan27]

Haha Drunk yes, got down no ... but there's much more to this piece than that, trust me, a great deal of thought went into this piece...thank you Ance :)

[Matching Socks]

I'll go with my version until you lay it all out for me.

[kublakhan27]

Purely a figment of my imagination, I can say nothing more ;)

[AprilRN1210]

well, I was expecting steamy romance and that is definitely NOT what I got.. what an eerie atmosphere with the music and the choice of wording in places... had a surreal feeling.... a dark, falling sensation in my mind.. reaching for that rope, praying for that tension.. teasing me with salvation, or demise... It had a million different images running through my head at the same time trying to confuse me, taunt me with choices and make me feel overwhelmed and frustrated as if attempts to overcome would be futile.. eerie, I say... just eerie to me.. lol

(may be the wine talking... but yes... eerie)..

[kublakhan27]

Haha Maybe your wine and my vodka have us on the same wavelength my dear...it is a love poem though, as abstract as it may sound...this was actually written a couple of weeks ago but I decided to unleash it tonight...it's just the mood I'm in...I'm glad that it captivated you the way it did...it's eerie, but it is romantic in my Dali-esque way, as Frieda would put it...thank you April ((hugs)) :)

[AprilRN1210]

oh jeez... yep.. certainly missed me this time I am afraid.. very abstract... or again.. the wine.. :P

((hugs)) back at ya...

[kublakhan27]

((hug)) :)