ONLY IF CARRIE IS GOING

03 09 14

I dare you to invite
my derision to a party
Take a pacemaker
to a polar bear dip instead

And that is as close
to a poetization
or as I call it
an exploitation
of our origin as you will get

What an origin
The only reason for humanity
is shaped like a fist

Yes keep the pacemaker
Put it in a dying movie star
or a high school athlete
Popularity is impervious
to social blinders worn
on those sporadic occasions
when people that ridicule me
say just be yourself dude

The last party
I was invited to
featured my pants being
lowered by the inviter
Don't bother putting it in him
Nothing to save
The purpose ridiculed

Author's Note

The avatar is a sketch of one of my tattoos.

Reviews

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You see, I had to come back because the last time I read you I was captivated. This one seals the deal :) Some people just stand out. You are resounding! Unique, and that is why you were forced to write this. A voice for the outstanding. I think you made them feel inferior and so they had to make fun of it to appear bigger. Bask in your uniqueness, dear poet, it stands alone brilliantly!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Lynn, I can't tell you how much this review means to me :) I'm just happy knowing I can write stuff that speaks to people :)

[Kleio13]

I would be mad if someone pulled down my pants too dude. Very detailed and descriptive write of anger.

K.

[kublakhan27]

Haha Yeah there was no shortage of anger here my friend...it's a miracle I don't write something like this every day...glad you liked it :)

[Zahra]

Wow liked this piece a lot. Clever and effective. Wonderfuly penned

[kublakhan27]

So glad you enjoyed it, many thanks for the kind words.

[Vidya Bacchus]

It often amazes me how mean and unfeeling people can be towards one another.You have penned this so very well KK.That is one of your tattoos very cool

[kublakhan27]

I learned about cynicism at a pretty young age, and adulthood certainly hasn't given me any reasons to reconsider my convictions...thanks so much Vidya, glad you like the tattoo as well :)

[Vidya Bacchus]

You are welcome Steve .We can only hope that some people would evolve into better humans.

[FlamingPhoenix]

LOVE IT! I find this piece uniquely different from many of your others works that I've read, but equally well penned, and lest I forget...BRILLIANT! Excellent accompanying song choice I might add!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Phoenix, this one had a bit of bite to it, which probably goes without saying haha So glad you enjoyed the song and the poem...your support means everything :)

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

WOW, amazing. This poem is beautiful, you are very talented.

Kaze~

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much for the kind words Kaze :)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

Your very welcome. :-)

[David Scott]

The social strata is a poor measure of human value. It seems a perversion of all we claim to value. Good is hidden in evil and intention is not even a consideration as animals act out hidden in the bodies disconnected from their own intellect...
No thank you indeed!

[kublakhan27]

Yes, people tend to let youth off the hook when it comes to such matters, saying well they don't know any better...I didn't buy it then and I never will buy it for as long as I'm alive, that's how jaded I am towards those years. Many thanks my friend, you have a level of understanding of my writing that few readers have matched.

[icelandicblue]

Why can't we celebrate the unique. Would I want to be in a roomful of me's? There is beauty in the differences but we have not yet evolved enough to appreciate those who are different. I mourn that anyone could be exposed to such cruelty. Where are their hearts? Where is their humanity? It's a powerful poem. The world is full of bullies.

[kublakhan27]

I can only sigh in sympathy in light of all the points you've made here...all of these questions crowded my mind as I wrote this, along with a fair bit of bitterness...so glad you understood where I was coming from my friend, thank you.

[Lyn Anderson]

I LOVE this. A very clever write, with a great sarcastic, funny feel.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much my friend...this one was written against a backdrop of many emotions, and readers can pick from the shelves whichever emotions resonate the most.

[Rita L. Sev]

I gave up on fitting in back in middle school, and a few years later emerged with an armor of sarcasm and that "I don't give a damn" attitude. If only they knew that "Just be yourself" is not solid advice to someone who is still trying to figure out who they are... I wasn't at this party, Steve, but I feel the burn coming through...

[kublakhan27]

I would be a liar if I said that the burn has subsided my friend...just being yourself is a pathetic myth that was force-fed to me all through my youth, and I will take it to my grave with the utmost resentment. Thankfully I'm here now with friends that accept me and my writing for what it is, and even though my grudges will likely never die, this is what truly matters to me now :)