MENTALLY PHYSICAL

07 05 14

I bother my aura
as if it were a bully
from a black and red past
Madrigal breathing
I manage in a grudging
tolerance
But my aura's on its own
the invisible man
that channels the boy
the world emblazons on me
like a slave beneath
a branding iron
A black and red past
my memory molds
into mentally physical
crayons I delightfully embed
into the trusty aura's projection
of those tall muscular smirks

Author's Note

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Reviews

[AprilRN1210]

Sometimes it does feel as if the world is trying to "brand" us with what it wants us to be, instead of what we crave. Those heartaches, disappointments, stumbles-can dishearten the strongest of wills. It can darken, dampen the soul making the light seem ever too far away and unattainable again. I say-grab those crayons, make it what you want, color outside the lines, and enjoy the boy inside only occasionally channeling the "man" :)

very nice introspective poem that touched me...

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much for the kind words my friend...I'm glad that this one resonated with you so deeply :)

[Madalyn Beck]

Wow. The imagery in this is phenomenal, but the driving point you are making about how the world sees us versus how we see ourselves is stunning. Your aura is beautiful and perfect the way it is. Keep it and screw the world. :)

[kublakhan27]

Haha Good advice indeed, thanks so much Madalyn :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i am a terrible artist, even as a kid with crayons...i could never stay within the lines...but i did always read between them...lots here to uncover.
another terrific write from you, Steve...
you never disappoint.

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it Jacob, thank you as always for the support and kind words.

[Rita L. Sev]

"mentally physical crayons" - the hardest part, sometimes, is staying inside the lines... This is such a powerful work, Steve. How the world sees us, how we see ourselves, how we create the image and it in turn creates us... you express so much here. Saving this to revisit...

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Rita, I'm glad that this one spoke to you...it's a pretty personal piece and it came unnaturally quick...I'm sure it was just waiting to be written...thanks again my friend.

[kublakhan27]

Nice how you wonderful words reflect this introspective battle ... you color it in with a range of skills, and self-knowledge. To be heard, and be understood by others. I do... I felt this one. You can make art out of the most painful moments, the most difficult moments, and that's truly what I admire bro...

- Elisa xo

[kublakhan27]

I had a feeling you could relate to this one my friend, though there's always mixed feelings in knowing a friend relates to these words...thank you sis for your understanding and the lovely review...you always know how to humble me beyond words :) xo

I do understand this battle. Very well... :) but indeed, it's never to be the right and exact battle another might have. True that. But it's always good to talk about anything, and see each others perspectives. :) That's why I can't wait, until we have another mail section lol :D You are welcome, I do appreciate you as one of the closests to my heart here, keep on writing, I will be more on from now on... xo

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much dear sis, it's true that talking is never a bad thing :) I'll be in touch again soon, as soon as I'm able to sit down and gather all my thoughts together...I'll try to make it soon :) xo

Don't rush... haha, I know how it is... to catch up, and have these battles within, sometimes.
It's already good I'm back from holidays, and got out of a terrible periode, and can enjoy your brilliant work again... :) that truly helps a lot... and makes it easier to live lol xo take much care dear brother.

[Kleio13]

yes, I`m mentally physical myself. And I manage in a grudging tolerance as well. Very distinctive piece my friend. Powerful in genuine. I can tell how mercurial you are and it`s almost tangent.

[kublakhan27]

You know me well my friend...this is one of the most intensely personal things I've written in a while, I'm glad you could relate.

[willweb]

"mentally phyiscal crayons" I really liked that line. Coloring our minds in a way we'd rather not see. I really enjoyed this today.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much willweb

[Lyn Anderson]

A very wonderful introspective and reflective write. Well done.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you K.

[MsJewel]

Madrigal breathing
I manage in a grudging
tolerance
But my aura's on its own
the invisible man
that channels the boy
I can feel the sadness in your words my friend. The darkness just pulls at my heart strings.
Julie

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Julie, I'm glad that this one spoke to you...I feel a bit better now than I did when I wrote it ;)

[Cory Barrett]

you paint quite a picture here... especially with mentally physical crayons.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Streamline