ELEMENTAL REVOLUTION

03 26 14

Another wooden child
sacrificed to the dragon box of
seasonal co-existence
Appeasement for offense taken
to the whitest and wettest
Canadian Winter on record
Whitest and wettest
crows the sleet-tentacled wind
in environmental triumph
Sympathy for a clan of
beleaguered windows sidetracks
self-contained woebegone excerpts
such as an acknowledgement
of the mistake of eye-rolling
at the insistence
of the cold-as-hell oxymoron
One lambaste for the mere assumption
and another for the fireplace
that has learned to draft-dodge
saddened insurgences into its source
of mind and mood and visual peace
Alone there is no genuine retort capable
of laminating this elemental revolution
beneath the patinas of ice
already manifesting
on indoors innards on storm doors
like poisoned blood retrieved from a fridge
The fire has snatched and sucked in
its mesmerization
and deposited a changeling
of a snake-eyed lonely gawk
Alone there is no plea of company
to be entered
The coma that's etherized electricity
supplements a necessity of flame
feeding its humanized dragons
expected to be full and forgiving
of having to settle for the force-feed
of an industrial reincarnation

Author's Note

Reviews

[Gleb Zavlanov]

Wow. This is such a complex, innovative poem, I have no idea what to say, and I had to read it two or three times to finally grasp the overall message. I personally like winter, but from your accounts, it sounds more like an arctic apocalypse. Anyways, this is yet another great poem, superbly written and flawlessly intertwined with a complex message. Wonderfully done Steve!

[kublakhan27]

I do happen to love Winter, just not this one, it's been relentless and we haven't gotten a sniff of Spring yet haha So glad that you enjoy and understand my work Gleb...it means a lot knowing someone can tap into the essence of what's on my mind. Thanks again :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Whitest and wettest... yep, that sums up this winter perfectly, Steve. You'd think that the cold would be invigorating, but when it is unceasing, it is monotonous; So many days without warmth, and the heart becomes chilled indeed...

[kublakhan27]

Winter has always been my favourite season, there is just therapeutic about it when it comes to me, but even I'm crying uncle at this point...this Winter has gone from invigorating to excruciating on more levels than one...as always you know just where I'm coming from :)

[FlamingPhoenix]

Brrrr! You keep blowing my mind with every piece that you write. I took over a decade off from writing and 2014 brought writing back into my life. It's writers like you and pieces like this that inspire me to continue. Thank you for sharing!

[kublakhan27]

It makes me happy knowing I can inspire someone with my writing, so glad I can contribute in some way :) For the record, I've been writing since 1997 so I'm hardly a natural haha Thanks so much for the suppport my friend :)

[Lyn Anderson]

I always forget you are Canadian too until you reference it. Anyway, great write as always, and I admit it, I am partial to the parts about our current winter.1

[kublakhan27]

I think we're all in that boat regarding this winter haha Thanks for the support as always, glad you enjoyed it :)

[redflutterby]

I feel your pain Steve...its been one of the whitest and wettest winters here as well. One might think that those snow days I sat home from work would have produced something amazing but no the case. Instead my muse has been mia and ive been up and down emotionally. Let's hope spring brings both of us some relief. ;-)

[kublakhan27]

I'm sure hoping for that, for both of us ;) This one had nothing to do with a muse though...I'm living this one in 3-D practically. We are both riding an emotional yo-yo right now but hopefully the Spring will reward us for our frustrations...if not, I may never write another happy poem again haha

[icelandicblue]

I write my best poetry when I am miserable. This winter has been a very good muse. I see she has slipped into your hearth and stirred up all sorts of fabulous imagery:

Alone there is no genuine retort capable
of laminating this elemental revolution
beneath the patinas of ice
already manifesting
on indoors innards on storm doors
like poisoned blood retrieved from a fridge

[kublakhan27]

I'm not surprised given how much we have in common my friend...the winter has always been a good muse and I write most of my stuff in the winter months...I can never recall such a despondent winter though. So glad you enjoyed it, thank you as always for taking the time to review me...a lot of people don't.

[icelandicblue]

Don't feel bad. I have received around 2400 reviews but I've given over 4,000. People come and go it will get better. You are out the reciprocating. Give those seeds time to grow.

[kublakhan27]

Haha It's just that after two years here, nothing has changed. I've been published and am a poetry editor for a magazine, yet I long for acceptance from this place and it will always be a thorn in my side, and my heart, without getting too melodramatic. But I know I have my friends and of course you are one, and that gets me through :)

[icelandicblue]

I have never been published and that must be absolutely awesome.

[kublakhan27]

It took years and a lot of rejection before it happened...I know you have it in you as well if you're patient, your writing is the kind that a lot of magazines look for :)

[icelandicblue]

Thanks ; )

[Frieda P]

You've come a long way baby from that guy who adored this season, some brittle and cold lines here, also some that resonate in my heady resistance. Goes from cold to lukewarm and ends up on fire.

The coma that's etherized electricity
supplements a necessity of flame
feeding its humanized dragons
expected to be full and forgiving

I think you managed to come full circle with this one...need to read this over again to get the full effect Dali, you painted outside the lines again Benji. ;-) xo

[kublakhan27]

My dear friend, thank you so much...this just hasn't been a Winter to remember, even though it hasn't let me down in terms of creativity...the creativity just isn't as happy this time around. Even for me it takes a while for quickly-written pieces to fully take shape in my mind. It won't take as long for this one to sink in though. I can't thank you enough Mrs.R :) xo

[Frieda P]

It certainly has been, it's about 19 degrees here tonight with the wind chill factor, thankfully your poetry warm'd my heart. ;-) Always a pleasure dear Benji. xo

[kublakhan27]

That makes me happy my sweet friend :) xo