FOLLOW THE LUNATIC ROAD ( COLLAB WITH FRIEDA)

Blackbird talons dug into heart
wrapped around the time of day
mocking lunatics chanted in braille
implored a wracking head's twist
live wires collided in chilled thunder
Implicit agitation leaning on controlled aggression
The Sun behind a fog of snow
longs for the alarm of Spring's emerald chimes
A knock on the door of inner peace is answered
by the barrel of a frozen gun
amber brick roads led to basked cavorting
rollicking in roughhouse ports of call
cruised steamy underpasses gate
emerged in a heyday of peaked poppies 
Survival is the new orgasm
Every deep breath a monolith
floundering between a sway and a foundation

A diva's shimmy sparks an earthquake
in decorum's sodium savannah

arms wide open in a clasped grasp

surrendered to sunlight's cornflake tang

cobalted moons reluctantly received

sympathy's tea in soothsayer's ruddy wine

Philosophers dance with razors in their shoes

Logos eat the language with a virus' appetite

Daylight will be burned up

and then there will be lightning

the lone survivor of age like dinosaur bones

pine for grandiose calamity's remorse 

moments of clarity in curtained visitations

afflictions cross negated in a pig's fly retort

sanity rearranged in redemption's snappy riposte

counter quips arresting grace's resurrection 

Author's Note

Thank you Frieda :)

Reviews

[icelandicblue]

The lunatic road is lined with irony and unexpected surprises. It has a most frenetic feel to it and I think that I would rather drive down this road than stroll down it:

The Sun behind a fog of snow
longs for the alarm of Spring's emerald chimes
A knock on the door of inner peace is answered
by the barrel of a frozen gun
amber brick roads led to basked cavorting
rollicking in roughhouse ports of call
cruised steamy underpasses gate
emerged in a heyday of peaked poppies

It certainly is a wild ride. You two take energy to another level!

[Frieda P]

I think we were driving at intense speeds whilst we were writing this one Anne, so happy you picked both of our lines....! That means they melded, color me goo goo g'joob delighted, thanks muchly!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Anne, glad you enjoyed it :)

[Frontier]

"Survival is the new orgasm
Every deep breath a monolith" - I like this, it seems kinda sad to me, even kinda pathetic. I'm not sure if that's what you were trying to communicate.

"Blackbird talons dug into heart
wrapped around the time of day" - I also like this, wrapped around the time of day, how we lose sight of many things because we are focused on one thing.
Your writing it seems, is very descriptive, I guess that is your "style" but sometimes I feel it can be a bit too much. I know its not easy but I try to write some of my images with the least amount of adjectives. instead trying to think of an image or something that says what I want to say without describing it, I hope you see what I mean. But if you are doing this on purpose then by all means disregard what I'm saying! lol. :)

[kublakhan27]

I think there is an element of sadness to everything we write, sometimes consciously, sometimes not. It's hard to explain...perhaps they are excessive in certain areas, but yes, it is done on purpose. Sometimes we go for ideas that simply sound good phonetically, sometimes we go for other things that defy description. I can only say that we have a lot in common :)

[Chandradhish Ghosh]

I must say I have read it four times already...and yet I feel it is less to comprehend it entirely...what I shall do is read it afresh some other day and write another review...What I loved about the poem is the endless description of a lunatic's mind...flashes after flashes...reminds me of weed...

[kublakhan27]

I offer a subtle nod of sympathy towards your final statement and what it reminded you of haha It does the imagination good sometimes. When Frieda and I write, we don't necessarily go for concrete meanings, which is probably obvious...sometimes we aim for words and images that work on a phonetic level, while leaving as much room for interpretation as possible. I find myself reading our pieces countless times and they often offer new meanings with each successive read, even though I was involved in the writing. So glad you enjoyed it...many thanks.

[RichGee]

What can I say? The Dynamic Duo ace it once more!
Mocking lunatics chanted in braille.....
Awesome!

[kublakhan27]

I also find myself asking what I can say haha It's been pretty cool and humbling to receive the accolades that have been given to us for our work. So glad we were able to entertain you again Rich :)

[RichGee]

Thank you both.

