NO IRONY WHATSOEVER

02 11 14

There are times when I get so
fixated on a concrete message
that mirth extraneously manifests
in my aura like menthol
in the cavern of a sore throat
The medicine of rolling eyes
scold me for self-imposed sickness
My lens of disposition is hi-def clear
yet my fingertips have been dulled
by my oral chainsaw rendering it
impossible to get the cap off
Am I bearing my poetic soul in the hope
of fusing with coincidental souls?
Or am I hiding my insecurities behind it
while luring innocent witnesses into
the brainwash booth of my shortcomings?
Colloquial communication is an alien to me
camouflaged in the company
of smartphone-equipped commuters
I am not a touch screen but
the signal that defines its purpose
Sometimes

Author's Note

Captcha: overveil

Reviews

[Renée]

Sometimes I read a piece.. and it is like I need to savor it for all the "flavors" ( for lack of a better word) it contains.. I read pieces aloud..(several times btw) this one rolls off my tongue so easily and with each line leaves me with cells of a movie before my eyes.. I love your last line.. for me it seems to want to scream "hey look I am human see me… then insecurity quietly steps in with "sometimes" ..
just my thoughts… but it is a great piece !

[kublakhan27]

So glad I could write something that spoke to you on a deep level...it was a deep piece to write too, and took a few days for me to get it where I felt comfortable with it. Thanks so much for the support Renee :)

[Renée]

the depth from where this came shows. the waiting till you are comfortable.. I think of that period as a "proofing period" that is what we call the resting and rising of bread before it is baked..( pottery is another example) things that are a true part of us..need that time..
It was my pleasure to read your thoughts ( :

[Angi]

Steve,
This is what I am talking about, man! You have such a way with words. You have described that lost feeling so well. The images this conjures are spot on. I love that you used 'concrete message' in the second line. I can see the menthol vapors rolling through this piece. 'Mirth' and 'rolling eyes' and 'scold' set the tone for 'self-imposed sickness.' There is something I really like about the use of 'high-def' right here. The metaphor is maintained throughout and it works so well. The last three lines are such an exposure. Honest. That last line, 'sometimes' is so vulnerable. Very nicely done, Steve. This is a keeper.

Angi~

[kublakhan27]

Angi, so nice to see you again, I've missed you :) You always interpret my words and feelings with pinpoint precision. I'm actually quite fond of this piece, and knowing me like you do, you know that this is a sentiment that you don't often hear from me haha But it was a great exercise in catharsis...I was seriously down in the dumps for about two weeks, and I felt like a piano came off my shoulders when I wrote this. Maybe I can go back to mischievous stuff soon haha Thanks so much my friend, and I'm so glad that you can relate to this :)

[Angi]

I have missed you, too! I really do connect with so much of your work. We are two peas in the same pod on some days, you know! This one is one of your better works. I would think about raking it with a fine toothed comb for maximum tighness and send it out to some journals. This is very fresh to this readers eyes. There are some surprising word combos here. You never know.

[kublakhan27]

Oh this is definitely on my list of potential submissions for publications...I'm pretty confident that I can get this one to print somewhere at some point in the future. We do connect with each others' work for sure...I was taking a break from your work just because you were away for a while, but I will likely revisit it soon :)

[Angi]

No hurry! I did just find out that one of my oldies got accepted last night. It will be in the March issue of Prune Juice! You still editing for a mag? I know this one will make the cut somewhere. It is really good. You have a listing of your published work? I would love to google you!

[kublakhan27]

Very cool, I'm glad to hear that my friend :) Actually I just found out last night that I've got two going into the next issue of White Ash magazine, the first time for that...yep still editing, we've finished this issue and we're hoping to get it out in the Spring. I can send you the links for the mags I'm in but I don't know if you'll get to see my pages online...I can give you a list of the ones that are in them though :)

[Angi]

Awesome on your two last night!!! I have not heard of that mag. I like discovering new ones. I am happy to hear you are still editing. I would love any links or lists you have. Send me anything you can!!

[kublakhan27]

Sounds good, I have the list in one of my books here, I just have to find it :)

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Again, you blow my mind with your Brilliance!!

How I connect with your words, is amazing and intriguing!...

We all have our insecurities... don't be fooled by the ones who seem over-confident...
they too, are compensating for lack of something.. perhaps we are all a little lonely in our façade...
or else why would we have to go through such technology... it's a damn headache!! lol
but we still endure it.... is it a (social) sickness?...I wonder...

