BY ANONYMOUS

07 13 14

My few friends

evidently

have more friends than me

 

It's like

a disclaimer

handcuffing relevance

 

Sensitivity

swallows me

I'll never inhale

that universal air

 

I am sorry

I am not more grateful

for the gift shop

 

I'm a ship in a bottle

on the shelf of

words withheld

Author's Note

captcha: gripy

Reviews

[Wall Hermitt]

Immensely appropriate title. I cannot express with words the extent to which I relate to this poem. Perhaps I must recommend a couple I've penned down myself - perhaps poetry is my instrument of expression. Although the poem in its entirety speaks perfection, the second and final stanza shine within the bubble of perfection. Amazing work. Thanks for the share.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much for the kind words Wall, it truly means a lot...I have to sign off right now but feel free to send me requests anytime.

[Vidya Bacchus]

I guess we all feel this way sometimes.Like we are standing still while all our friends are moving on in an ever changing world we aren't moving as fast as it is.Really touching poem KK:)

[kublakhan27]

That's one facet of it my friend, I had a few things in my mind when I wrote this one...so glad you enjoyed it :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

I did as always enjoy your work .Have a great weekend KK :)

[kublakhan27]

Same to you my friend :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

..................:)

[Brittany Zedalis]

╰☆╮Wow, those last few lines. I believe I have found another favorite poem on this site. ╰☆╮

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it Brittany, thank you for the kind words :)

[Ally Monique]

This piece took my breath away. I feel that way sometimes, like I have few friends compared to the people I am friends with. I guess we all get lonely sometimes. I love when I can relate to a poem, and I can relate to this one!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Ally, it means a lot to know that someone relates to these words :)

[Ally Monique]

no problem, the pleasure is mine :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

It's been a while, and as always, you amaze with the words you choose.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Kenneth, great to hear from you again.

[Lyn Anderson]

This is really well done. Everyone feels like this sometimes.

[kublakhan27]

I'm sure the vast majority of us do, but I'm thinking there are a few who don't, at least not while they're here...having said that, this is also a metaphor for life in general, and a bit of a commentary on internet culture in general...glad you enjoyed it K, thank you.

[Lyn Anderson]

Oh, you and I have had this discussion before, yes, and that is why I wrote my feature, I was in just such a mood ...

[kublakhan27]

I know, and I feel do feel bad about that cuz I've dragged a lot of people into this discussion, several times over...I know it doesn't sound like it in my writing, but the support of my friends is what truly matters to me, and means more than anything to me...you know how it is with poetry though, it's so much easier to purge than to entertain...I'll check out your feature.

[Jack Cassidy]

Like everyone here, I've been just a statistical minority among the many... The impression I have from reading this is is that you aren't just a number, you yearn for what those friends of yours have... More ears to listen... Being that the subject matter is very relatable, you do a good job of describing the effects of being sort of lonely... It might sound as though the speaker is envious of those friends who have lots of other friends too... Well done, K.

[kublakhan27]

What can I say, you're spot-on with your observations...I don't envy my friends because I'm truly proud of them for getting the recognition they deserve, I just happen to be on the bottom of my list of friends in that regard, and that's the part that hurts...I'm glad that someone understands just where I'm coming from...thank you Kusa :)

[Matching Socks]

Dear Anonymous,

I've read SO MANY of your poems.
You sure do write a lot of them.

Keep up the good work.

~A~

(And you thought you weren't getting noticed? silly rabbit...)

[kublakhan27]

Haha Well I'm nowhere near as prolific as some friends of mine, or as popular, or as noticed...I love my friends dearly and their support is what keeps me here when I feel like I did when I coughed up this one...so glad you enjoyed it Ance, and thanks for taking an interest in my writing :)

[Matching Socks]

You're quality all the way... :)

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Ance, that means a lot :)

[Tom]

Quality is much preferable to quantity and this fine piece of poetic introspection has quality throughout!

A clever piece of character analysis, splendid indeed!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Tom :)

[Tom]

Great piece Kubla, the pleasure's mine !

[willweb]

Excuse me, could you move over a bit, yes it's me, the shot glass with the picture of the Grand Canyon on it, this shelf isn't that big. This was great Kublkhan27. I know this feeling. I enjoyed reading this today.

[kublakhan27]

I agree, the Canyon is more popular and awe-inspiring, especially when it's on a shot glass, which I feel like I need every time I go back and read this one myself...so glad you enjoyed it will, thank you.