[Tai Ryens]

Chanting in braille and the magnificent shine of a sun held behind thick clouds that obscure the vision, agitation and controlled aggression, and survival as an orgasm. Survival is the pure pleasure of the life being lived by the speakers, because that's all they aim for: survival. Passions obscured and potential held back, you both write this poem with intense brilliancy fitting into one another hand in hand; well done to the both of you, I must say. Survival is not worth the effort, let 'em out and let 'em rip apart the world as you should be doing if you have the capabilities.

"Do not try to be pretty. You weren’t meant to be pretty; you were meant to burn down the earth and graffiti the sky. Don’t let anyone ever simplify you to just “pretty.”"

[kublakhan27]

Many thanks from both of us for the wonderful review, glad you enjoyed it :)

[Frieda P]

Oh my, what an engaging review, muchly appreciated Tai!

[♔ CrownedDevil &#..]

Love the poem. Nicely written. :-)

Kaze~

[kublakhan27]

Glad you enjoyed it Kaze, thank you :)

[♔ CrownedDevil ☾]

All good. :-D

[Angel]

Wow, just reading that wore me out...
Fabulous, guys!
Knowing you both as writers, I would never have guessed that your voices would blend so perfectly!
I am completely in awe...

And now, I think I need a nap...

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Angel, I don't know where the chemistry comes from but we have it :) I'll be sure to pass this along to Frieda as well, I know she'll be thrilled.

[Angel]

You guys are both amazing writers, but ordinarily your styles are so different. But here, you blend as one voice. I am deeply impressed.
My one try at a collaboration turned out rather well...except, as we went along, my voice sort of took over, while his faded to a whisper. I didn't mean to monopolize the story...it just sort of happened...

[kublakhan27]

It's a delicate activity, no doubt about that...somehow we find middle ground, and it actually comes surprisingly natural :)

[Frieda P]

Thanks so much Angel....sorry I didn't get to this one sooner.

[Angel]

Honey, I'm still so far behind from being so sick, I don't think I'm ever gonna catch up...

[Frieda P]

I hear you, same here...hope you're back to your old chipper self Angel. x

[Angel]

I'm getting there...doc is sending me to a heart specialist....UGH!! I keep forgetting how old I am...

[Roger Turgeon]

OMG wow!!! Every phrase could be a poem in and of itself. Its almost too much... I am on overload. I couldn't wait for the next line as I consumed the previous.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Roger, your kind words mean the world :)

[Baby Ricochet]

Kind of reminded me of the Beatles

[kublakhan27]

Funny thing is we didn't settle on that song till the poem was completed...just writing it was a magical mystery tour of sorts...glad you enjoyed it.

[s y e]

I think you both know it takes me a couple of reads to understand the full meaning of your poems when you write together. This was deep and really I agree with Anne.

This was really you guys. I couldn't pick out a favourite line(s)

[kublakhan27]

Thanks Noodlebop...instinct is a big part of our work, and we even have to give them several reads before we're entirely sure that we've said what we're trying to say haha So glad you enjoyed it.

[Frieda P]

I'm with noodles, I have no frackin idea what this is about. ;-) Grazie peanut. x

[s y e]

Ha, gurl you're supposed to know! You wrote it, dunderheid! x

[Frieda P]

One would think haha....I do, just seeing if you're paying attention. ;-)

[s y e]

I was just going to laugh but I don't have the strength so my internet laugh will do right now. x

[kublakhan27]

Haha The important thing is that it sounds right, right Mrs.R? ;P I actually do have some ideas on the meaning but it would spoil the fun to give it all away haha

[s y e]

S'pose so. Well good job anyway guys. Another good one.

[Frieda P]

I know what the fook I was saying but not too sure about Salvador Dali over there. ;-P

[kublakhan27]

Haha Contrary to how it usually appears, I know very much what I'm talking about ;)

[Frieda P]

Yeah that's even scarier. hahaha

[Praveeta]

Excellent write. Great collaboration.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks very much Praveeta :)

[Frieda P]

So jazz'd you enjoyed our insanity Praveeta. :-)

[Praveeta]

You are welcome. Yes, I did :)