BLATANT IRONY THIS TIME

02 15 14

I talk myself
into the consideration that
anyone inclined to do so
could talk themselves into
a straitjacket patchwork of
doldrums
impervious to the overruling
of the snow by the Sun

I'm so good at what I do
that I swear I've talked
my own shadow into
hovering solo
just as I was conjuring
the confidence to tickle
my living room floor
with shadow dancing
undisturbed by the absurdity
of self-contained flattery

Nonetheless I laugh
uncontested by the silence
but only Narcissism deniers
like the sound of their own voice
and so my laugh
sounds like a sneer
as I fail to forgive
my own shadow
for making a wall
flower of me

Author's Note

Reviews

[K.N. Lorenzen]

I really like this piece ! The unique imagery and the cynical, brutal self-irony. It seems trustworthy and honest, without being pathetic or "pure" confession. I hope I have complimented your skills before!
Thanks for the turbulent, poetically brilliant ride.

K.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much K, your kind words are a huge confidence booster, and much appreciated :)

[K.N. Lorenzen]

We all need those sometimes :) and your work certainly deserves the credit.

[Rita L. Sev]

Lost to ourselves, even in our own little world... this is a brilliant metaphor, each stanza bringing its own image and lesson. You always bring your A-game, Steve, and this one gets extra credit!

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Rita, you always make me smile with your reviews :)

[David Scott]

Yowser Kubla!

Last stanza was brilliant! The other two were good as well, but came of a little paranoid as I read them. Still, you pulled it tightly together at the landing of this write and gave the whole poem a solid structure in doing so.

Great write! Scary smart mind.

[kublakhan27]

Haha There was no shortage of paranoia, I'll admit that, and I guess you can see it in the words. I suppose that last stanza is as close to a moment of clarity as I could hope to enjoy. So glad you enjoyed it ,thank you David :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

I must confess, I talk to myself too! lol
I seem to do this in my car, when I'm driving... and I bet people think I'm crazy! HAHA!...
mainly I'm bitching THEM out... and I get mad at myself sometimes (I have a slight case of road rage, can you tell?) (he he)....enough about me...

Your words pierce though the dark and encapsulate the insanity of insecurity... I can relate all too well, this perpetuating emotion...

Stay grounded, my sweet... and know you are NOT alone.. (((hugs)))~xoxo~

[kublakhan27]

I think we all get caught singing behind the wheel at some point Robbie, and that includes the ones that look at you like you're crazy, when they're really just in denial that they do it themselves ;P

Well if there's anything I'm specializing in these days it's insanity and insecurity...I won't use this space to start gushing on it though...I'm here to thank you for reading and understanding me as you do. I'll never feel alone as long as you and my friends are here...thank you my sweet :) (((hugs))) xoxo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

It's a pleasure to connect with you, my dear friend... your writings are "truth"... and I truly appreciate it. ~xoxo~:)

[Traci]

This is an excellent portrayal of how our true selves become lost. From the imagery to your word choice, emotions are felt, making this a new favorite.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Traci, it means a lot to me knowing I can speak to you with my writing, given some of the things we have in common. Nice to see you again :)

[Traci]

Your words always speak volumes as they are a true reflection of your soul. The raw emotion and honesty is felt...will always be here to read your work, dear friend. Much love always.

[redflutterby]

We lose ourselves all too often....we deny our own truths and limit our possibilities. ;-)

Your writing never disapoints me. Its like peering into your mind and watching the wheels turn. Love this poem...you are incredible!!

[kublakhan27]

You always bring a big goofy grin to my face Red, your support means the world :)

[Rachelle]

Truly ironic but how many times have we forgotten our true selves in the pursuit of the externals? The truth in this witty work cannot be denied nor dismissed.

[kublakhan27]

Too many to count in my case...thanks so much Rachelle, for reading and understanding.

[Rachelle]

De nada, kublakhan.

[Lyn Anderson]

The last four lines do it for me -- ties it up nicely.

[kublakhan27]

Thanks very much KL.

[Travis Gibson (poetic h..]

Bravo! You truly have the wonderful ability to write from a complex state of mind, while keeping it reachable. Wonderful piece.

[kublakhan27]

Many thanks for the kind words PH :)