Thought provoking write!... Very clever, my sweet!~xoxo~

[kublakhan27]

There are certainly no shortage of social sicknesses out there I would guess my dear friend...as always, I'm so glad you're able to tap into what I'm saying and feeling...it means more than I can say :) Thanks so much as always sweet Robbie :) xoxo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

Thank you for sharing your thoughts, Stevie.. always inspiring!~xoxo~

[kublakhan27]

The inspiration is mutual my dear friend :) xoxo

[Robbie~xoxo~]

(((YOU)))~xoxo~

[Lydia Shutter]

Ever feel like you don't belong in the technological savvy world? Oh, yea, I do! People twitter and tweet and post and retweet....and I type on the blank screen. Our poetry is our medicine....I believe that. It helps us through the day and we CAN connect through words. There are those who identify with what others write and those who just enjoy the words....find them tangible. Self-imposed sickness? Those who believe emotional and psychological problems are fabrications of an idle mind are ignorant....always remember that. Their rolling eyes can not see what you do....and they never will. They are the ones who should be pitied. Never stop writing....if poetry is the pill you need, you are not alone! Lydi**

[kublakhan27]

You have described with incredible precision my friend. I do approach the poetry of others in the same way...if I struggle to find meaning, I fall back on the phonetic element, which probably explains why I put so much focus on rhythm with my own stuff. You're so right on the emotion issue as well...I must constantly tell myself what you've said here. Thank you Lydi, for reading and understanding as well as you do :)

[Kenneth The Poet]

I'm surprised we haven't overdosed on binary numbers already.

[kublakhan27]

True that.

[MsJewel]

So many amazing lines in this poem - it's hard to pick a favorite. The more I read you, the more I get to know you. You write with depth and emotion, you write from your heart and every poem feels "real". This one is a keeper for me - into my favs.

:) Julie

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Julie, this one certainly came from deep within and I'm happy to know that I speak to you with my words. Your support and kind words mean everything :)

[redflutterby]

Sigh.....your melancholy runs swift and deep in this one. "I am not a touchscreen but a signal which defines it purpose.." . Yes we decide what we write and how much of ourselves we put into it. Every line in this poem speaks to me about our insecurities as writers and human beings. You are an amazingly talented man...and the things you struggle with touch my heart. x

[kublakhan27]

Thanks so much Red, you are a dear friend and you're always able to tap into my words and understand where I'm coming from :) x

[redflutterby]

Youre welcome and you always pick the best music!! We have very similar tastes. ;-)

[kublakhan27]

Haha Oh yes I knew that as well ;)

[redflutterby]

Lol....heard Rush on my way home today and for some reason I thought of you!!

[kublakhan27]

Haha That's cool, it's an accurate connection ;)

[redflutterby]

Lol...Limelight....I was singing along enthusiasticly and the lady in the car next to me was just staring with her mouth hanging open!! Probably thought I was nuts. Hahaha...

[kublakhan27]

Haha Good song...I think we all get caught singing in our cars from time to time ;P

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like the irony of the non-ironic title.

i am coughing out these words...sweating from my illness, letting you in to see the real me...

and yet...i pull the covers over my head, because i don't want you to catch what i have...

so i guess, you won't see it all..i must keep much of my sickness to myself...

poets can die from over exposure i think.

i just love the underlying theme in this camouflaged a bit within the dark humor.

nicely done...your poems always suck me in...and i am fascinated with the road you take.

[kublakhan27]

Haha I was waiting for someone to mention the title...thanks as always Jacob for your kind words and observations.

[A. Amos]

KK as being a huge fan of Johhny Cash , I can understand your thoughts and i truly hope you felt much better after taking whole thing out... Sharp and wit

[kublakhan27]

It was therapeutic for sure...thank you for understanding and enjoying the poem.

[A. Amos]

Pleasure and honor is all mine, you're most welcome

[s y e]

This is a good one Steveroo, it made me think for sure. A powerful message in this one, however, I don't think I would like to be anything like that... They have more germs than the toilet, no joke. Ha. Fact of the day....

Good one, Steve.

[kublakhan27]

Haha Thank you Noodlebop, this came from a place I hope I don't have to revisit any time soon...I agree, I wouldn't want to be like that either ;P I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Anand Sehgal]

A brilliant write of contrast , doubts and realization. Bravo Kubla :)
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[kublakhan27]

I'm glad you enjoyed it Anand, many thanks :)