THE CHILL IS INTEGRATED

THE CHILL IS INTEGRATED

A Poem by kublakhan27
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03 06 14

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I'm not fishing orally for compliments
in this sea of self-pity
yet I have this chill
that curls and recedes on the clockwork
of the rippled intermissions
when my skin is open to the Sun
Its heat keeps me honest
but the chill is integrated
in my most embarrassing outbursts
so that guarantees a return
of those waves in which I languished
indifferently and existential
I dog-paddle in a silly celebration
of no regrets / but like a drunk
stuck between senses
I'm a waterlogged fisherman
campaigning for a hook

© 2014 kublakhan27


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Its heat keeps me honest
but the chill is integrated
in my most embarrassing outbursts ...

We live in such fear of our own insecurities, and do such crazy things to divert attention from them... I like that last image, the waterlogged fisherman. Every fish'll bit if you've got good bait... but some days we'll take the scraps...

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

So true Rita...you know me pretty well now, and if you've ever seen my statuses or comments elsewher.. read more
Rita L. Sev

10 Years Ago

Getting better is always good - any step in a more whole, content and balanced direction is a good s.. read more
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much for the support my friend, it goes a longer way than anyone can realize :)



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Such a stunning write, you have a gift that just shines like a diamond. :-D

Kaze~

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Kaze...your support and kind words mean more to me than you know :)
♔ CrownedDevil ☾

10 Years Ago

Your very welcome. :-)
Its heat keeps me honest
but the chill is integrated
in my most embarrassing outbursts ...

We live in such fear of our own insecurities, and do such crazy things to divert attention from them... I like that last image, the waterlogged fisherman. Every fish'll bit if you've got good bait... but some days we'll take the scraps...

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

So true Rita...you know me pretty well now, and if you've ever seen my statuses or comments elsewher.. read more
Rita L. Sev

10 Years Ago

Getting better is always good - any step in a more whole, content and balanced direction is a good s.. read more
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much for the support my friend, it goes a longer way than anyone can realize :)
Great use of metaphor in this wonderfully written poem my friend. I believe we all need reinforcement at times...the support of those around us. Another amazing poem for my library.

:) Julie

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Julie, you always give me a confidence boost with your kind words :)
You always take the most intangible things and bring such beauty...You have that gift of rehabbing these simplistic emotions to the page with such air of coincidence.. amazing piece.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much my friend for the kind and inspiring words.
"I'm not fishing orally for compliments
in this sea of self-pity
yet I have this chill
that curls and recedes on the clockwork "

- Steve, this is an awesome take on our need for reinforcement! Our fear of lack of acceptance...the chill we keep feeling time and again...

Again...

"I dog-paddle in a silly celebration
of no regrets / but like a drunk
stuck between senses
I'm a waterlogged fisherman
campaigning for a hook"

We may try to just enjoy and just be in the placid moment...but we never stop looking for more!

You outdid yourself with this one. It's a brilliant potrayal of a poet's psyche! It worked so much for me. Thanks for sharing your feelings!





Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much for the kind words Divya...I'm happy to know that this one resonated :)
Hmmm...sounds like a case of insecurity Steve. Dont feel bad...ive battled that myself lately. Among other things. My muse has left me and my health is crap. But I'm struggling along because its all I can do. Keep your chin up friend. x

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Red, I'm so happy to hear from you again...I've worried about you and still do. As for me, I'm noth.. read more
redflutterby

10 Years Ago

Of course I will. And your concern warms my heart but dont worry. I'm doing a little better tonight... read more
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

It's the worse, I know...when you depend so much on words for therapy, it's depressing when they're .. read more
This is so neat. Great imagery and metaphor, although I am stumped on fishing orally -- I am wondering if you meant aurally? Anyway, maybe not, the orally gives me a much more graphic image, anyway, great write.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha Nope it's orally my friend, which is a bit more graphic, though I do like aurally too...Glad yo.. read more
Lyn Anderson

10 Years Ago

a lot more graphic, lol.:)
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Haha It's not out of the question that I will alternate the two in the future :)
To want/need affirmations in life is human...some of us want/need it more than others.
Judging from all your reviews, you are one hell of a fisherman...
Genius work of art my friend!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Many thanks for the kind words RichGee :)
RichGee

10 Years Ago

My pleasure
the most spontaneous writes i find are always the best ones.. sending you my freely given compliments on this heartfelt poem..... :o)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much Stella, much appreciated :)
Stella Armour

10 Years Ago

My pleasure..........
We all have multi-faceted personalities...times when we need the pats on the back and times when we retreat like turtles into our shells. When posting a poem, we are putting ourselves out there.....will we get approval or be ignored? Difficult to predict sometimes. Still, we do it.....we dive in and take the chance. You know what? The water is usually just the right temperature at the WC! I liked this one. Consider this an un-fished for compliment! :) Lydi**

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

A perfect review my friend...in my time on WC, about a year and a half now, I started with a pretty .. read more
Lydia Shutter

10 Years Ago

The truth is, there are so many responsibilities in life, I find I don't always have the time to kee.. read more
kublakhan27

10 Years Ago

I know just how you feel Lydi, I'm not sure how some folks find the time they do to be here so often.. read more

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Nova Scotia, Canada



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