WELCOME TO THE FURNACE

WELCOME TO THE FURNACE

A Poem by kublakhan27
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Yellow flecks of flaming dust
sew their last rites into
popcorn crackles searing
thirsty air's failed distance

The arrival of the true you
frames a consolation
of swan song scenery
for the expendable
caravan of cinders
fated for erasure
in a sudden cough
like a poor man's firework

Choirs of finches followed
and scored your promenade
from the solar facsimile of fire
to the proximity of genuine
incineration

They fall into flame-induced pitch
stubborn to betray their purpose
like the Titanic's entertainment

The remnants of the fictional you
singe and dissipate in the heat
with your blanket definition
of the most docile creatures

They were all animals to you
beneath the sun's poesy-polished lens

But the basement assured
a shedding in the ashen hub
of elemental witnesses

Animal equality was stripped down
to a shortlist of horned
territorial crusaders

Physicality usurped
the guidelines of reason

Real animals break a sweat
like real men wear black

Now you take a stand
in the fire's seething court of coal
till the salt veil trickles
down your face and makes
a bed of pearls on your lips

You can taste epiphany
as you undo the cage
armed with a steel whip
to pet the bitter ghost
of nature ravaged

Shuffling the coals until
you draw a mirror in the melting chaos
a theory of precipitation whispers
I can treat you better

But eager for the testing
of your belief that
phoenixes are pets of the meek
you commence in the open simmer
of an angel's martyrdom
like a libidinous Joan Of Arc

© 2014 kublakhan27


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"Real animals break a sweat
like real men wear black" THESE WORDS ARE GENIOUS!!! This poem cut straight to the heart. and I`m listening to Snake River Conspiracy`s love song. It`s like your`e saying we are mechanical animals always fighting the good fight for survival, for meekness, for an eternity that we are looking for that not many people believe in. It`s almost as if humanity should learn this lesson. That eternity is with us and we should value change for the greater good instead of being angry all of the time. This poem is amazing. Who was in your head when lyou wrote this ?

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha They might be the most popular lines I've ever offered to the site, I think everybody has quote.. read more
Kleio13

10 Years Ago

Haha glad you can relate



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Each stanza is rich with meaningful imagery, Steve. I could read this one a hundred times, and still not exhaust all the nuances you have so masterfully painted here.

"phoenixes are pets of the meek..." has me thinking... Often hailed as a symbol of strength, but is it really strength to keep coming back for more, to not know when to let go? Great writing here, my friend!

Posted 10 Years Ago


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kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Rita, this one has grown on me with time...it's been a joy to see all the different i.. read more
Wow. Look up intensity in the dictionary and this should be the definition. Amazing lines and metaphors in this one, right alongside some fantastic similes. This was my favorite:

They fall into flame-induced pitch
stubborn to betray their purpose
like the Titanic's entertainment

Blisteringly brilliant my friend!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Ashira...I think it took me three days to write this one, it was worth every minute.... read more
"Real animals break a sweat
like real men wear black" THESE WORDS ARE GENIOUS!!! This poem cut straight to the heart. and I`m listening to Snake River Conspiracy`s love song. It`s like your`e saying we are mechanical animals always fighting the good fight for survival, for meekness, for an eternity that we are looking for that not many people believe in. It`s almost as if humanity should learn this lesson. That eternity is with us and we should value change for the greater good instead of being angry all of the time. This poem is amazing. Who was in your head when lyou wrote this ?

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha They might be the most popular lines I've ever offered to the site, I think everybody has quote.. read more
Kleio13

10 Years Ago

Haha glad you can relate
"Real animals break a sweat
like real men wear black "

That line stuck with me, for some reason. It's just so darn memorable and unique that it struck a chord and lingers in my mind long after reading this piece. Moving on, this might be quite an odd way to interpret your poetry, but at times, I regard phoenixes as somewhat of a symbol for nuclear weapons. They're fierce, they slay, they leave behind embers that char upon a touch, they just seem like rather perfect beings to symbolize the weapons of mass destruction that we have invented in the name of war. At first glance, I had viewed this to be somewhat of a tribute to nature and an ode for all we've already lost and a promise that one day nature will take over, but upon hearing of the phoenix, I was reminded again of the nuclear weapons.
Taking that into account, the numerous mentions to flames make so much more sense when I take into account nuclear devastation, and that's where I feel your poem shines. You've portrayed the destruction of nature and compared it with that of a possible outcome of humanity's various wars, and took it a step further by using a metaphor for nature as double etendre: a phoenix, a mystic being of nature, being the last thing that will lay waste to humanity along with the fact that our natures, our tendencies towards war and greed and territory, are what led to our seemingly inevitable end. Destroyed by two natures, both symbolic in their own ways, and seen as more of a tale of retribution than anything else.

Stellar and marvelous piece, Kublakhan, keep it coming.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Those lines do seem to be the most resonant among those who've reviewed the piece...I wrote this in .. read more
I think it may just be me and the way I feel tonight but this is very wordy and took me a while to get the FULL meaning and yet, I think, that if I read it AGAIN I would see something completely different, that's just how amazing you are Steveroo! I loved this one, great job bud... now let's see a wee smile. :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Ah your presence always elicits more than a wee smile Noodlebop :) Yes it is a wordy piece, and mor.. read more
This tour of the furnace was filled with exquisite metaphors,vivid imagery and perfect flow.. The wild and free imagination can not be trapped as it overflows. Phoenix is the pet of the meek?? ;) ahh well ,i could have argued about it but reading the next line i curbed my tongue ★winks★ .. Joan of Arc a rebel heart. A powerful piece.

~Sophy

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Sophy Freebirds

10 Years Ago

I must say the imagery was successful. It was a pleasure reviewing you. :)
Sophy Freebirds

10 Years Ago

I must say the imagery was successful. It was a pleasure reviewing you. :)
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thank you again Sophy :)
Good job, loved it so so much!!!!!
♥Sarabelle♥

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Sarabelle :)
Your use of metaphor and the imagery in this one is incredible my friend. There are so many layers, so much depth in your words...
Shuffling the coals until
you draw a mirror in the melting chaos
a theory of precipitation whispers
I can treat you better
I am almost speechless...in awe of your talent. You inspire me to be a better poet.

:) Julie

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

I'm truly humbled by your kind words my friend...it means the world to know I can inspire someone..... read more
The truly wild can never be tamed just contained. Excellent write, Steve.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Pryde.
when i saw the title and author i couldnt wait to get here .. from a greeting invitation and hint of at your own risk i read ... all the way to a libidinous Joan of Arc .. is nothing sacred!? :) ... so much in your word choices .. i go off on my own tangents each time i read this .. most of the time at different departure stations .. i admire your discipline in keeping the furnace burning throughout the entire length of your poem .. what a fine finished product you have .. and i agree .. too many wonderful lines to point out one or two
E.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha Trust me, I thought long and hard about that last line but there was no other ending to be foun.. read more
Einstein Noodle

10 Years Ago

i use to be a carpenter and your response reminds of of jobs that were such that every single pinch .. read more
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha My Dad was a carpenter and I used to help him sometimes...he was a masterful carpenter, I was n.. read more

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