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A Poem by kublakhan27
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Dead weight
clamping down like a shadow
without prejudice

I am dead weight
except for the fault line
furrowing through my brain's
allocating swirls
That's where my initiatives
huddle like autumn-butchered leaves
in a gutter

Please spare me of
another branch of time to kill
except for the one that keeps it
Then I'll take the nagging
Machiavellian
business of memories
down with it

© 2014 kublakhan27


Author's Note

kublakhan27


Written in 2001, tinkered with slightly today...I was such a cute little cynic back then...

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i see this is an early one for you .. its very powerful i think ... inside a duplicit mind ..aaaaargh! like a giant spider has spun it full of thick sticky webs .. good luck unraveling .. eeeyow! .. enjoyed your poem very much .. its a brain teaser for sure and vivid descriptive word choices .. nice one kubla!
E.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

It is an early one indeed but I wonder if anyone would have even noticed if I hadn't mentioned it..... read more



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I had to read this one twice, very cleverly worded.
I can almost see the fault line in there, in your wrinkly pink fleshy brain...
I just need to get a leaf blower in there to make all those brilliant ideas fly to life.
Dead weight? not taking the bait...

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Matching Socks

10 Years Ago

I'm gonna pin it all on Frieda since she's not here. :-)
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha Yes red, girl power is coming to get me ;P
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

Nice Ance! :P
This is an outstanding poem. I especially like the autumn leaves line. If you notice, I rarely quote lines in a review, I feel it's like a "spoiler" -- better to let them see it for themselves.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much KL, I'm always grateful for your kind words. I'm the same, I never feel right pointi.. read more
Right off I'm hysterical at the graphic....I don't know if I can read this in a serious mode or not now....

I'll take the nagging
Machiavellian
business of memories
down with it

That in itself was a poem, the rest was icing on the cake, vanilla I presume? ;)

Without prejudice, I'm not so sure about that, clever Dali, as always......!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha I guess I felt the need to lighten it up a bit Mrs.R...it's still the same old Benji though isn.. read more
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

I think you've sent that to me already, still funny....you're a lightweight Benji :) I meant my ple.. read more
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha I'm 120 lbs on a good day Mrs.R, I'm a no-weight ;)
Your poetry is always like a puzzle to me Kublakhan27. I turn all of the pieces face up, start with the borders and then fill in the middle and what a wild picture I find when putting in the final piece. Dead weight, I think not. Worth the wait...yes. I really enjoyed this today.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks as always for the support will, I greatly appreciate it.

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Nova Scotia, Canada



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