I. Continuity your filibuster egg of sand dazzled curiosity with creaky shell of hints heaped upon the tedium of knowledge's unfurl undeterred by encyclopedic impatience
Assurances of rip(Van Winkl)ed economics shooed paper strings of revelation like anarchy-powered taxes summoning a foreword to anachronistic campaigns of environmental friendliness
II.
Meanwhile years have been filed down to flashes of chronology for continuity's organic rebus
However long it took the economic karma to fall into the abodes of hedonistic pharaohs it was instant
Skin that ruled behind the constitution of allergic breath bailed on the bones against their most sublime intentions
Limbo-treading landlords huddled in their mummified freeze after breadline bashers scolded them with the spoils of a new brand of pyramid scheming
Robbers of the coffin palaces stole the intimations of identity theft from today
Immortality and freedom were compelled to share a meaning like estranged siblings or bound dynasties
I(a).
Abydos how you coyly toyed with us with a diversion bordering on monolithic
Intelligent and thought provoking... Quite a powerful and strong piece.
Very interesting view point here thank you for sharing
this wonderful piece and thank you for your lovely review and comment.
Interesting stanza's and mind set here I Enjoyed these lines.
Continuity
your filibuster egg of sand
dazzled curiosity
with creaky shell of hints
heaped upon the tedium
of knowledge's unfurl undeterred
by encyclopedic impatience
Assurances of rip(Van Winkl)ed
economics shooed paper strings of
revelation like anarchy-powered
taxes summoning a foreword
to anachronistic campaigns
of environmental friendliness
Blessings. kindred poet
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Thanks so much for the kind words kindred...I'm glad that this piece spoke to you as it did...blessi.. read moreThanks so much for the kind words kindred...I'm glad that this piece spoke to you as it did...blessings :)
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I enjoyed reading this write thank you. I as a child loved Rip van Wrinkle But I liked how you p.. read moreI enjoyed reading this write thank you. I as a child loved Rip van Wrinkle But I liked how you put it into different contexts in that line. You're very welcome. it's my pleasure always. blessings.
kindred poet
Greed....power...politics...all seem to be woven into this piece. The world has a way of forgetting the pain of the past. Especially when it is the average mans suffering. We always loop back to the same mistakes over and over at the expense of who truly builds our nations. Your writing always makes me think deeper and longer....;-)
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I suppose it's a case of those ignoring history being doomed to repeat it...truth be told, this didn.. read moreI suppose it's a case of those ignoring history being doomed to repeat it...truth be told, this didn't come out the way I imagined it in my head, but I guess it makes its point just the same...so glad you enjoyed it my friend, thank you ;)
Yep, that about covers everything. It is unbelievable watching the world lose what little mind it has left and those who lead us are power angry. This excellent and sobering Kub. God help us all cause he is going to be the only one who can.
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I wonder if there is any mind left to lose at this point my friend...so glad that this one spoke to .. read moreI wonder if there is any mind left to lose at this point my friend...so glad that this one spoke to you as it did...thank you as always :)
it happened then, it happens now...prosperity burns a hole in our pockets or in our leaders' pockets and we end up broke...like old kingdoms, like new kingdoms...like our state which is in such a mess...one of the old pharoahs could do just as good a job being governor as ours does.
this poem is retroactive.---
deep, and deeply embedded in modern times even with its ancient setting.
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True words my friend...so glad this poem resonated with you...thank you Jacob.
Wanted to say, holy Egyptology,Benji (Frieda's name for you since I didn't see her comment and she is so gonna break my knees)... enjoyed you ancient and modern pyramid schemes.. cleaver weaving of yesterday and today.. have seen this article you mention and will now read.. Steve, have you seen any of the new Cosmos series??? It's very good and the appropriate polemical edge... you might enjoy it.
Loved those last two verses.. the coy Abydos!!!
~~redzone
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Haha Well she's been busy lately so I think you're safe in calling me that till whenever she gets ba.. read moreHaha Well she's been busy lately so I think you're safe in calling me that till whenever she gets back :P I've seen a few headlines pop up here and there but I've been on the shelf health-wise for the last couple of weeks so I haven't read much, I'll have to check that stuff out though...so glad you enjoyed this one my friend, many thanks :)
Being predominantly an emotionally-inspired poetic writer myself, I find your writing to be most intriguing. The depth in each piece is intellectually stimulating and I find myself most fortunate to continuously experience enlightenment with every read of your work. I hope one day to be further along in my capability as a writer to encapsulate, as you do, such an extensive plethora of muses. Spectacular write!
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Thanks so much Phoenix, I'm truly humbled by your kind words :) I'm still an emotional writer first .. read moreThanks so much Phoenix, I'm truly humbled by your kind words :) I'm still an emotional writer first and foremost, and I do think my best stuff is emotion-based, but I minored in History while I was at school so every once in a while I come across something that inspires me to write about it...the Seven Wonders never fail to pique my curiosity haha I've been writing for a long time, about seventeen years now, and sometimes you get impatient waiting for the muse so you have to improvise ;)
I like how you bind the ancient robberies with the robberies of today particularly the pyramid scheming, at least that's how I read it, that was my take, great write...
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You're spot-on my friend...so glad you enjoyed it, many thanks.
And still we build edifices on the backs of men and wonder why the wage they are not paid is not enough. There is no immortality for those who build their monoliths in the blood and tears of the poor. I think they currently reside on Wall Street and their god of worship is money but there is no afterlife for raping the public. I felt the ancient setting was a template for the worship that has befallen this country and the workers mere slaves who survive at the largess of the FILTHY rich. I love history.
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I love the review you've offered up here my friend...it's perfect, and could be a poem in and of its.. read moreI love the review you've offered up here my friend...it's perfect, and could be a poem in and of itself. I minored in History many moons ago and there are a handful of topics I picked up along the way that became obsessions, the pyramids being one of them. Of course they get written about regularly so it was a challenge in trying to offer a unique perspective, so I'm glad I was able to convey those parallels so clearly...thanks for reading and relating as well :)
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