THE SWEETEST LITTLE SHOWER

07 04 14

Should our eyes meet
between the golden raindrops
of a Summer sun shower
would your hand's purified arc
grant my lips a taste of ginger
on the eve of offering a palm
glistening beneath a handful
of moistened flame?
Would the fire in your feet
stroke the sweet clash
of the elements?

Should I wish
the waltzing waft to life
please afford my green steps
a leeway of playful patience
saving some for catching
my hypnosis swimming
in your wet face

There was a thought of
asking you to be my umbrella
then it melted

not in the sun
not in the shower

in the feral grandeur of your marigold prance

Author's Note

Inspired by my dear friend's poem from today :) Captcha: upsoar

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

we meet compatriot souls from across the globe here and certainly all have wished to meet .. you have really done a great job of exploring the romance of it .. i would not have known who this was inspired by had i not read redzone's comments .. which poem are you referring to? i have been absent a couple days and for Freida that means ten thousand new writings :))
E.

[Frieda P]

I see you're wearing your smartypants today E. ;P

[Einstein Noodle]

to Freida
can i say the ways i love thee ...
(no computer can count)
how about the four corners of mine eyes
devoured by thy inner glow ..
:)
if anyone i would meet along the byways ..
it would be sweet you
on every Freiday that i know
sigh ... 6 full days to go
so in the meantime i lament ... the days without you
i have spent .. :))
E.

[Frieda P]

Swooning and giggling like a school girl, I may never leave this thread...woo, dancing to your poetry E. MWAH! :) xo

[Shirlena]

At first I thought you were going to give me something erotic but then it was just as pleasant to find romance which you are also good at tempering your erotic pieces with (so classy) but this makes your eyes saucer as you read and your gaze drift off, draw in a nice breath and slowly release (SIGH).

[kublakhan27]

Thank you my friend, I wanted to created a hypnotic feel to go with the dancing theme so I'm glad you were able to feel that :)

[Tom]

Yes indeed, that all encompassing summer shower envelopes much more than just a tightening of those mackintosh buttons!

A beautifully romantic, seasonal write!

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it Tom, thank you :)

[Saddam]

There was a thought of
asking you to be my umbrella
then it melted
not in the sun
not in the shower
in the feral grandeur of your marigold prance.

A beautiful thought. I enjoy its every word. Great art you have dear.

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it my friend, thank you :)

[Anand Sehgal]

lovely write.. suddenly you made me sentimental !
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[kublakhan27]

Thank you Anand, I hope it's a good sentimental :)

[Anand Sehgal]

Indeed it was a good sentimental ! :) how are you doing?

[kublakhan27]

I'm doing alright :)

[Rita L. Sev]

An inspired write, Steve, which includes some really stunning images.

There was a thought of
asking you to be my umbrella.. - Love this concept!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Rita :)

[Lydia Shutter]

Ah, I recognize the romance from Frieda's poetry....with the blossoming imagery and the hints of sensuality to sweeten the deal. My goodness, this is romantic! "Moistened flame"......mmmmm.....just letting that sink in a while! :) A gloriously romantic write. lydi**

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it my friend...she is a muse...I've actually been thinking for a while about that fact that I've not written a simple love poem in a while...of course I can't resist the sensuality element, this is me after all ;) but it felt refreshing to write this one...thank you Lydi :)

[Lyn Anderson]

I love the last few lines. They completely flip the poem around and make it dramatically different.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you K, so glad you enjoyed it.

[Ally Monique]

Spectacular. Your vocabulary in this piece is amazing. I love all of it, especially the lines:
"There was a thought of
asking you to be my umbrella
then it melted"
You have a true talent, keep writing :)

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Ally :)

[Kleio13]

"There was a thought of
asking you to be my umbrella
then it melted

not in the sun
not in the shower

in the feral grandeur of your marigold prance"- this is genious . I almost want to melt into these words o brilliance and passion.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you my friend, your kind words mean the world as always.

[Trace]

I would think you were describing w rainbow almost within reach.
Loved how this reads.

Trace.

Ps..... Here is a thought to work over in your
only someone else can see a rainbow shining upon you when your standing in the rain.

[kublakhan27]

Thank you Trace :)