IN DORMIVEGLIA

06 09 14

I. To sleep...

 

As if I needed affirmation

of the weekend from a mouse

 

As if I needed mutually

indecipherable dialogue

 

As if I need a hip social setting

when Insomnia gets off on my inside

 

As if I need a drink for the prodding

of my eyes or charisma for the charming of hers

 

As if we need a hotel or a bed

for that matter in Dormiveglia

 

II. ...perchance to dream.

 

Darling Insomnia

how you dazzle in your quilted

queendom of suction

 

Darling Insomnia

suck out the vanilla gumming

up my timid lungs like sugared venom

 

Darling Insomnia

I promise I won't burden you with moans of

fantasy-inflicted headaches

 

Darling Insomnia

let your sirrah latch his inhalation

onto your majestic bosom like an asp

 

Darling Insomnia

does subordination in my windpipe

do right by your despotic grasp?

Author's Note

Dormiveglia (Italian: dor-mE-vel-ya): the space between sleeping and waking...a weak, interrupted slumber.

Reviews

[Pryde Foltz]

Darling Insomnia
does subordination in my windpipe
do right by your despotic grasp?

First off … loved this work … an artistic masterpiece. The first section had an almost Downie feel to it and you know he's my favourite and then you nailed the bard too. First rate, Steve.

[kublakhan27]

Great compliments my friend, thank you Pryde.

[David Scott]

Insomnia is a demanding and fickle mistress... Well captured and shared.

[kublakhan27]

She is indeed...thank you David :)

[Lydia Shutter]

Ah, to be half asleep...to drift in that "not here, not there" sort of place where everything is dreamy. However, that state can be mighty close to purgatory when all you need is REAL sleep....the kind that leaves you feeling fresh as a daisy upon awakening. Morpheus has been playing games with you, my friend. I will have a word with him...though he seldom takes my advice! :) Very well written....insomnia agrees with your muse if nothing else. Lydi**

[kublakhan27]

Haha That's true my friend...it does feel like purgatory a lot of the time, but I've written a lot under the same circumstances so I'm at least thankful for that...thank you Lydi :)

[Lyn Anderson]

Love this -- insomnia the despot! I now have a vision of my insomnia in Jack Boots with a weird little moustache. Thanks!

[kublakhan27]

Haha Glad you enjoyed it K :)

[Sheila Kline]

The idea of being wide awake while in a dream brings up front and personal the cold reality of how invasive insomnia is to the one suffering from the inability to let go of the here and now. The video is a perfect addition to relay to the reader the malady that exists in the past, present and future - just somewhere in-between.
Your thoughts allow me to relate to what you and others are feeling when they are victims of insomnia! You are neither here nor there, just somewhere!

[kublakhan27]

You are spot-on in your observations Sheila...so glad I was able to translate my thoughts in a way that people can relate to even if they haven't experienced these things themselves...thanks so much :)

[Frieda P]

You already know, I love this one Benji, and I can so relate. Each time I read it, it comes to life yet again.
Shuffling thoughts in our mind, exhausted by probabilities and fate, the inertia of insomnia is deafening. 'Suck out the vanilla gumming', I've been telling you that for ages sweet boy! ha ;-) Stellar, now if it were only hypnagogic and could lull me to sleep... but it's too good for snoozing! Love it. xo

[Frieda P]

Oh, and of course the music is perfecto!

[kublakhan27]

Haha I knew you'd like the music ;) And yes, I knew you would relate to this one...not really much else I can say I guess...it's all in the poem as it pertains to both of us...I can't help but thinking that the dredging out of that vanilla would make for much more enjoyable Saturday nights, but I do have Mrs.R to keep my weekends bearable ;) So glad you could relate to this one love. xo

[ms. barrie]

Exquisite in its emotional intensity, vivid imagery of
Depicting a Mental unease one's dealing with that
Disrupts serene slumber. Body exhausted, yet mind unable
To rest...most annoying when that happens!

The unique imagery you portrayed in this write...
As well as your author's note, reminds me of or when
One is also disrupted from sleeping due to astral projecting.
Amazing flow...Your gift for words is truly astounding,
Mr. Steve! Thank you sharing this!!!
100/100 (favs.) :))))

[kublakhan27]

I'm so glad you can relate to this one Miss Barrie, in a relative way of course, as I wouldn't wish my sleep issues on anyone...well maybe I'd wish them on some people from that past but that's another story haha What can I say, your support means the world, you know that...I'd have no confidence otherwise whatsoever...thanks so much my dear friend :)))

[ms. barrie]

You're very welcome, Mr. Steve...And likewise!
Diazepam is my Prince, but yes...I could relate to this.

I cannot thank you enough for your support and genuine
Kindness as well Dear friend. Thank you for making
This "writing site" a shinier place :)))))::

[kublakhan27]

Haha I don't believe the shine will ever be restored to this place my friend, but yes, we always have each others' support and friendship...it's stronger than the dramatic parasites that have begun to eat away at this place...love and thanks always :))))

[ms. barrie]

That we do...I promise you that, dear friend...you'll
Always have my continuous support...and I agree!
Love, peace, dreams always, as well :))))))

[ms. barrie]

Btw this does remind me of when I once astral projected...
Scary as hell...talk about disturbing! Also interpret this
As when one's muse refuses to let us sleep due.to
Dreams or words spinning around in your head. Then
You have no choice but to wake up and write.

[MsJewel]

Darling Insomnia
how you dazzle in your quilted
queendom of suction

Darling Insomnia
suck out the vanilla gumming
up my timid lungs like sugared venom

Two of my favorite verses in this well written poem - I can definitely relate to this frustration, but writing helps..
It's wonderful to read your words again.

:) Julie

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much my friend, I do miss your lovely works, and the kind words you leave for me :)

[John Anderson]

I love the message in your poem. This is beautifully expressed

[kublakhan27]

Many thanks as always John.