TRIBUTE

04 28 14

No way for her to ascertain
the ashen carpets of erasure
randomly assigned to the tapestry of garish
hope's circumstantial hopscotch squares
with a body already incommodiously perched
upon legs submissive to the here and now's
drunken mercury
Alone she has been left to sweep up
the gravity that hobbles optimism
in the hops of faith around the ambivalence
of horizontal authenticity
Left alone to weep on twitching roots
and theorize a rally bloom in spite
of severance in tune with sparks of closure
The shadow of her sunken chin emits
embroiled tributaries of respawning yesterdays
Queen of checkerboard embodiment
her rhythmic rule entails zephyrs of endurance
in the vacuum of fulfilling prophecies

Author's Note

She's been through so much...

Reviews

[Eric Pudalov]

This is a wonderfully tragic and sad piece, Steve. Though I know not the woman of whom you speak, it doesn't really matter. This seems a very touching tribute to a friend who is suffering untold misfortune in her life (am I wrong?). And I also get the sense that all of these circumstances are beyond her control, in verses like this:

randomly assigned to the tapestry of garish
hope's circumstantial hopscotch squares
with a body already incommodiously perched
upon legs submissive to the here and now's
drunken mercury

She sounds like an extremely vulnerable person, placed into circumstances that she isn't prepared to handle, and something that would almost kill her if she just took a step further. What a sad and horrifying story. No one deserves that, I would think!

Though I obviously haven't read *all* of your work (assuming you have a large unpublished volume), I find that all of what I've read so far has so much depth, symbolism, and a multitude of meanings. I feel this urge, sometimes, to want to decipher everything that you've written out, but that's probably impossible. It's the analytical academic in me.

100/100, by the way!

[kublakhan27]

You've hit the nail on the head perfectly my friend...you may know her, I'm sure you've seen her on the site in the past...she's one of our most beloved members but has been away for a while as she deals with some serious personal issues. She is vulnerable only in the sense that she's been dealt some circumstances that are beyond her control, but she also happens to be the strongest woman I've ever known, and I tried to inject a bit of optimism in the piece to reflect that. As always, I must point out how invaluable your support is to my writing...it really does mean the world. So glad you enjoyed this one my friend :)

[Eric Pudalov]

Aww, glad I can help support your writing - that's the other reason I like being here, other than promoting my own writing. And now that you mention it, I think I *do* know to whom you're referring...I won't say her name, but I hope she'll be OK. I want to be supportive too, if I can.

[Tom]

Yes indeed, being left on the shelf is not a nice feeling !

An imaginatively penned tale of lament !

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it Tom, thank you :)

[Saddam]

very emotionaly sad. Love these lines....

The shadow of her sunken chin emits
embroiled tributaries of respawning yesterdays
Queen of checkerboard embodiment
her rhythmic rule entails zephyrs of endurance
in the vacuum of fulfilling prophecies

[kublakhan27]

Thanks very much :) I'm glad you enjoyed it, though it did come out sadder than I had hoped for.

[redzone]

Alone she has been left to sweep up
the gravity that hobbles optimism
in the hops of faith around the ambivalence
of horizontal authenticity... Steve I love these lines: for their harsh truth, for their artistic reality; for a tribute to a wonderful heart that yes, has borne way too much. Maybe, these words of tribute may give some push for optimism... ~~redzone

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much my friend, your review means a lot to me...it took forever to finish this one, as I was determined to offset the heavy-hearted feelings with some semblance of optimism...I can only wait now and hope that I was able to achieve that.

[Chris Micha]

Such an emotion sad piece that has a beautiful message. We need her yet we abuse her. :(

[kublakhan27]

Very true :( So glad you enjoyed this one Christian, my thanks as always.

[FlamingPhoenix]

Heartbreakingly beautiful piece that resonates in my soul~so many tragic and descriptive lines drawing me in~especially "in the vacuum of fulfilling prophecies"~sheer perfection!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much my friend, it makes me happy knowing I was able to speak to you so resonantly with this one...your kind words mean the world :)

[Madalyn Beck]

A beautiful pen, dear! The description is stunning and cuts deep into the heart. Great write. (:

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Madalyn...it's a pretty personal piece so I'm glad it resonated with you so deeply :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this makes me think of the "she" being Mother Earth...she endures, and endures...and yet we abuse her...and yet she sweeps up our mistakes...she accepts and provides for us...a mother's love.

well, anyway that is where the poem sent me.

even if i am way off....i really like the wording in here...your usual excellent visuals.

[kublakhan27]

I think this one speaks to motherhood on many levels, starting with the Earth...I'm glad that it conjured those images for you my friend. Thank you as always for the kind words.

[redflutterby]

I recognize a familiar face in this poem. And yes she has been through so much. Your lines resonate with a deep sadness and pain. Hopefully the rain clears away...and the sun peers through in all its warmth and bright beauty. I'm with you in thought on this write my friend... hugs.

[kublakhan27]

Yes there is much sadness and pain running through my mind these days my friend...I keep waiting for some kind of message but have received none in a while now. So all I can do is hope for some semblance of sun just as you're doing...so glad you liked this one Red, I worked pretty hard on it...hugs.

[FlatLineBeauty]

This was just wonderful. I love the way you view and describe things. Xo winter

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it Winter, many thanks for the kind words :) xo

[Vidya Bacchus]

This is truly lovely KK.Your lines are always so splendidly penned :)

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Vidya, your kind words always bring a smile to my face :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome KK.Your poetry always make me smile so its a fair trade :)